Can't wait for some Bella and Scorpius actionn :D

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Seriously amazing. Keep posting please!

Author's Response: Thank you! The next chapter is coming soon!
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You're an amazing author! Please please please write more!! I love it. It would be a privilege to me if you could even take a glance at the first few sentences of my story that I've started. I love your work and have read the story about Charlie and Tori and thought that was epic too :)

Author's Response: Aw, thank you so much! I'd love to look at your story! Just let me know what it's called.
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Tag! :)

So I think this is another awesome chapter. The dream at the beginning was very interesting: a flashback from Izzy's past? Foreshadowing of the future? I laughed out loud at the descriptions of her wild antics at the beginning: especially the swallowing goldfish bit though I felt a bit bad for laughing. Poor Mr Bubbles. It's funny that Sluggy hates her as well: I'm excited to see them clash in future chapters.

Hermione was sweet in giving Izzy a gift, and it's nice that she has Rose's family there to support her. It reminded me a bit of Harry and the Weasleys! I could tell that it actually did mean a lot to Izzy.

The party was really amusing! Something you did really skillfully there was integrate her characters smoothly into the action while giving a bit of background on them, like Jeremy and Cameron. It fit really nicely!

Hmm, drama does seem to follow Izzy wherever she goes, doesn't it? I'm definitely not a huge fan of Evil-Pants so far, though it was quite funny when he flicked a single speck of dirt from his v-neck. I think that said a lot about him! :P Also, it wasn't very gentlemanly of him to hit a girl, though she did assault him first which isn't OK either. Jeremy and Louis running to Izzy's rescue was sweet, though.

I'm excited to see what chaos ensues when they all return to Hogwarts, and if Izzy really is right about Rose and Scorpius! Great work!! :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked this chapter! I definitely think we saw a 'slightly' gentler side of Izzy when Hermione gave her the gift, which was nice to write.

I really enjoyed writing the party scene - for a while I was worried it was TOO over the top, but then I realized that this who story is very exaggerated and over the top, so it kinda fit in!

Thank you again!
Courtney:)

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Hi, here for your requested review! :)

Again, I really like this chapter and your story so far! I actually read your story Missing a while ago, and it's interesting how different this story is. While Missing was a lot darker and more serious, this story is a lot more over the top and wild, which I really like! It just means you're diverse as a writer and can write both serious and silly scenes.

I still really like Izzy, though it is hard to tell if she'll be crazy all the time. Don't get me wrong, she's hilarious, but I'd like to see her be a little vulnerable. She must get sad about her parents sometimes, and show some weakness. Another good way to show her softer side could be if she was being supportive or comforting to Rose or one of their other friends! That being said, however, I especially liked the interactions with Hugo, hahaha. Poor kid!

I love, love, love how you've portrayed the Weasleys, especially the dynamic between Ron and Hermione. Ron was just perfect and exactly how I would picture him twenty-something years older and with a family. Rose is really funny as well, she reminds of Hermione so much! But... sillier.

One thing you could consider watching out for is the use of the word "retarded" and the insistence that Izzy has mental problems, even if it's in dialogue. I agree that she's ridiculous, and that the words "mental" and "mad" are used a lot in England, but I think you should watch out for relying on calling her those things to show her personality. Instead, "show" the reader how she is instead of just telling us. You're definitely an amazing enough writer to find better and more creative ways of conveying Izzy's wildness! :) Just my opinion, anyway!

Also, I wish Sparkle was real! I would shop there.

Another great chapter, I'm excited to find out what happens at the party. Feel free to re-request!! :)

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks again for another lovely review - and sorry for the colossally (wow, that word took me a long time to get right) long time it has taken me to reply. I feel so terrible!

I'm really glad you like Izzy - and don't worry, she definitely will have some softy moments. I definitely think she hides her 'inner pain' over layers and layers of extravagance.

Haha, I'm glad you liked the Weasley's - that was a fun scene to write.

