so totally love you right now! This has become one of my favorite stories and that is saying something because i have read a lot of them. Update soon!!! Report Review
Yes! Review 150! Score! I think that means Iíve caught the snitch! Iím sure that now Iíve said this, someone is going to sneak in before I get done composing my latest review/essay. First, I must say that Jack is unbelievably hot. Giggle.
So, I was in a mood Monday night. I heart sports with everything I am, and actually am something of a Chicago Blackhawks fan. It goes against my natural instinct to like any team from Chicago, but I canít help it. We donít have a pro team where Iím from. Anyway, the finals, or at least the first few games, were not on regular NBC, but on NBC sports instead. I donít have cable. I donít really have money. I was furious that I couldnít watch it. I kept trying to get the live stream going on my computer, but itís something of a dinosaur, so it was a no-go. My roommate, exasperated by my fury (she doesnít like sports) decided to go to bed. And, thatís when I found that there was a new chapter to my favorite story! A bunch of my other favorite HPFF stories got updated too, so yours actually got pushed down pretty far on my list. At first I couldnít remember if there were eight wonderful chapters. I was worried that I had read chapter eight already and was getting excited for nothing. But, then I saw the name. ďThe One With the Tea Party.Ē I knew Iíd remember a title like that! Point of all this? You saved my Monday night from being completely sucky.
And, what a chapter it was! I love you? I LOVE YOU! No way. No freaking way. Itís Wednesday and Iím still reeling. There was this great moment while reading when I reached that part (my jaw hit the ground) and then I hit something stupid with my mouse and the whole page scrolled down all the way to the bottom. I yelled ďNO!Ē and covered my eyes, scared that I was going to have things spoiled. I must have yelled louder than I thought, because I woke up my roommate and she came to my room asking, ďWhatís wrong with you?Ē I told her that we didnít have time to open that door at the moment, and that I had things to read. I told her Iíd keep it down and managed to scroll all the way back to the top. I still had my eyes covered at this point. I imagine she was shaking her hands at me. I could feel her eye roll.
But, letís talk about that moment. I LOVE YOU? Gosh. I was so happy, I can barely express it. I never thought Iíd live to actually see this day. I always knew Jamesí feelings were there. But, the fact that heís finally prepared to be vulnerable enough to admit it is justÖwow. Heís growing up. *Sniff.* This makes me feel old. But, what a beautiful, beautiful moment. I would say that we were all waiting for it, but I love every part of the journey weíve been on with Javery so I really have no complaints.
Once again, Iím starting to be freaked out by my similarities to James. Iím exactly the same way with young kids. They either think Iím totally cool or I make them cry. I always tell kids exactly how it is; Iím horrible at making up fluff lies that some adults persist in telling. They usually cry. I donít know exactly what the point of this is; just another way of connecting with the story and the characters. Which is the point of all this.
Oh, Bink. Iíve been there, buddy. In fact, sometimes Iím still there. I just want to hug him and take him out to dinner so we can talk about this. Tell him that Iím free on Saturday. Weíll have to watch hockey, but I donít think heíll mind. I think itís finally on a real channel. About time.
I canít evenÖ
You know what you did. And I am very proud.
PS: This week I shot a T-Rex in the eye with a crossbow. What you did was WAY more epic than that.Author's Response: Oh, Kira. I have to respond to this review RIGHT NOW. Because I am in utter shock to find out one of my favorite reviewers is a Blackhawks fan. I don't even know how to respond to that. I have decided to roll up a newspaper and hit you over the head with it. Yes, and also have a T-Rex roll up a newspaper and do the same thing. HOW. WHY ARE YOU DOING THIS TO ME?
I'm a Wings fan. If it wasn't apparent. Somehow. Anyway. This is your official notice of a Friendship Timeout. I'll let you know when I've decided to forgive you.
Though this review is a good start. I love the L-Bomb! It was sudden and trust me when I say it was completely unplanned. James just has this way of doing what he wants and who am I to stop him? I just type the things. All of the things.
I'm happy for him, though. He needed to come to that conclusion.
I'll let Bink know, but he'll be rooting for the Bruins. Because, duh.
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This is really good! I can not wait for the next chapter! this story always makes me happy when it updates! Report Review
I am so flattered right now for the mention at the start of this chapter! From a writer like you? Seriously, I'm grinning like an idiot here!
Okay, so it's really hard to write a review about the first half of this chapter without using a lot of exclamation marks and fangirling a lot, but I'm going to try...
First of all, Fred telling Amy he loved her was so cute! The way he's so unsure about what's going to happen when Amy goes back to Hogwarts and he's showing some insecurity even though he's normally so confident about girls and life in general. They're a sweet couple and I hope they do stay together when she's at Hogwarts - Amy's good for him!
