UPDATE?! PEASE! I luff it! But Lou needs to pull
his head out of his arse and at least kiss her!Author's Response: Thanks! And haha, yeah, he does! I update quite frequently, so keep an eye out!(: ~ Janelle Report Review
Soo so so so so so so so good!!! I adore it!Author's Response: Thanks!(: ~ Janelle Report Review
I love James/OC
I think S'mae belongs with James. Louis tormented her too much to be ok.Author's Response: Haha yeah, that's true, but things can change ;D I love James/OC ships too, and I'm writing another if you wanna check it out!(: ~ Janelle Report Review
i quite like the story so far, only it is in parts a bit over-dramatic. Like, they start hysterically laughing at stuff, that isn't all that funny? And also, the muggle studies essay: it is very unlikely that students in Hogwarts, which is in Scotland as we know, would have to research football as in american football. Maybe Rugby, or actual football (soccer), don't you think? I just think it doesn't make much sense. But apart from that, good job.Author's Response: I'm American. Excuse my stupidity, lol(: I'm not very widely ranged in foreign stuff. It took me FOREVER to learn brittish slang. Bits by bits. I'm taking that into consideration, and I'm actually probably going to change some of that stuff you pointed out. My first critical review! I love it! Thanks!(: ~ Janelle(: Report Review
Hey! it's LittleLionGirl here!
Another amazing chapter and I cant wait to see more! I sooo saw James doing something like this..
Your spacing isn't all that annoying; it just requires you to double space in between paragraphs and since you have you thoughts spread out that way it just gives the allusion of too much spacing...Author's Response: Ahh, thanks! And yeah, I went through and figured Why not? It only made sense to have him warm up to her. And thanks, haha a few people complained to me about the spacing. I've been trying to narrow it back down to what it was before but no such luck quite yet. Thanks for another review! ~ LilyLou Report Review
Once you figure out the spacing issue, everything will be wonderful!!Author's Response: Haha, thanks!(: I've been trying, but it just simply won't let me send it unless it's like that. ~LilyLou Report Review
WHAT IS WITH THE SPACING ITS REALLY ANNOYINGAuthor's Response: Yeah, I know. I mentioned that in my author's note. It's telling me I HAVE to do that for some reason... dunno, been trying to figure it out. I'm really annoyed by it as well. :/ ~ LilyLou Report Review
Wow! Write more fast! That is all I am going to tell you. You are quite a tallented author you know..
LLGAuthor's Response: I'll have it up soon!(: And thanks so much.(: ~ LilyLou Report Review
Loved this story! My only thing was the spacing seemed huge for some reason... But ah well I still cant wait to read more!
LLGAuthor's Response: Haha yes, I had no idea why it was so spaced out. Aw well. And thank you!(: ~ LilyLou Report Review
I seriously love this story sooo much! I cant wait to see more and I hope you realize how great this is!
LLGAuthor's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so happy you love it(: ~Lily Lou Report Review
That was so good
cant wait for more!!Author's Response: Thank you, so much, Arianna1018! Report Review
Yes it did answer my question Ms. Lily Lou! I loved this chapter as I have with the others you have made. And of course- I am asking for more (gready of my I know.) It is an amazing story. I only wonder what Al's problem was... Anywho. Lovely work and I shall be back! (okay that sounded more dramatic in my head)
LLGAuthor's Response: Lol, glad to know it answered your question! It was a bit too much to answer in a response before, and I'm glad to hear it answered you. The next chapter is being validated currently! Al's problem... hmm... well, do you mean when he was wondering about Louis and S'Mae being civil? He just didn't believe it, if that's what you were referring to. Thanks! ~Lily Lou Report Review
Wow. I love the two chapters Lily Lou! Soo maany coussinns... Whats up with Louis anyhow? Lol please continue!
LLGAuthor's Response: Thank you so much, LittleLionGirl! I know, there are WAY too many cousins, lol, but I have to keep them all in the loop if the story is going to work out. Louis is a confusing character, I know. I did that on purpose, lol. But, the next chapter goes a little more in-depth with some Louis stuff, so maybe that will answer your question when the chapter is validated! Thanks!! ~Lily Lou Report Review
HA! The letters were the best part if I say so myself. They all rather fit into the person's personality. Great job on that.
Hope you update soon :)
10/10Author's Response: Thank you sooo much! I did try my best to fit the characters' personalities. I'm updating ASAP :) Report Review
awesome, i looove the character constellation !Author's Response: Thank You so much! :D Report Review
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