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Review #1, by ArtsyTigs Diagon Alley: Part 1

18th March 2015:
Yay! I love how he calls her 'Mi and not Mione.

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Review #2, by ArtsyTigs Getting Back Isn't So Easy

18th March 2015:
I am so very confused. Between 15. Chapter 14 and 16. Getting back isn't so easy there seems to be a chapter or so missing..

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Review #3, by ArtsyTigs Chapter Twelve

17th March 2015:
I forgot about Peeves.. I think there my be others..

Very well done. I am really liking this.

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Review #4, by ArtsyTigs Chapter Eight

17th March 2015:
I love Harry & Hermoine's sibling-esque relationship. They have always felt like brother and sister to me. As far as Dracos outburst it seems right. He seems very multiple personality.. almost makes me wonder if at times someone is taking polijuice to be him...

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Review #5, by pottered  Chapter One

21st February 2015:
Hi! It's pottered1 from the forums and I know, I know I'm really late but uh I've been really busy so I'm so sorry! I hope this review makes up for it.
I'm glad Hermione's parents' memories are restored but along with that, her memory of Draco saving her from the death eaters is blocked. I don't blame her, going through so many traumatic events, her mind would've reacted to it how it thought would be better. The fact Draco tried legilimency on her irked me a little because i found that a little invasive but this is Draco we're talking about aha. And ooh! Draco and Hermione as headboy and head girl is sure going to pan out interesting considering everyone is going to oppose the idea of Draco being headboy because after all he did try to kill Dumbledore. It's nice that Draco is apologising and redeeming, and the fact Dumbledore has given him the chance to prove himself.
Overall the chapter was good, intorducing everything; characters and the plot. Also, I love your writing, it's great! Just one thing: "bloody hell, your mental block was too strong, you shut it out completely," I squeezed my hands into tight fists.
*Instead of a comma at the end of the dialogue, there should be a full stop. Also with ".war put us in," Hermione passed around papers.
Yes, that's all aha.
-pottered (: x

Author's Response: I won't tell that you're late because I'm super late as well ;)

I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter! With the memory thing, it's going to play a larger role later on as Draco has to deal with the issues of severe hatred and prejudice towards him and not having hardly anyone on his side. I put the Legilimency bit in there because I totally know he'd do something like that, even if he's trying his best to repent. As far as him being Head Boy, I DO have a plot twist involving that position that will come to pass in either chapter 15/16, depending on how I can write the plot out:P Thanks for catching those grammar things! This was my NaNo project so there's bound to be errors like those everywhere!

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, I'll have to stop by again soon! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #6, by Kat26385 Getting Back Isn't So Easy

1st February 2015:
Did you miss a chapter?? There is a huge jump between this one and the last chapter. Fix please!!! Oh, and I'm loving the story so far!!

Author's Response: Hi!

I'm terribly sorry about that--I'm currently in the process of re-working the last bits of the stuff I've got posted already. This was my NaNo project, but I was unable to get all the way through it, so there's some issues still with time/continuity while I finish up rewrites!

Thank you for reviewing though and I'm very happy you love the story! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #7, by pottered  Prologue

12th January 2015:
Hello! Pottered1 from the forums here (:
That was really intriguing and mysterious, and your writing is so good. And the characters of the Death Eaters were quite accurate, also the dialogues were amazing. I loved the dialogues and Hermione's POV. Also, how you portrayed Draco. I loved how it felt like yes, that is something Hermione would say or Draco would do because Draco is a person with mixed feelings and you showed that. And the mention of Hamlet! Something Hermione would definitely read, so that was nice.

-M (: x

Author's Response: Hi! :)

Thank you very much! The Death Eaters gave me a bit of trouble but I'm very happy you think they were accurate, and with their dialogue as well! Draco is my ultimate favorite person to write, and he's always been cloaked in mystery, so of course I had to keep him mysterious for the opening chapter! Hamlet is actually one of my favorite Shakespeare plays (in the original version of this story I had her reading Romeo & Juliet--what a cliche!) so that's one of the main reasons why I have her reading it. Also perhaps because some plot points may or may not echo some scenes from Hamlet... ;)

Thank you so much for the review, I'll be off to request another one soon! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #8, by Crumple-Horned Snorkack Prologue

9th January 2015:
Greetings from the world of the mythical beasts. Contrary to the opinion of Hermione Granger, I do exist!

One thing I do agree with Hermione about is that mint-chocolate-chip ice cream is delicious. Crumple-Horned Snorkacks are well known for their fondness for mint.

What an intense flashback! It was so well written and so chilling. I liked the way you characterized both of them, with Hermione willing herself not to scream (but eventually has to scream anyway because it's Crucio - ouch), trying to keep her head. And Draco! Even when he comes in and saves her, he's really mysterious about the whole thing and it's kind of hard to tell what his motives are - I think that's quite true to his character in the book.

The last paragraph is very interesting. It makes me wonder if Hermione remembers that escape with Draco three months prior. I would assume not, given how she goes back to reading Hamlet. That will be very interesting later, I'm sure, when/how she remembers!

This was a powerful opening chapter and raises a lot of questions. I liked it a lot! But the Lovegoods are out looking for me so I must head back into the cover of trees now.

Author's Response: Well hello there Crumple-Horned Snorkack! It is a pleasure to meet you, and I thank you for the wonderful review! :)

Mint chocolate chip ice cream is a very close second for me personally (cookie dough is first) so I made it Hermione's favorite as well!