Thanks for the lovely review!
Courtney:)

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And another! You really should start working on that eulogy.

I liked this chapter, and I don't think it was fillery - that duzl was wonderful to read about. Am I allowed to ship Isapius already? Because I am, you know.

Also, I like the way Al is getting better after Tori, and not cutting himself off completely.

My favourite character has got to be Louis, even though he's very different from mine! He's completely off his rocker, and I love reading about him :)

Anyway, this was a lovely chapter and I hope to hear from you soon, no matter the story!

Author's Response: I should, shouldn't I?

By the way, I'm sorry about how this response has taken! I'm so lazy! I read the review, smile and then say 'Oh, I'll reply to it tommorow'. Two weeks later and here I am...

I love Louis too! He's seriously fun to write - by the way, I am looking forward to an update of the Calendar Girls! (Hint hint!) And I really have to get back into the marvelous Reason to Fight!

Ahem. Before I go SORRY FOR SOUNDING LIKE A COMPLETE IDIOT IN MY REVIEW RESPONSES!

Courtney:)

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haha i loved this chapter! i actually somewhat ship scorpius/isabella and for some really weird reason i ship isabella and louis??? louis is probably my fav atm due to his flamboyant tendencies lol
cant wait until its updated :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I love Louis too!
Courtney:)

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please complete???!!!

Author's Response: Of course I will! Thanks for the review - a new chapter is in the queue right now.
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Review tag!!! :)

(Plus any excuse to read and review another chapter of your hilarious and lovely story)

Izzy's voice is so, so funny and sassy. I love how scatter-brained and all over the place she is, and how she's constantly putting her wand in her cleavage-- much smarter than putting it in your back pocket!!! I think she and Rose seem to perfectly balance each other out. Rose is really well characterized too, btw, she reminds me a lot of Hermione but with her own individual qualities.

Louis is wonderful, I love his obsession with sparkly clothes and how flamboyant he is, and how you were just like "no. He's not gay. In fact, he's obsessed with girls. " I can already tell that he'll probably be my favourite character haha.

The Scorpius bashing is very intruiging, especially how Rose defends him and one of the pairings in your story is Rose/Scorp. But then your summary hints that Izzy is checking Malfoy out...uh oh...

Anyway, another great and funny chapter, great work!!! :)

Author's Response: Hahaha, thanks so much for another lovely review!

I'm super glad you are liking my characters, because I always put a lot of thought into them - yep, I think Louis would have to be my personal favourite, too. He is always a lot of fun to write and he is definitely extremely flamboyant!

Thanks again!
Courtney:)

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Review tag! :)

So basically I think this is a wonderful first chapter and I already love your main character. She is so sassy and spontaneous, and I'm very interested in reading more about her. You've done a good job of writing a first chapter with a lot of action and humour, while perfectly integrating background details so that the story makes sense.

Those Bollups really are a nasty bunch, aren't they? It kind of reminded me of Harry stuck with the Dursleys... but if the Dursleys were wizards... and Petunia and Harry had mini cat fights in the halls... and if Harry was a girl... anyway, I thought it was a brilliant beginning, and I wonder if the Bollups will show up to cause scenes in later chapters?

The scene with the Knight Bus was so well described, I could really it in all it's sketchy and disorganized glory! It's great how the story is mostly goofy and humorous, but there are some undercutting serious issues as well.

Lovely job!!! :)

Author's Response: Hey there!

I'm so glad you like the first chapter - I feel like I've changed it a hundred times! And I'm super happy you like Izzy, too, because she is always a lot of fun to write.

Thanks so much for the review!
Courtney:)

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I just found this story. I love Izzy and her character! I can't wait to see how this story developing!

10/10

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the lovely review!
Courtney:)

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Hey! Here for review tag!

