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Review #1, by Akussa Pearl

11th December 2012:

I really enjoyed this chapter. The tension and emotion was tangible; you could feel it though the words and the descriptions.

Narcissa's vision and understanding was spot on. Her life has taken a turn for the worst when the two people she loves most dearly have engaged into something that is much bigger than them and where they will be considered objects, replacable and disposable.

Bellatrix was also very well presented. You managed to give her just the right amount of craziness without falling into the cliche.

I'm not a big Katy Perry fan so I didn't know this song but simply reading the lyrics you chose, it fitted perfectly with your story, the mood as well and the rythm of your writing. The parts where there was lyrics didn't break the flow of your chapter so, great job!

Definitly a nice chapter, perfectly dark and dramatic, just like I like them :)

Author's Response: Hey there, I'm glad you liked it.
Thank you for the review and I'm glad you think the lyrics fit! :)

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Review #2, by AC_rules Pearl

2nd December 2012:
hullloo, sorry about the slight time lapse in getting your review! This is a really interesting moment of the Potterverse that I've never really considered before - obviously well aware of the Spinner's End debacle and the conversation in it, but it's never crossed my mind what exactly the two sister must have been saying to each other before this whole thing happened... and I've spent a lot of time thinking about HP so it was nice to come across something fresh and original.

My only comment would be that in my view Pureblood women - more so Narcissa than Bellatrix - would be far more reserved. Obviously its a very tense point in time that you've caputred, and Bella certainly isn't... but I don't imagine Narcissa telling Bella that much of her opinion and instead Bella working it out and yelling at her a bit. But it was a great read and a lovely essay break.


Author's Response: Hey there, sorry about the wait!

I'm glad you think it's an original idea, i've just often found myslef wondering what happened then so I decided to write about it.

I never considered that before, but I can see where you're coming from and I'm going to go back over the scene and change it a bit so thanks for telling me. :)

Thanks for the review and sorry again it was late!

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Review #3, by EverDiggory Pearl

28th November 2012:
Ever here with your review!

I'm currently having a debate with myself as to whether or not the song fits. The first time I read it I thought the lyrics specifically that you used did fit. But after rereading it I'm second-guessing myself. I think that a Katy Perry song, no hate but, doesn't seem aproppriate for such a dire situation. But then again, having never heard the song myself until after I read this ( I had to look it up:3 ) it doesn't truly matter because the only lyrics that you actually took from the song do fit? I don't know, to be honest. So, no, I don't think the song fits. But I do think those specific lyrics do.

To be perfectly candid, I think this story would be even better without the lyrics from the song. But that's just me! But considering this was for a challenge that specifically required lyrics I suppose you had to!

I adore Lucius and Narcissa and I also adored your take on Narcissa! I love that she wasn't portrayed as a helpless, opinionless victim who merely hid behind her husband and let her son be thrown to the mercy/fate/whatever else that could harm Draco!



Author's Response: Hey there and sorry about the wait!

Yeah, I know what you mean. I wasn't totally sure about the lyrics but I jsut couldn't for the life of me think of something else to put. Thanks for your opinion though, and I'm glad you like how I potrayed Narcissa. I'd never wrote about her so I was quite nervous.

Thanks again for reviewing! :)

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