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Review #1, by ohmymerlin The Human Knot

16th October 2013:
Hello again! I was having a break from 'studying' and going through the recently added stories and saw this pop up! What a coincidence! It was nearly a year ago since I reviewed this story! Time flies so fast sometimes!

This chapter was really good! I love all your characters and I especially like Layla's name (but that might just be because my name is Kayla, haha!) and they've all got really interesting personalities!

However, I did notice a few tense errors. You've written this in past tense and a few sentences had present tense, pulling me out of the story:

We're in Australia! It should probably be, 'We were in Australia!'

I am the worlds pickiest eater. They want me to eat kangaroo? I would have said, 'I was the world's pickiest eater. They wanted me to eat kangaroo?'

Side note: I've never actually eaten kangaroo either but according to my friends it kind of tastes like chicken! :p

Also, I don't live in Queensland but I have visited and because they're closer to the equator, it gets extremely humid and a lot of times it storms in the afternoons :p

Anyway, I like the very slow development of Layla and Albus! It's quite cute :3

Also, I loved Lottie's love of being naked! I think everyone likes being naked but not in front of others, ahaha! She's just has a lot of self-confidence then! :p

Being in a human knot is awful :( Especially if you're small because then people expect you to do all the acrobatic stuff and I think I've only ever once been in a knot which has been solved. :p

Anyway, this was a really good chapter! Can't wait to see more from you! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so so so much for this awesome review!! I'm glad you like it so far, and thank you so much for all of the advice, and for noticing my errors. I'll try to fix my tense issues! Thank you again :)

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Review #2, by Cb The Human Knot

15th October 2013:
Hi just wanted to help you out as far as the geography in Australia... Cairns is located at the top of Queensland, their weather is typically humid and either really hot or kinda hot (so more of a wet/dry season) the great barrier reef is located along the coast here, but apart from snorkelling, swimming is not advisable because of sharks and other marine life. In New South Wales you can go snorkelling around the coast but there's no reef, and in winter it does get quite cold by our standards generally ranging from 20degrees celsius to 4 degrees, weather can be quite stormy and temperamental as well. Hope this helps a bit with your Aussie facts

Author's Response: Oh wow I can't believed I messed up my geography! Thank you so much, I really appreciate it :)

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Review #3, by ohmymerlin The Portkey

5th November 2012:
Hello there! I come from the land down under so I thought I'd read this little fic! :D

This was really good, there was no grammatical or spelling errors that I saw but I felt you introduced too many characters. My mind was going mad, there was so much information in one chapter! :p

Also, I don't know if you're going to say this is future chapters, but when England or America has summer, we Australians have winter. And vice versa. I just wanted to point that out to you, in case you weren't aware. ;)

Anyway, I really liked this story, you did a really good job on it! :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, it's my first one ever! I can totally see where you are coming from with the too many characters, i guess I just got a little excited :)

I actually went to Australia on a trip this summer, so I do know about the seasons, but thanks for looking out for me! If you notice anything in future chapters that aren't correct about Australian culture, feel free to point it out!

Thanks again for your review :)


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