Ah this seems like a good story! I feel so sad for Isabelle though. Her life seems to be horrible with her foster parents. I hope she gets a nice new family soon. I like her sarcastic attitude though and enjoyed the witty narrative. The ending part about the Knight Bus conductor was a little too disgusting though, lol. But anyway, great chapter all in all. It seems like a good start to the story. Your MC seems pretty cool and well-written so far, just make sure she doesn't turn into a mary-sue. I am also eager to see how Rose is portrayed.

Good job! 9/10
Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)

Author's Response: Hey there!

I'm glad you think this seems like a good story - I'm about to go back and make some edits, so I hope that I can make it even better! I'm glad you like my main character, she is always fun to write!

Thanks for the lovely review.
Courtney:)

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More Scorpius/Izzy please :> Really good so far :D Keep going and update soon!

Author's Response: Haha, your wish is my command! (In other words, more Izzy/Scorpius coming up) Thanks for the review.
Courtney:)

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Hello Courtney :) Review tag!

Ooh, so it's been some time since I last saw Izzy and yup, she's as temperamental and ferocious and ridiculous as ever :) So this was a bit of a filler chapter with a lot of bickering and friendly antagonism between Izzy and Louis and Jeremy. But it was still hilarious and absurd in some parts. I almost feel sorry for Izzy :P

OOH MATILDA. YOU MADE A REFERENCE TO MATILDA :DDD Love that movie, and love the book as well. That must've been some scene, Louis stuffing himself with gateaux like the chocolate cake dude from the film. He doesn't have the best of manners, no. I really like how Izzy can't seem to put a proper label on Louis, or figure him out, how he's "macho" one moment beating the hell out of Malfoy and putting pink streaks in his hair the next moment. And...how he ruthlessly teases and provokes Izzy to her breaking point. And the next moment he's being almost flirty with her, (the whole her sitting on him thing :P)

Albus is such an interesting character here. So little is revealed about him, and the way you've shown him so far is a little intriguing. How he seems a bit withdrawn, I dunno, maybe a little sad? I remember Tori Heron is from your other story though I've only read the first chapter of that one...I think I mentioned this in an earlier review, but I really like the way how you've linked the stories so that the mystery of one sort of stretches to the other and shows how different characters are affected. Although of course, Izzy doesn't really seem to care that much about the missing girl at all. Anyway, I really do hope Albus will play a bigger part in this fic!

OK, it's going to be a rad year for Izzy and I'm glad everyone's back safe and sound at Hogwarts all pumped up to cause mischief. Great work :D

-teh

Author's Response: Hey there! It's been a while since I saw Izzy last, too - I've been making quite a few changes to the chapters of this story, and I really hope they make the difference!

Yep, this definitely was a bit of a filler, but I love writing the scenes between Izzy and Louis and Jeremy, and I couldn't help myself!

Albus will certainly be becoming a bigger character, especially as he gains more confidence. I think Izzy could be a pretty intimidating person to be around. She's not exactly the...nicest person, to be honest.

Thanks for the review!
Courtney:)

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Hi! It's me again, marvelously late with your review!!
But at least I'm here, and boy, do I ever wish I'd read this a lot sooner!!!

This chapter is probably my favorite one so far. Your writing had improved a lot since you first started, which is awesome, and something that you should definitely keep up!!

I love how the name of the story is kind of dark, but yet there's so much humor throughout! The "onions in your pizza" thing really killed me. I'm so glad that even while drunk, Izzy won't make out with some guy just because he's got a cute face. She's got to have Listerine breath before she'll pucker up. :)

One thing that I'm not sure I caught: Why does she suddenly change from having a great birthday to a bad one? What happened to prompt this change? Again, it might be oversight on my part, so sorry if I'm asking a question that's been answered already by the story!!

One other little thing: the characters do seem to change moods very quickly, but it's not quite as jarring as it was in previous chapters. Do you think you could work on the mood shift just a little?
If the story was intended to be this way, I'm sorry if I'm overstepping my bounds! I would hate to insult you after you've done such a fabulous job with this!!

Long story short, great chapter! Rock on!!

~~UnluckyStar57

Author's Response: And here I am, super SUPER late in responding to your review. I am so sorry. I don't know when real life got so boringly hectic!

