Hey there! I must say,you had me intrigued from the start! You manage to intertwine the two different moments in time flawlessly. However, you do have some grammar issues, words out of order, that interrupt the fluency of the sentences. Otherwise, keep up the good work! :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review. I'll do my best to make the story more interesting. ;)

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Really good! Please keep writing, this is a great beginning to what could become an amazing story.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I hope you enjoy the next ones. :)

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I like it! :) keep writing!

Author's Response: thank you! :)

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Hello there!

Overall you did a good job! At the begining and in the middle you needed to make your characters more clear and I didn't understand what was happening in the begining!Was she talking about Ron or Draco? I also didn't understand why she ran back to Draco and then ran away from him? Apart from that you did an amazong job conveying the emotions of your characters and describing memories, locations and people. Well done again!
Kitty Potter
Pls check my story if you have time!
10/10

Author's Response: Hi! The concept of the story was to give the readers a bit of mystery to whom Hermione was pertaining to. So I just added a bit of confusing ideas to make it an interesting one. About running back to Draco, she was having difficult decisions on what emotions to choose. So yep, I think that's it. Thank you for the review anyways! :)

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