I loved the fact that it took Fred telling James that he loved Amy for James to realise that he also loved Avery. It's so typically James! And then Avery, cool as a cucumber, acts so casually about it because she's known all along. Not that there was ever any question, but her self-assurance as far as James is concerned is really refreshing, since girls are normally the insecure ones in stories, but that's James here.
And Bink might be making some similar statement to Rose soon? That's really interesting. It's sad that he's not been at the tryouts, though, because I was convinced that he'd managed to get a position on a reserve team or something. I hope he manages to get a job of some sort soon!
Okay, I was almost crying with laughter during this tea party that James had to go to! It was just so funny all the way through and everything about it was perfect. The characterisation of the children was brilliant, especially the little girl bossing people around and wanting to be grown up and have James as a boyfriend! James may have just become even more adorable because of it as well :P
I can definitely imagine Avery listening at the door and laughing at his predicament while he's stuck in there with two demanding children. It just fits so well with everything else in their relationship-friendship.
I'm really looking forward to the next chapter and what happens with their plan to get away for the weekend and sort things out!
Sian :) Report Review
Ok so first of all, do you create your own chapter images? BECAUSE THEY ARE AMAZING! Just wow!! Awesome!
on another note, James was so much more attractive after playing with those little kids. I didn't think it was possible but i guess so!
Javery is the best couple i've ever read. No lie! Report Review
For someone who was panicking about beig suck children James kept a surprisingly cool head. His internal freaking out though was pretty hilarious. I would've done the exact same thing as Avery and just left him in there and watched what happened. Report Review
First off I would like to say that this is a really good story. But that diabetes joke in this chapter really bothered me. As a Type 1 Diabetic, I don't feel like people really understand how hard this disease can be for all who have it and to play it off as something funny really upsets me. Like other diseases, I don't think that it should be acceptable to make fun of it and play it off like it is no big deal. I understand that some people can get it from a bad diet but you really can't get it from eating too many sweets or by having too much sugar in drinks.
With that being said, I considered for a moment to stop reading that story because I don't appreciate making fun of a disease that affects so many people, but I'll still read it because it is so well-written. I just wanted you to know how that line in the story can make some people who read this feel bad about themselves or ostracized. I'm not trying to be mean or harsh, and I'm sorry if this comes off that way, but I just felt like this needed to be addressed. And if you would like to learn more about the disease, JDRF's website is a great place to get information.Author's Response: Thank you for bringing that to my attention. I really do appreciate you coming forward and saying that, because it's hard. My best friend has diabetes and she has had it since she was little. She uses humor to help her get through it because she knows she is better than it and that it does not define her. The joke was for her, but you are completely and totally right.
You are absolutely not coming off as mean or harsh and please don't think that you are. I deal with a lot of things through humor -- death, disease, race, gender, you name it. I make jokes about all of it, whether on this site or not. But I do want to apologize if it went too far. That is absolutely not what I meant by it. I am very educated about that disease and (unfortunately) many others, so please do not think it was ignorance that provided the comment.
I do hope that you continue to read the story and I am very sorry to have caused you pain. Seriously. Please feel free to PM me on the forums if you would like to discuss further as I would be completely open to that.
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The perfectness of the last three chapters cannot be explained.
My reaction when I saw you updated:
My reaction after reading chap. 8:
OMG IT WAS PERFEECT!!! I KNEW THIS WAS MY FAVOURITE STORY FOR A REASON!
(fangirl moment over)
Anyways. I loved how Avery and James had their alone time in chapter six, and how you put in funny bits through out the whole story.
I started BTQC after you finished it, and have been following this story (well lurking really :P) I absolutely fell in love with your characters. I have read a lot of fanfic, it really could be considered unhealthy :P, and your characters are so realistic, but yet so loveable even with all their faults.
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The perfectness of the last three chapters cannot be explained. Report Review
This is one of my favorite chapters yet! I love the interactions with Amy. It makes me happy :) And I love how Fred got so mad at James! haha
OMG JAMES SAID I LOVE YOU I LITERALLY SCREAMED AND MY DOG WAS ALL LIKE O.O
Ugh. This story gives me so many feels. WHY AREN'T THEY REAL!?!?
xx Haley Report Review
OMG. James having a tea party, and her asking him to be her boyfriend. OMG. SO PRESH! He is so adorable, i love James!! Report Review
... It happened again thanks for the shoutout great chapter :) Report Review
I'm starting to become overly fond of Amy (but not in a creepy way). She's my type of girl, we would get along great if she was actually real. If this is the big deal over still having your V-card in a fanfiction I shudder to think how big of a deal it is in reality (I have yet to deal with things like this).