Thanks so much! I'm glad you think my writing has improved - I guess this is where I started to get into the flow of writing a bunch of new characeters!

This review was super helpful and you are definitely not overstepping your boundaries, so don't worry about that. I really appreciate any and all advice.

Courtney:)

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Hey Courtneyyy!! Wuts up? :P Im sorry im so latee!!


Aah, I'm so glad I read this chapter. Okay this was so fast paced =) it was perfect. The earlier chapters were much slower compared to this one. It was quite a nice change.

I think the dream really set up the story for me this time. It really added the element of suspense into the whole mix! im really excited to see how this works out :D

Izzy who's also a mean drunk. I wonder why there's so much antagonism between Scorpius and Izzy!

hahaha the fight between Louis vs. Scorpius. I would love to know more about Jeremy Johnson character, though. You provided a bit of detail about him. How he's so positive and all, but I think it would be great if you expanded on that more maybe show us what hes like rather than tell?

This was a great start!! Thank you so much for the read and sorry for the delay :)

Mya :D

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! And sorry it took me so long to get around to it. I'm becoming so slack *blushes*

I'm glad you liked the dream, because it definitely has meaning. And more shall definitely be revealed about the antagonism and Jeremy Johnson (who becomes a key character)

Courtney:)

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Hey Courtney!! Here I'm w another really late review!! :P You can yell at me later haha =)

Alright lets get down to it. I did love this alot. You really showed the Weasley's in their element

Somethings I saw was "That, my retarded friend," I was wondering if retarded would even be used in British english. I don't really know but I feel like there would be a different word for it.

Also, the story flow is great however the pacing is a little slow. The silly banter and some short scenes that aren't actually needed, could be cut out. This is a great story and I wouldn't want people to get bored since its not moving fast enough =)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review. I'm so glad you're enjoying-and don't worry, the pace begins to speed up quite a bit in the next couple of chapters.

Courtney:)

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I really liked your chapter..
But can you please hurry up with some albus stuff?

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

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Hello there again Courtney :D

Aah, I'm so glad I read this chapter. There's a lot more action, a lot more development and conflict and we really get to see more of Izzy's life. The earlier chapters were much slower compared to this one, so it was quite a nice change.

Starting from the dream - that really set the mood for the chapter. It's such a dramatic change from the previous chapters, which have a lot more fluff and a lot of banter and internal monologue. The dream really gave a strange unnerving feel to the start of the chapter - maybe something happened in Izzy's past that has yet to be revealed? Or maybe this foreshadows something? Whatever it is, I think your story got a whole lot more interesting.

And I remember in the last review I said that I'd like to see a bit of variation in Izzy's range of emotions. Well, in this chapter there was the part where Hermione gave Izzy a locket. It's a lovely gesture and I like the way you wrote Izzy's reaction. There's something softer, more honest, and sincere about that moment, the way her eyes fill with tears of gratitude and so on.

And then of course there's violent!Izzy who's also a mean drunk. I wonder why there's so much antagonism between Scorpius and Izzy. Also found the Louis vs. Scorpius fight scene interesting. There's definitely going to be a lot of conflict in the family if Rose has a relationship with Scorp! I think you could perhaps expand a little on this Jeremy Johnson character, though. You provided a bit of detail about him - about how he's so positive and all, but I think it would be great if you expanded on that more.

OK well, this is such a dramatic shift from the last three chapters! And I think it's actually a huge improvement. I've enjoyed reading this :D Great work, and keep up whatever you're doing.

-teh

Author's Response: Thanks again for the review-it's great to hear the story is improving and changing slightly, as I definitely intend for it to get quite a bit darker.

Oooh, yes the dream, It definitely had relevance to the story. What that relevance is though...I shall not say at this point in time.

Yeah, quite a lot of Izzy's different moods and emotions were shown in this chapter, so I hope that paid off!

Thanks again for the great review.

