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Review #1, by someone___1 Prologue

6th November 2012:
Whoa. What's going on?? I can't wait to find out in the next chapter! ;D

Author's Response: Hello!

The next chapter is in the queue now, so hopefully it will be published soon and will make the story a bit more.. sensical? This chapter was more of a prologue - an addition that wasn't really needed, but oh well! :P

Thank you for reading and reviewing! :)


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Review #2, by Gabriella Hunter Prologue

6th November 2012:
Hello!

I told you I would be here soon and so, here I am giving you your first review for something that is actually so mysteriously interesting that I couldn't look away from it!
I'm really fascinated by the flow that you have going on with the way you've written this, its almost like poetry and I found quite a few lines that I really enjoyed.

"Nothing more than a shimmering mist, smothering the survivors into its midst" That was a really good line! Sort of haunting too, which made me get all extra excited because I really love that sort of writing. I'm also wondering what happened to have Luna being interrogated in the first place by Aurors at the Ministry. Something tells me that its not anything good and I would like to know some more information about it! She seemed sort of out of it and I wondered if something had happened to her and if she was going to be all right!
Her descriptions of the Battle were really well-written too and I enjoyed how she saw the others through her eyes. It was a great bit of POV and pointed out why I honestly love her so much. :D
There were a few grammar issues I think somewhere in the beginning. I think in the second sentence of the first paragraph (Bear with me) there was "To new for their throats" but it should be "too new". I think that's all that I caught but its not like I can talk, mind you.
Anyway, I'm going to be looking forward to the rest of this story. Make sure to update me on the forums, I'm always lurking around there! This is a great first chapter too! Keep up the good work! :D
Much love,
Gabbie

Author's Response: Hi!
Thank you so much for volunteering to read the prologue to my story, and also for reviewing! It really means a lot!

Luna's part in the story won't take centre plot until much later, I'm afraid. This was more of a 'tada' chapter to intrigue the reader. Which, reading your review, seems to have worked slightly! :P

Awh, thank you very much. :) The next chapter is in the queue now and will hopefully explain quite a lot! It's from Charlie's POV. :D

Thank you again, Keira :)


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