Well, I'm sure a few people will be upset when they hear about her staying at Malfoys - like James and even Rose if she thinks that there is anything romantic going on between them, so I'm interseted to see how things will get worked out between R/S and J/Lia. Thanks for sharing

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Love this story!! But i was totally rooting for Lia and Fred. oh well. I'm super excited for the next chapter, update soon! :) xx

Author's Response: Thanks so much ^^

The next chapter is already written. It just need some polishing, so I hope I can get it up soon =)

Love,
T.

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Whelp, I must say that I saw Fred and Lia coming... Only because I've already read this once. But it did come as a surprise the first time. :)

I like James and Vanity (Jamity? Vanes?) together, for now at least. In this chapter, you still show them as the really cute and infatuated couple, and it certainly annoys Lia, which is also kind of funny too.

I love how the guys all find Lia entertaining when she's mad, because it kinda makes her seem like she doesn't quite fit in with the guys, and she's kinda a source of amusement, which is quite refreshing compared to the girls who instantly befriend the boys of the story despite their previous shyness.

I like how Scorp and Lia's friendship is progressing, and I love how Lia ends up playing a mediator of sorts between Scorp and Rose.

There were a couple more grammar things in here, but it's nothing major, and its doesn't have an effect on the story, but it's just something I've grown to notice after a while. :)

Fred. And. Lia. Kissed. I honestly love that scene, because it shows the difference between Lia's and Fred's personalities in their attitudes towards the whole situation, and Fred ends up awed by her non-attraction to him (if that's even a word...).

This chapter flows really well too, and has just the right amount of description to keep the reader engaged.

I know that someone said the story was moving slowly, but honestly, that's not necessarily a bad thing. You need a good deal of introductory fluff to get a feel for the characters before you can just into the crazy action. And personally, I think it's been pretty engaging so far anyway. :)

Reg likes History of Magic. Another thing that makes him so weird... and adorable. I feel like I talk about him every chapter... I'm not obsessed, I swear.

Overall, another great chapter, and feel free to re-request for later chapters whenever! :)

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Hey =)
Thank you again,
I'm glad you like it, finally someone telling me I'm doing an okay job in getting the information i need to get out there out there ^^
Fred and Lias kiss is also one of my favourit scenes. It was really fun to write that =) and I'm glad it wasnt to obvious ^^
As i already said, I plan on editing soon. I swear. Then I'll go over the few grammar mistakes and all that, maybe try to get it flow better or whatnot. I'll do what needs to be done =)

I'll definitly re-request. I always love your reviews =)

Thanks again,
Love,
T.

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Hello, here I am again!

"I'm just saying, maybe the mandrakes just need a good old hug." And once again, the good ol' Reg we know and love has returned. :)

There are some more grammatical things in this chapter, like "Thisbelonged" in the second paragraph, which I'm assuming should have a space in the middle.

I like how Lia's opinion of Scorp did a gradual 180 as she talked to him, and eventually ends up thinking of him as an acquaintance, and eventually a friend.

As for James and Van, I think you have a good dynamic going between the two of them, because while it's definitely not a romance for the ages, you can see that they both at least have some feelings for the other, and it's just a cute little relationship.

I like how you use the conversation with Scorpius to kind of show what would have happened with James if he'd seen her fly, because even Scorp has the same initial reaction, and then ends up complimenting her.

I have one little CC on the flow here, because I feel like in between the time that the trio starts working on homework and ends is a little jolting. Even just a sentence that said something along the lines of "After, quite a few hours, Van looked up and said, ..." or something like that, so that the reader can see a clearer time frame, because then it's a little easier to relate to.

I do really like the description in this chapter, especially up in the Astronomy Tower when you're talking about the nighttime and things like that.

Also, references to Muggle literature. LOVE. Maybe that's my inner bookworm coming out (scratch that, it IS my inner bookworm coming out), but I always appreciate the references in stories.

I love how Fred's first reaction to Lia is asking about her sister, especially since I know what will happen between the two of them eventually. :)

One additional little comment I have is in the last scene, where Van and Lia are having "girl talk." Often it's good to break up dialogue by talking about their actions of expressions, just so that the reader can see what's going on more clearly and get into the conversation a little more. :)

This was another excellent chapter, and I still really like your writing style! :)

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Once more, thanks so much.