Courtney:)

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Hello Courtney :) teh tarik from the forums here with your requested review! Sorry it's taken me quite a few days to get down to reading your story.

So this was a lovely entertaining chapter. The Weasleys really are a crack-up, and my favourite in your story would be Ron. I think you wrote him really well; he does indeed sound like a grown-up Ron, though he really isn't that grown up, not really, no...he's still childish and silly and harbours grudges from childhood and all. And Hugo as the surly sulky teenager who refuses to say a word until all the irritating conversation around him just makes him explode. Baha! Loved that. And then of course there's sparkly!Louis, who's as fun and as annoying as ever.

I think Izzy is certainly having a trying time dealing with all these characters! Well, what would be great for this fic is a little more variation in the tone or mood of your story. So far in most of the story Izzy has been incredibly snappy and highly irritable. It would be nice to see a wider range of emotions from her. There were some nice moments here and there, especially the part after Rose announces she's been made Head Girl and the whole Weasley family erupts into celebration and Izzy starts feeling a little left out. I think that was a nice shift in the tone of the story, a shift to something more sombre, and I hope you could develop on this scene a bit more, on Izzy's thoughts. I feel that even in humour fics, moments of humour and seriousness should be balanced well, so the reader can empathise with the characters and their situations and take them seriously.

Also, it would be great if you could intersperse a bit more narrative in between the dialogue. There is quite a lack of descriptive detail or narrative, and there are barely any details that evoke a good sense of setting or anything. It would be nice if you could really give the reader a better picture of the external world that your characters inhabit and show how they interact with their environments. Like perhaps include a bit more descriptive detail (just a bit more) on Diagon Alley or something. That's just an example.

OK, so this is coming on nicely so far! Your story flows well; the pacing is a little slow, so you may want to push the action forward a little - maybe take out the shorter unnecessary scenes where not a lot takes place and the characters are merely engaging in witty banter with each other. While this is certainly delightful to read, too much of it can really bog the story's pace and plot down. I'm hoping that the characters will soon start school. That should be very interesting!

Alright, this is a rather short review because it's sort of late. I've enjoyed this chapter! It's been funny and entertaining and awkward at times, and I think your story is developing well! Hope this review is of some help to you and not too harsh; thanks so much for requesting!

-teh

Author's Response: Thank so much for yet another amazing review-sorry for the late reply, RL has been a pain. Anyway, your reviews are always so helpful, and I will definitely be going back over this chapter and attempting to make some improvements-what you said about the narrative between the dialogue was especially helpful. I definitely needed a little push to get started on that!

Thanks again.

Courtney:)

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Hi! Siriusly89 here with your severly overdue review!

Yaay! Party next :D I love a good party! As long as Izzy gets off with a lad who is, ahem, pleasing to the eye, I'll be happy! That or she dances crazily on a table, either or :D

I love Louis. He is just absolutely fabulous! He's a little oddball, but do I care? Nope! And Gideon's Glitz and Glamour sounds like Izzy's idea of hell! Loved the panda by the way! I want that for my bedroom, it would go rather nice with the rest of my glitter-adorned menagery!

And while I'm at it, can I have Louis as well? Please?

Another brilliant chapterino! You know where I am if you want another! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for yet another brilliant review-and no worries about the overdueness:)

I'm glad you liked the chapter-and I think in my (probably biased) opinion that the party next chapter will be very...interesting.

Yay for Louis! He is so fun to write, and I'm glad you think he's fabulous (that seems the perfect word to sum him up!)

Thanks again.
Courtney:)

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I love this. Please update soon :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Keep reading.
Courtney:)

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Hello! Just here with your requested review :)

The opening part with the nightmare and Rose waking her up just reminded me so much of Harry and Ron when Harry has his nightmares. Then when it went to the bit with Hermione not forgetting Isabella it was just like Molly not forgetting Harry. Almost like history repeating itself I guess. The locket was a nice idea - nicer for a girl than a watch.