Where has Bink gone? He's disappeared for an awfully long time. I've got a suspicion that it has to do with a Ms Meta McLaggen (but I could be horribly wrong). Report Review
I need to pay more attention when I read because my brain is messing up information. I now see why James can't date Avery. Damn. How is he going to get around this one. There's barely been any drama (besides the fact that James stole a car) and I can already feel the tension in the air.
And why WAS Emerson at the Harpy tryouts, now that is the question! Report Review
I had the urge to cackle while reading this because James s finally gettin a taste of medicine of what it must've been like training with him as captain. Now he has to go through what he made everyone else on his team go through and he can't do anything about it.
Oh how well karma works. And the Code, it seems that no matter what James does that thing is bloody everywhere. At least it didn't say anything about dating anyone on your own team (or it did and I just completely missed that part). Report Review
No Avery, you and James are not seeing other people. You're seeing each other because you belong with each other.
I've joined the crowd of people that want Avery and James to date, get married and have babies when they're old enough (is that such a bad thing?)
I can't wait to get to the rest of this! Report Review
update fast! I want to know what happens next! Report Review
So I have a confession, Mistress. I am very embarrassed to admit this, but my dog's name is Bink. I got him last April (which just goes to show how long I've been reading your work). I get asked all the time where I got the name from and I say "Oh, a book" and they say "what book?" and I try to play it off with a "Oh, you don't know it". Those are the times when I run across someone who has a library in their house and owns every book to mankind and doesn't believe me that they don't know it. I had just fallen in love with the character (and the name). I'm just sick of people calling him "Binky" or "Binks". Bink is a manly name. Even if he is a Pomeranian.Author's Response: Ohmygosh you've just made my day. I would like to be the one to tell you Bink does come from a book. It comes from "A Spell for Chameleon" by Piers Anthony. So now you can tell anyone who asks that it's from that book. When I read that book, I absolutely fell in love with the name. "Binks" sounds like Binx from Hocus Pocus, actually.
So glad you like the name as much as I do :) You definitely just made my day! Report Review
You're a slacker McFly! I know, I know. Where have I been? Were you worried? I have excuses though. They might be awesome. They might be pathetic. I've heard it both ways. First, I sort of used your new chapter as a reward system for myself as a writer. I said that I couldn't read the new chapter until I finished the one that I was working on first. And then I got distracted. Now, I've never been much into games and when I got my new phone the guy in the store said that people usually download ten right off the bat. I scoffed at him and said that I'd be downloading intelligent things like newspapers and informational shark apps. But, I broke down and bought my first game. In my defense I was just trying to find a good app for dinosaurs, but stumbled across Dinosaur Hunter. Now, I find myself on a journey where I need to hunt down one of each of the dinosaurs. I did manage to finish my chapter, but some velociraptors got in the way. So, now I'm allowed to read! Huzzah!
Okay, first thing that really stood out to me: what a beautiful scene between James and Avery just being together in the morning. That has been one of my favorite parts throughout this whole thing. You have this remarkable ability to just let your characters BE in a situation. I always find myself needed to have them DO something in order to make the scene interesting. Your characters are so real and have so much life that they can just BE in a moment and the scene can hold up. You don't come across things like that very often. I'm impressed. You'd think I'd just be used to things like this by now but, hey, I still find the stars amazing too even though I see them all the time. Metaphor!
Oh, Bink. I hope he gets his shot. Our lives just continue to relate. I've been hard core job searching lately and feel like I'm constantly waiting for my chance too. Lots of interviews and all that, hoping to impress. I'm with you Bink, buddy. All the way.
ďAnyone want to knock me up so I can come home?Ē I offered.
Lord, that was funny. An actual LOL. Not a fake LOL where people don't even actually do it.
I've made that noise in my head. I know that noise. This story is comforting. It helps me know that there are other brains out there like mine.
Dream or dream girl?
Can't wait to see where this goes.
So, we're stuck choosing between dream or dream girl, huh? And we're in search of a loophole. If I may make a suggestion: do you know about White Collar? So it's this television show where this con-artist guy (with great hair and a great hat) named Neal Caffrey gets a job working for the FBI. He makes friends with this FBI agent but he sometimes gets the itch to steal art. Somehow, and it's crazy, through all these seasons, despite stealing crap loads of art and treasure, he manages to keep his FBI friend and job. He does both. There are loopholes to everything. There's a way and I'm sure Neal would find it. Do you know about DVDs? I'd send you my seasons, but I don't want to go without them. Train up. Watch some White Collar.
Only here to help.
PS: Velociraptors don't go down with one shot. Report Review
Well, this review is a lot later than I meant it to be, but life kept getting in the way.