This wasnt exactly my favourite chapter to write. As I went through it over and over and it still didnt turn out 100% what i wanted it to. Especially the girl talk scene, I wanted it in this chapter, but i just couldnt see it anymore xD because i worked over it so much.
I always planned on editing it later on, but I never got round to it till now. Well I'm planning on it soon, but i want to chatch up on my current chapters first.

Thanks,
Love,
T.

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Well, after a horribly long delay, I'm finally here with your requested review! :)

First off, "His parents saved the world so that we could get drunk at school" is my favourite line of the entire chapter. I was quite literally laughing out loud at that one, because I kept picturing Harry defeating Voldemort, and then suddenly a bunch of kids coming out of nowhere crazy-drunk. I have a weird imagination, but whatever...

Normally I'd comment on the cliffhanger, but considering I've already read most of the later chapters, I kinda know what's coming next... Oh well, cliffhangers are cool anyway. :)

There are a few, I guess the word would be mechanical, issues that I noticed, like "The wind ruffled my locks that hang loose" I think the "hang" should be "hung" to keep with tense. Most of what I noticed was just little things like that, that aren't actually all that important to the chapter.

One thing I do like about this chapter is how well it flows. Even though the events do jump around, I really don't end up all that disoriented, because it transitions very smoothly.

I like that in this chapter, Reg is shown as more of the good friend type guy, and less of the confused jokester. Not that I don't love Reg that way, because I totally do, as has been explained by my previous reviews, but it is kinda cool to see him in a new light.

Ooh, Vanity and James... I wonder what will happen there? Of course, I can't really say that now, as I already know due to my reading ahead, but I think it's a cool story-point to add in, and I really like where you go with it in future chapters, and I really ought to stop talking about future stuff, because then I'll run out of stuff to say in future chapters.

My one little comment is that I feel like there was a little less description in this chapter than in previous ones, and I think there's a lot that you could expand on if you wanted to.

Also, I love the stand-off between Lia and James, because he's definitely in for a shock when he sees her fly for the first time. :)

Overall, really great chapter! On to the next one! :)

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: Hey =)

First again, thanks so much. I always love reading your reviews.
I was a little busy (and i admit, lazy) lately so sorry for replying so late, its not because I dont apprechiate your effort.
Well, I know chapter 4-6 are not my best, I started getting a little impatient with the progress as well, but it was hard to put things out there that i needed without rushing things.
I also wanted to show, why Reg and Lia are friends in the first place. After all he isnt just a confused tag along ^^ he really is a good friend and I wanted people to see that.
As for Vanity and James ... well it needed it to happen. Things don't always straight and this approach seemed more real to me than any other drama that could be so easily sorted out with just one talk, if you know what i mean =)

I'm planning to get ahead a chapters right now, but i also kind of have writers block, so its a little difficult. Well, I plan on editing then and I'll definitly go over the typos and slip ups then, so thanks for that =)

Love,
T.

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Another fine chapter here! I think you are doing a great job with your main characters characterization, keeping her about equally as sarcastic as she seemed in the first chapter. It was interesting seeing her interact with her family, she really does seem like she doesn't fit in with them at all! And her dad seemed kinda rude to her, expecting her to get all of those owls and not understanding that she isn't exactly equal to him or her mom when it comes to schooling. Poor girl, I would hate to have all of that pressure on my shoulders! Her friends are awesome! I love Reg, he's just so weird but doesn't seem to really care that that is what people think about him. I really don't have too much else to say about this chapter as not much really happened during it. But it was enjoyable! Also i didn't really spot any mistakes in this chapter so great job on that! I look forward to reading the next chapter! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Hey =)
Thanks.
I know the chapter 2-4 are quite uneventful cause I wanted to get the reader a feel about the characters and their friendship. Also their had to be some things out there before it could get to the good stuff, for people to realize why this is "the good stuff" ^^
Well, I really hoped to make up for it with humor and I hope I could trigger some interest as to where this will go.
So thanks again =)
Love,
T.

PS: I was a little busy lately and didn't to read much, but I'll try to drop a review or two this weekend. =)

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So first of all, let me comment on your summary. I love it! I think it does a really good job of catching interest, or at least it caught mine. I love reading stories about people who feel like they are misfits maybe its because I think everyone at some point in time probably feels that way and also because I myself have written a story or two in which my main character has felt/been a misfit.

