Flaming Phoenix,
Chapter 2 was as good as if not better than chapter 1. There still were missing capitals. I suspect now that you've written these two, you might be able to slow a bit and double check it, or perhaps someone will volunteer to beta for you. It seemed that in chapter 1 The Head, Kingsley, and the Weasleys needed an immediate accounting of what the three teens had been doing for the last 9 months. Now that the tale has been told it's time to slow down and regroup. There is still, loads of work to do. There was one more area I question. You had both Harry and Ron mention that they hadn't had a good meal since the Wedding. The three did spend a month at Grimmauld Place and Kreacher made sure they had great meals and then when they arrived at Shell Cottage they had proper nourishment. Granted that while on the run meals were lean and not always present. I'm sure they were all very thin. But they had good meals since leaving the Burrow, just not many.
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FlamingPhoenix,
A really good start to my favorite genre, AtB. The flow and content was excellent. Very canon like. If I have one complaint it would be the occasional lack of capitals on some names. Harry's in particular. I suspect it was more a typo, than lack of awareness and knowledge. I am anxious to read the rest. Bravo!
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Can't wait for the next chapter :)

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