This is a really interesting story so far. You've got a pretty unique plot and I was really drawn into the story. I though your characterization was really well done. I was a bit confused though, is Aunt Bathilda the same Bathilda Bagshot that is in the books?
The only problem I had with this story was that there were quite a few spelling errors. For example in the story summary you spelled boisterous as boystrus. Another thing was in this sentence here, "could go to Gringots, the wizard bank." where you spelled Gringotts as Gringots.
I would definitely recommend getting a beta reader to help fix those spelling and grammatical errors. But overall I really enjoyed this story and I'm looking forward to reading the next chapter.
If you need any help just ask or feel free to PM me on the forums.
CharlieAuthor's Response: Thanks Charlie
Yeah Aunt Bathilda is Bathinlda Bagshot and thanks for pointing out my errors ill fix them right away
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