So this right here: "Head boy, Quidditch captain, popular, a Ravenclaw – imagine growing up with a Ravenclaw parent - and how my mother often puts it, a hunk – not that I would call my own father a hunk, but let me tell you it’s a disturbing experience when your fellow classmates sigh and swoon each time they hear your father’s name – he’s been quite a prodigy during his time." is all one sentence. You might want to think about going back and making this into at least 2 sentences to help make it not seem so long. Right now I just look at it and while I get what its saying, there's really nothing to break it up and allow the reader to digest so to speak. You do it again here: "She was the popular girl during her time at Hogwarts , the pretty one, beloved by everyone, but apart from that grandma raised her to be the perfect wife, to find a man like my father, with the right looks, wealth, influence, than marry him and have perfect little children." My suggestion for this would be to put a period after everyone and then start a new sentence with "But apart.." I think it will just add that little bit more to the chapter. And maybe here: " By the way, while hers were always an angelic example of perfection, mine were an unruly mess." Instead of starting off with by the way, I think that by taking that part off and starting it with But while, it will make it flow better. It made me pause anyways when I first read it since it looked a bit strange to me. This part: "pass me on the streets I probably would trigger " would should be wouldn't. Here: "personality that just drawed you in." drawed should be drew.

Um wow, I'm really sorry about that long paragraph of suggestions! It didn't seem like it was that long, oh well. Anywho onto my thoughts! I really liked this first chapter! The voice of your character is great! She seems very sarcastic and funny, and just very interesting! I loved all of the introductions, I thought they were all very well done and give us a good idea of who our main players in your story will be! So I think this first chapter has a great voice and if it continues throughout the rest of the story you're well on your way to a great story! From what I can tell in this first chapter it seems like we are going to have a lot of fun with these characters, and that things might not always go right for them either. It seems like this is going to be a rather humorous story! I'm excited to see where exactly you are going to take your characters in this story and how they trio of misfits are going to handle their times at Hogwarts! Especially with James Potter running around! I really look forward to reading more! Great Job!

~Slytherinchica08~

Author's Response: Hey =)
Thanks so far,
I din't mind the suggestion, I'm rather grateful actually, since sometimes it's quite hard to enact the advise someone gives you.
But I guess I really have to take some time, to go through all of that again and rethink it ^^
By the way, I know about the "would"-typo, I already changed it, but it's not yet revalidated.

So, I'm glad you like it ^^ and thanks again.
I'm off to take another look at yours now =)

Love,
T.

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Hi, Elphaba here again!

My main critiques with this chapter are small mechanical things. There are a few typos that you may want to go back and edit at some point. Here are a couple: "He didn't know anything about much skill level, how dared he jugde me?" I assume "much" is supposed to be "my."

The other thing I noticed is that when Lia sits down to dinner with her friends, Vanity isn't mentioned at first: "Even in his uniform Reg managed to stand out. Casually I squeezed myself between them and it began." It took me a moment to figure out who "them" was. :)

Reg didn't have as many funny lines in this chapter, but I like that he and Vanity conspire to get Lia to try out for the Quidditch team. Hmm, are they trying to guide her to a Quidditch career, since she doesn't know what she wants to do after school?

One very funny thing that made me laugh is that Filch is still there and on his third Mrs. Norris. :)

Hmm, who is the mystery person at the end of the chapter? It can't be anyone obvious, so maybe not James, but Albus? Scorpius? I'm just guessing, but it would be cool if Albus shows up and convinces her to join the Quidditch team.

I guess I will just have to keep reading to find out!

Author's Response: Hey =)

Thanks again for the great review. It's as always, really helpful.
I know I'm late replying, I've been busy (and a little lazy)
I'm trying to get ahead a little with my chapters again and I have a little writers block, so it proves dificult.
Well, but I am planning to edit a little more after that. I know 4-7 aren't my best chapters, so I'll really try to do something about it and you're reviews always help me doing so. Especially in finding little typos and error that i just read over.

Thanks so much again =) I promise Reg will get his share of funny lines once more ^^
Love,
T.

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OK, serious question time since I'm the third chapter in and MUST know.

How do you pronounce Lia's full name? I can't, for the life of me, figure it out! lol

Anyway, a nice chapter and really humorous. I like that Lia is very real and very opposite a lot of the people you normally read about. Have you seen the movie Brave? Yeah, she sort of reminds me of Merigold (I probably butchered that spelling. Sorry). With her crazy curls and average awesomeness! :) Moving onward!

