Really good keep going, when will the next chapter be up I am dying to know the end!Author's Response: I'm writing the end of it now and it should hopefully be through validation by Saturday/Sunday :) Report Review
Please update soon O.O (look into my eyes!)
I love the way you put in the flashbacks in there. :3Author's Response: Thanks, glad your enjoying it Report Review
Did I mention you have the coolest name ever? Cuz you do.
YAY FOR HARRY/FLEUR!!!Author's Response: Haha thanks, I just sorta said to myself whats the most Hogwartsy name I could possibly have and I smashed the four house names together and voila Report Review
Wow. Just wow. ;) love the story!Author's Response: Thanks, I'm glad your enjoying it Report Review
I love it ;)
HARRY IS VICTOIRE'S FATHER.
THIS IS WHAT MY FACE LOOKS LIKE: *__*Author's Response: Haha thanks for the review, really appreciate it Report Review
Seeming how it's called "He's My WHAT?!?!?!?" I think Fleur is some long-lost family member somehow related to the Weasleys. That's my theory, anyway. I'll have to keep reading!
I have to say, this is very good! Just one thing- in the fifth paragraph, it should be split into a seperate paragraph once Bill starts speaking. It is confusing when there are two different people speaking in the same paragraph.
I am enjoying this so far! I am eager to go on!Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback :)
Not really sure what you mean about the Fleur and the Weasleys but I'll try and figure it out
Thanks again for reviewing
~Slygrifflepuffclaw Report Review
MORE PLEASE! i like this story :) even if it is pretty sad.Author's Response: Thanks for the review I really appreciate it :) Report Review
This story is really interesting so far and it seems to have a really unique plot. I've never read something quite like this story before.
I did, however, find quite a lot of spelling and grammatical mistakes and other errors throughout as I was reading. One was in the Prologue in “Maman is diner nearly ready", it should be dinner instead of diner. I also noticed that you switched from past to present tense quite a bit. I reccomend though, that you look into getting a beta, as not only can they help with any errors but they are also great to discuss plot ideas with.
I was a bit confused as well, as to what this was "-HP-Harry/Fleur-OTP-HP-"
Apart from those several errors, I really enjoyed reading this story. I thought your characterization of all the characters was pretty spot on. And I loved Fleur's comment about Victoire and Teddy's snogging sessions in broom cupboards/dark corners!
If you need any more help or maybe want to talk about plot then just ask. I would also recommend checking out the forums as they are really great.
I hope I helped.
CharlieAuthor's Response: Thanks for the Review I'm glad that you enjoyed the story.
I am looking into getting a beta reader but with all the exams at Christmas haven't got round to it :)
As for the "-HP-Harry/Fleur-OTP-HP-"
parts it's a spacer that I'm just putting in to indicate a gap between the last paragraph and the next one.
The spelling is the hardest one as switching between English and French so often spellchecker is out the window and my manual proof reading is far from perfect :/
Thanks again for reviewing :) Report Review
The only person with green eyes is Harry, are you possibly hinting he's vic's father?? hm.i cant think of any other green-eyed alive people that would be suitable-but that would mean he probably cheated on ginny : (Author's Response: yep that's the general gist of it not sure how I'm gonna go about it yet though.this is my not so subtle way of telling everybody who the father is Report Review
Terms of Service
categories & genres
short story collection