I love your characterisation of James in this chapter, and just generally in both these stories. He's so real and believable because he's got all of these problems and vulnerabilities which make him relatable as a character. His inner monologue is absolutely hilarious, too. Poor old James - he doesn't deal well with awkward situations, does he?
Another thing I think you show really well is the way that James has matured and grown up over the course of the story. I know he noticed it himself here, in the way that his reaction to Avery was different to what it had been in Italy, but it's noticeable in the way he thinks about things. He's so likeable as well, especially with this determination to set up the charity fund. It's really sweet of him to do something like that.
The way James and Avery behave together is always so believable as well, whether they're fighting or best friends. I can really see how suited they are to each other. I'm just so pleased that Avery knows about the new code now, because the uncertainty beforehand must have been driving her mad. I'm a bit worried about what Mason might do now that he's found James' weak spot, though...
The Potters are brilliant! I love the idea that the whole family bet on when James and Avery were going to get together. It definitely seems like something they'd do!
I don't know if it was intentional, but the way that James left money under the seats in the cinema reminded me of Hermione leaving money for the eggs in the Deathly Hallows. I like seeing different influences on his character from members of his family.
Aw, I felt so sorry for James seeing Freddie and Amy! He just can't deal with that sort of thing very well - it's really cute and very funny. I love how Avery dealt with it in a much calmer manner than him and was able to laugh about it - it's like the two of them balance each other out.
As for Bink, I'm really hoping that he got a place with the Falcons and that he's doing something to do with them! Although, there's not something in the code that prevents you from living with someone from another team, is there...?
Yet another great chapter, and I'll look forward to the next update!
Sian :) Report Review
Aha another fun chapter. I am loving this story more and more xD I loved the whole banter, and the family gambling haha. Javery walking in on Fred and Amy was hilarious though I wonder what James will do next thinking about all the stuff, lol. I am curious to see what Bink's up to!
Great chapter as always. Loved every word of it, and so excited to know what happens next!!
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I think that this story might just be the death of me. So please keep up the good work and update soon so that I can continue living.Author's Response: Please don't die. I'm working on the next chapter, which will be out after Hormones and 30 Days are out. So please keep living so that you may keep reading.
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I do however want to praise you on the amazing yet very subtle character development you've given James over the course of the 2 stories. I thought to myself the other day that James hasn't changed that much (and he hasn't to an extent) but I read back through BTTQ and the difference between James in the beggining of that story and the James we see now is outstanding
Though James isn't coping all that well, he's doing a lot better than the James from BTTQ would have. James is now at least facing his problems head on whilst the old James would have got drunk, made a fort and hexed poor Wesley
I miss Wes actually, more than I thought he would. Can he pop up again soon?
So, anyway, yeah I feel like James is also a lot nicer now. Before he was kind of a loveable jerk who had the occasional nice moment but now he's a nice guy who can still be a bit of a jerk sometimes. He's really come a long way, matured (though he still has a long way to go) yet stayed the same dorky and clumsy guy underneath
Yes, sorry James, no matter how hard you try and hide it you are a massive dork underneath all of that male bravado. But it's okay, because you're hot. And if there's anything chicks love it's hot nerds. Embrace you inner dork boy!
On to Avery, I just love the relationship between her and James no matter what the hell is going on. Whether they're friends, a couple or not even talking the dynamic between them is always fantastic and very believable. Given I am a girl who at the age of 18 fell in love with her best friend of six years I can totally relate to all of this (bar the Quidditch and my dad's not a douche)
I really can't think what I'd do if I was Javery in this situation. James worked so hard to get to where he is now and nearly lost it all once before so I'd hate to see him loose it again. Also, he hides a lot of emotions and seems to repress them so I'd be concerned that one more bad thing could just tip him over the edge and then we'll have to see (read, whatever) him breakdown and cry
Which would be horrible yet amazing at the same time
Brilliant work here, you've convinced me that as much as this is a love story between James and Avery it is also James Potter's coming of age story (and I consider it canon to the main series) Report Review
Where's Bink? He's out practicing Quidditch. Turns out he got the job with the Falcons, and realizes that this is his last chance for a fun job, or else he'll get stuck working at the Ministry with his father.Author's Response: Yes, of course. That's exactly where he is.
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Look at James finally shaping up! (and yess I sing the song for grease all the time!) him and Avery just need to be together. This code is killing me! Keep writing love, it is wonderful!Author's Response: BA BA BA. CUZ I NEED A MAN.
okay, I'm done with that.
Thank you so much for the review! I'm glad you're liking it and I have to say I'm really proud of James. If you go back and read through the first part of BTQC he has come LEAPS AND BOUNDS. Report Review
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