Author's Response: ^^ I really liked Brave, so I take that as a compliment =)

I didn't figure Lias name would be hard to spell, so I feel its a little hard to explain.
It pretty much goes as it reads.
Aurelia
Hm, let's give this a try... you might know how the name of Aura Dion is pronounced. It's pretty much Aura, just dropp the last a.
And -lia just sounds like the regular Leah.
I hope that helped and made sense ^^
It's also related to names like Aurora.

Love,
T.


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I like Reg! He is so awesomely awkward! (I do think I expressed how much I adore awkward boys in the last review ;)). And her mother is so much like mine it is ridiculous! Anyway, this chapter was a nice comical read and I'm continuing on to the next. :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much =) I'm glad you liked it.
Love,
T.

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loved it! so much happened!! im seriously getting so wrapped up in this story and into the characters! cant wait for the next chapter!!

Author's Response: Thank you ^^
I'm still polishing the next one a little, but i try to get it up by the weekend, if the queue plays along =)
Love,
T.

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Hi there! Just finished this story and i would just like to say that I'm really happy with this first chapter! You've managed to make an already likable character, and I think that mainly has something to do with the fact that you stress on just how average she is. You always read on how author's strive for an average character, but it seems most of the time they forget a few chapters in and their character is just absolutely gorgeous again.

I love the name Reginald and Vanity. Though I especially love Reg. I do hope he is awkward. I love awkward boys lol. Anyway, this is a nice start and I would like to continue on, which I will when I wake up. :)

Oh, and before I go, I would like to add one critique so it looks like I'm doing an actual review that doesn't consist of just praise lol: The only thing I didn't like about the first chapter is that you said she was just average enough to not be considered ugly. If you walked by her she could trigger your gag reflex, but she wasn't beautiful either. It's a bit confusing as to what you mean here because triggering a gag reflex isn't a good thing! lol I would automatically think some thought she was just downright ugly if they gagged at her. Instead of portraying average I feel that she is described as either ugly or not quite beautiful here and it is up to us to decide even though we know she considers herself average.

Reading back on that last bit, I'm not even sure if that made sense lol. It's not a terrible thing however, just something that took a bit for me to register clearly. :) Good start and I can't wait to read more! :D

Author's Response: Hey =) Thanks so much ^^

About the little gag reflex thing ... there's a typo in there and I admit to being super lazy in fixing it, but I will get to it right now.
It should be " Wouldn't trigger your gag reflex"

So I hope that clears everything up ^^

Love,
T.

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So that was a phenomenal start.

Your writing brings me into the story right away, connecting me to an "average" girl. You took a plot line (or a piece of it, anyway) that has been done a thousand times the whole, "I'm so average, look at me," Bella Swan type, that could have been a complete flop, and yet your brought something new to it. It was far from a clichéd story.

I don't know if I said that right, it was hard to put to words what I meant, but pretty much I meant that you took a tough path to making this story stand out and you went with it, and it totally worked for you!

Description in this story was ace. I could see the whole story out in my head, and the whole time I felt sorry for your OC, thinking that it was too bad she thought she wasn't special.

However, you seem to have used a bit too much description at times, if at all possible. Looking at your other reviews I can tell that you've had this before, so i wont go into it, I just thought I'd point it out. :)

I cannot believe this is your first story; it's wonderful. Have you thought about getting a beta for it? With the right help it could be fabulous!

Great work, I loved it,
Liz!

Author's Response: I'm happy you liked it.
And I'm happy it's not the Bella-type ... cause I really don't like that look-at-me-the-weak-but-pretty-girl-and-save-me ...

I like my girls strong ^^ ready to save themselves, when times ready.
I know the first chapter is a little lot discriptive, but I dont really want to change that much, apart from adding a little more dialog maybe. I already have an idea, but I didnt get round to it yet.
Thanks again =)
Love,
T.

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Hi, Elphaba back again!

Three chapters in, and I continue to enjoy Lia's narrative voice and Reg's quirky humor. I also like that James is wreaking havoc in the great hall. He seems to take after his namesake much more than Harry did.

I feel like I still haven't gotten to know Vanity as a character. She seems very nice and like a good friend, but she also seems less defined than the other main characters. She doesn't stand out like they do. Even seemingly perfect people have flaws and insecurities, and I feel like she needs some to make her feel more real. It would be very interesting if she were to reveal a quirk or problem or two in the coming chapters.

Meanwhile, I love that Lia doesn't have any idea what she wants to do after Hogwarts. I think this is very realistic, and adds to her appeal. So far your story is holding my interest and not bogged down by cliches.