Oh dear - Izzy was rather drunk wasn't she? It was quite funny to read though. I'm glad Malfoy turned up! It gave the party some good action. Although, Izzy is a bit violent too isn't she? Malfoy too, I can't quite believe he was going to hit a girl! Louis and Jeremy put him in his place though which was good.

I thought the ending was really good with her being sick over everyone. Disgusting but good!

Just a couple of typos for you:

'scarlet blood spurting from me knee.' I think you mean 'my' not 'me'

'had a stuck around' I think you mean 'I' not 'a'

'Sometimes I wonder whether one of my parents was a 'iant' I think you mean 'giant' not 'iant'

Great chapter!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hey there! Thanks so much for re-reviewing!

I love the fact that you brought that up, because it is exactly what I was thinking when I was writing this chapter! I think Rose definitely has the qualities of both her parents.

Yes, Izzy is not a particularly good drunk-in fact, she is a positively violent one! And Malfoy was particularly nasty in this chapter, methinks.

Thank you so much for pointing out typos-I can never seem to find them on my own, so it's great to have someone else do the dirty work (te he.) No, but I honestly really appreciate it!

Courtney:)

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Hey Courtney! Im soo sorry for the delay in your review! School got in the way >.<

Anyway great work here! I love Louis! He actually reminds me of my own friend who acts sooo metrosexual its really funny. We thought he was gay forever until he just started going through girls like tissues.

All of the Weasley's seem great and the idea of Scorp kinda being like James I is funny lol. I wonder how Izzy is going to play into that? Is she going to like have a thing w Scorp or someone else? Would it be weird if I didn't necessarily want her to be involved w him? lol but whatever suits you =)

I didn't really see anything off bout the chapter :P Just that Izzy kinda needs flaws lol. Like she is soo upbeat even about being kicked out and almost comes off a bit whiny when she talks about her parents not caring for her.

Don't get me wrong I really did like the chapter I would just be cautious of not falling into the OC trap.

Author's Response: Thanks so much for the review! I'm so glad you like Louis-he is always a lot of fun to right.

Scorpius definitely plays an important part in this story, but it's not exactly romantic...not at first anyway.

Thanks again!
Courtney:)

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Hello, Laurenzo7321 with your requested review!

I think you did really well with most of the characterisation in this chapter. I liked Ron, Hermione and Hugo in particular. Is there any reason why Hugo doesn't talk? Or will we find out later? Ron & Hermione were very in character and quite cute at breakfast!

I love Louis, I think you've made him really funny and a great friend. I'm really happy Rose got head girl too! I'm also thinking a certain Mr Malfoy may have head boy? I hope so as I think it will make for some good fun later in your story.

I have three bits of CC for you. The first feel free to ignore if you disagree. While I really enjoy Izzy's character, her sarcasm and rudeness, I think occaisionally you might have taken it a bit too far at times. Sometimes she seems to swear for the sake of swearing. I know people do do that but with the insults as well it got a bit much at times.

The next is Louis blasting down the door, it didn't seem like he would just go wrecking his aunt and uncles home. Maybe if he did though he might have fixed it?

And finally, I really disliked Louis's tattoo. I really can't believe he would have one nor that George would sell them in his shop. The shop that he set up with his twin brother who was killed by death eaters. It seems highly disrespectful in my opinion and I would strongly recommend rethinking that part. Sorry, I don't mean it to sound harsh but when you think of all the deaths and injuries caused at the hands of the death eaters and Voldemort, I can't imagine anyone selling or buying that tattoo. Most people would either still be afraid or will have probably lost someone. Just my thoughts anyway.

A good chapter though! I look forward to reading about the party, I really hope Malfoy is there!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the review, and I will definitely take everything into consideration-I am certainly not planning on ignoring any piece of advice I am given!

I'm really glad you mentioned the whole tattoo bit, because I was a little worried about that, and I only added it in at last minute-you din't sound harsh at all, don't worry!

Thank you so much, this review was very helpful.
Courtney:)

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