Hmm, Lia is talented at flying a broom, so I'm guessing that she'll discover a talent for quidditch a the upcoming trials. Am I right? I guess I will need to read on to find out. :)

Author's Response: Once more a big thanks you =) Your review(s) was/were really helpful,

I've got something up my sleeve for Vanity, but I also think thats just a part of who she is, just the girl next door, no real quirks attached, but if you read on, I hope it gets ovbious that she's a reagular teenage girl as well, who's just trying her best.
Well, thats pretty much it ... for now = )

thanks again,
Love,
T.

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Hi, Elphaba back again!

First of all, I liked the meeting at King's Cross between Reg and Lia. Both of these lines made me laugh:
"They were wearing something equally as horrible as their son."
"It lasted longer than the average comfortable hug too."
I really like that he and his family are awkward and weird, but nice.

I was a little confused by the formatting of the class list during the discussion of OWLs with her father. Had she been taking all 11? Are the bolded classes the ones she's required to take, while the underlined ones are additional classes he wants her to pass? The reason I ask is that he says, "lined out," and then she's disappointed to see that Care of Magical Creatures has a line through it. If it's possible, I would change the formatting to match the dialog; or change the dialog to match the formatting.

Their conversation on the train at the end was very funny, as well. Reg get's some great lines, like: "Teachers should be forbidden to mate." So far he's definitely weird enough. :)

In response to your author's note, no, I didn't pick up on any obvious signs about an ominous talent. I think that's a good thing, though -- sometimes it's nice to be surprised!

Author's Response: I'm glad her talent isn't already too obvious, I really tried to take it slow.
It's also good to see, everyone likes Reg ^^ I was a little worried if he comes across the right way of off.

It wasn't possible to edit the text acording to the dialog. I tried to make it obvious enough, but I guess I'll just have to edit it.
Yes she did take all 11, not completly out of her free will, but more thanks to her overachiever-father.
I know it was a little cliche with a start-of-term-2nd-chapter, but as Lia's relationship with her parents, especially with her father, will be a major part of the story, I wanted to get the reader a feel of it.

Again, Thanks,

Love,
T.

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Hi, Elphaba here with your requested review!

This first chapter has caught my interest, mostly on the strength of your OC. I like that Lia is average, but what really drew me in is her conversational voice and self-deprecating humor.

Like here: "Oh and did I mention that my name is Aurelia? -- Yes, Aurelia, and as you might have guessed my parents have a thing for these kind of preppy names..."

And here: "Like I said, I'm definitely not ugly, if you'd pass me on the streets I probably would trigger your gag reflex, but you wouldn't marvel at my beauty either." (As a side note, I think "would" is supposed to be "wouldn't" in this instance.)

The one criticism I have with this chapter is her use of past tense when describing herself and her friends, like here: "And then there was Vanity," and here: "I went to school with James Sirius Potter..." I would change these all to present tense ("there is Vanity," "I go to school"), because they're all alive and still in school. :)

I haven't been hit over the head with cliches yet -- always a good sign! I like that her parents are Ravenclaws and that she's not the secret love-child of Harry or Draco and Hermione. ;)

So far I'm enjoying this story. Reg and Vanity sound interesting so far, as well. I can't comment much more on them until they appear in person other, so I'm going to read ahead and see what they're like!

Author's Response: Hey =)

I'm glad you like it and that I am not starting out too much of a clichee.

I already noticed the little typo with "Would", but to be honest i've been a lazy/busy editor lately. But i'll get to it. and the time slip ups.

Thanks so much,
Love,
T.

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Err. . . . . .hi. Siriusly89 here with your so-late-it’s-almost-criminal review. I’m very, very sorry.

Anyway, I’m back, and ready to review!

Again, I’m just noticing one or two cases of tense change, but as before, very minor detail!

James’ prank. I would have gone mad if my cutlery had attempted to attack me. One thing I can’t understand is why everyone applauded him? Your knifes and forks are attempting to maim you, and you applaud the idiot who caused them to do this?

Lets just say James would have gotten the bowl of potatoes lobbed at his face had I been there.

Not much went on in this chapter, but you set things up for chapters to come, such as the Quidditch try-outs.

Did I mention that Reg is my favourite? Because he is. No questions asked.

The only person that you are allowed pair with Reg is Rose. I feel like they would be a good mix, no? He’d liven her up a bit, and she’d well. . . . .de-weird him a small bit.

Just a thought!

Feel free to re-request!

Author's Response: I admit, I was a little lazy with the editing and I didnt get to the little time slip ups till now, but I'll get to it, I swear.

As for James, I guess fangirls, will be fangirls. I guess not everyone was amused either ^^ but I wanted to get out that James is a lot like his namesake, he can do no wrong.

I know the chapter is a little slow, but as you said, I'm getting there and there were a few things I wanted settled before really getting into the story.

I'm really glad you like Reg and I love the idea of Reg and Rose, it even has a nice sound to it, no? unfortunatly i already have something else up my sleve for him.

Thanks for the review,
Love,
T.

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haha i read it ;) great chapter He reminds me of luna :)

Author's Response: I'm glad to hear that ^^

Everyone seems to like Reg, I'm happy he turned out alright =)

Love,
T.

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one of my favorite chapters so far I think! loved the whole shop idea(:

Author's Response: Thanks so much.
This was such a fun chapter to write =) It's also one of my favourites.

Love,
T.

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I wish Van and Lia would just swap boyfriends! haha loved this chapter!

Author's Response: Yes, but that would be too easy, no?
=)
I promise I'll get to a point, where both will be happy ^^

Love,
T.

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O.O addicted. Loved this chapter

Author's Response: It's my favorite as well ^^ I'm glad you like it.

Love,
T.

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Hello! Siriusly89 here with your review. Sorry about the wait.

Now, just in the first paragraph I noticed a little something. You said at the end that the owls ‘are horrifying’ so you’re sort of writing in the present tense, like the narrator is addressing us. But then at the beginning of the second paragraph, she said she ‘hated studying’. I would change the ‘hated’ to ‘hate’, but is completely irrelevant and a bit of a nit-picky thing, so feel free to ignore it :)

Aurelia seems to have the typical teenage-girl problems, which is nice to see. She’s worried about school, and her OWL’s, and basically normal, everyday issues.

I love Reg so much. That little oddball! As stated before, Reg is mine. All mine. And him complimenting Vanity’s bottom. Oh gosh, the little nutter!

There are just a few, hardly noticeable spelling mistakes in this, honestly you’d hardly see them but you may want to consider going back over this and fixing them.

Feel free to re-request!

Author's Response: Thank you for the review =)
I'm glad to see people like it.

I used to have a few times issues in there. Since i started writing in present tense, but switched to past tense and I just recently fixed this. Good to know, something slipped me.

As for Aurelia, I have a little in stock for her ... some typical trouble, something more serious, she's in for one hell of a ride =)
I'll give it another look about the little mistakes.
Thanks again.
Love,
t.

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i read it! i always wait for your new uploads sooo write more(;

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. The next chapter is already in the queue, but the log is long, so just a few more days =)

Love,
T.

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You are a pretty good writer.
Lia's parents sound exactly like mine. "Always obsess with studying". It freaked me out a bit at first, how similar they were.
But anyway, keep writing. You're good.

Author's Response: thanks so much. =)

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Hello, it's ShadowRose again!

I still love her internal commentary - it always adds a funny twist to any situation, even if it's not typically a funny moment. I kind of have an obsession with humorous thoughts, if you can't tell by my mentioning it in every one of these reviews so far. :)

I really like the prank you used during the feast. It's very creative and very believable, and I could just picture all of it in my mind as I was reading.

This line: "And Potter, well he runs on the applause and the girls that faint at the sight of him." I don't know why, but I love it. It's perfect, and kind of captures James's essence in a single sentence. It just sounds so.. glamorous? Maybe that's why I love it.

I like how you've characterized Vanity. She's kind of the quintessential girl-next-door: she's sweet, pretty, and has really weird friends.

And then... Reg. Yes, my obsession continues. He's just such an adorable character. Plus, he gets points for getting Lia to try out for Quidditch. I'm actually really excited to read about Quidditch trials.

This chapter flows really nicely, and maintains reader interest throughout. I can really see how you're building up to the plot line as you go, and I'm quite excited to see where you take this all.

Overall, this was another very well-written chapter. Feel free to re-request for any later chapters, I love reviewing them!

Now, if you'll excuse me, I'm going to go read the rest of this story now. :)

-ShadowRose

Author's Response: I'm really glad you like this chapter. I was kind of worried the most about this one, because I felt it didnt have enough action to it, but I hoped the sarcasm helped ^^.

I just couldnt help making Lia a little sarcastic. I just love a humorous twist to stories of all kinds and I kind of run on sarcasm myself, like James runs on applause =)
Thanks again, I'll be back with another request soon ^^

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