It was "chilling?" I've never received such a good compliment! I was worried it wasn't dark enough but your statement appeases my worries for the flashback. Hermione will, first and foremost, try to save herself before allowing someone else to help her which is something I tried to show here in the flashback. Draco is my favorite character to write and with what we're given in canon, he's still somewhat shrouded in mystery so I figured I'd cloak him in even more mystery for the time being and let the readers wonder about his true intentions! I'm glad you think it's close to canon that I did that for him.

Well well well, it seems you've discovered one of my central plot points! Hermione's memory will play a larger role later on in the story and it will help shape the relationship between her and Draco and occasionally cause setbacks between them. I'm very appreciative of your comments and that you think this is a powerful opening chapter that intrigues you! Thank you so much again for this lovely review! ♥
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #9, by Sarah Diagon Alley: Part 1

7th January 2015:
I'm so glad they finally kissed please write more

Author's Response: I'm currently in the middle of rewriting the last five chapters to fit in with what I've currently got, so they may or may not still be kissing in that last chapter... ;) Thanks for the review! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #10, by Ravensong Chapter Two

17th December 2014:
There is great tension and story development. There are a few inaccuracies (e.g. Cho Chang is in their year even though she should actually be the year ahead) but nothing that takes away from the plot.

Author's Response: Hi there! I hope you've continued on in the story, as the tension only gets worse!

Over NaNoWriMo this year I rewrote the first 15 chapters of this story to give it a healthy reboot and basically start the story over, in a sense, due to how many inaccuracies (Cho being one of those, whom I've now switched to Mandy Brocklehurst) and plot holes there were. As far as plot goes, there were lots of inconsistencies with it as I thought of new ideas and forgot to continue the original ones. I also used to have Blaise interested in Hermione and oh man am I glad I got rid of that! Essentially, this rewrite has lessened the OOC-ness of my characters (hopefully) and actually given them a good plot to deal with.

Thank you so much for leaving a review! I don't believe that Cho is mentioned anymore due to rewrites, and has been changed to Mandy in the last few chapters if she is. Thanks again! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #11, by Dramione <3 Getting Back Isn't So Easy

15th December 2014:
I loved your story so far.

I don't understand this chapter and feel incredible stupid right now. From the moment Ron surprised Hermione I didn't get it.
Why is Ron coming in the Head's room without an invitation? Why are Harry, Ron and Draco talking about Quidditch as if they'd like each other? Why are the in the Hogwart's kitchen? Why are they sneeking into Hogwarts? When got Draco hurt?

Did I skip a chapter (or two, three four)?
In the last one they had their first Animagi-lesson and now... Please help me!

Author's Response: Yeah I'm terribly sorry about the confusion!! Right now, I've only got the updated chapters through chapter 14 up so there's some really bad splicing going on currently! I hope to get chapter 15-20 posted as soon as the queue opens back up after New Years and hopefully that'll clear your confusion up tons!

Thank you for the review though, and please stick around for more! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #12, by Mel Diagon Alley: Part 1

11th December 2014:
THIS IS SO GOOD! can't wait for the update!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! I apologize for the disconnect between chapter 14/15 because of unfinished NaNo (re)writing, but I hope to get those last few chapters hammered out over winter break! I'll hopefully get new stuff in pretty soon after the queue opens back up! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #13, by George_weasly_is_sad Diagon Alley: Part 1

7th December 2014:
I must say I'm a huge Harry Potter fan and don't typically like it when people put hermoine and Draco together, because it just feels wrong. But you did an exquisite job! I was latched onto every word and you made it fit together like a well done puzzle! I love your writing and continue to await your next chapter! Thank you for putting your beautiful work into the world!

Author's Response: Aww, I'm so flattered!!

Honestly, I'm so happy that you think this is exquisite considering half of it has been revamped and then other half is still the old stuff (I've got 5 more edited chapters in the queue and the last 5 to finish rewriting)! It makes me laugh a little because right now, this puzzle is very disjointed, but I appreciate the sentiment! :) ♥

There's a lot of plot continuity that will be changing with the upcoming rebooted chapters so be aware that the last few chapters will not be what they currently are (at least for most of them, I might keep a few bits in). This novel has been my baby since October of 2012 so I'm extremely thankful it is continuing to have faithful followers as I revamp and improve my writing! Thank you so so much for your wonderful review, be on the lookout for a brand-new chapter sometime in January after I've gotten through finals! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #14, by Miss. H Diagon Alley: Part 1

26th November 2014:
Ah! I've been reading your story non-stop for the past couple of days, and it's great. I really like how you portrayed Draco. That he has repented of his actions up until the war and is just as broken as the rest of the main characters really helps the reader accept him. The fact that he changed sides because of Hermione? Genius. I also like that you established that Hermione and Draco had problems and were essentially enemies for their entire school career but are trying to work through it. I've read Dramione fanfic that tried to ignore that fact, so the relationship didn't seem as real as it does here. I have two criticisms. First, I would really like to see more description of events and rooms and the like. At the beginning, I was really impressed with the way you described the Head dorm. It really helped paint a picture in my head of where they are living. I think if you bring back those kind of details it willing help you tell your story that much better. Second, it almost seems like there's too much going on. The ball, the kidnapping, the prophesy, the minor relationships that we're all shipping, and the Dramione drama are a lot to put into one story. Personally, I think you should downplay the other characters' romances, focus more on the ball and the Dramione drama for right now, pick up the relationships at the ball, and then continue with the kidnapping nonsense after the ball is completed. I think that this will open up your story and not confuse people (because I was a bit confused at parts). Also, get rid of Blaise. He irritates me and gets in the way of Dramione, whom I am hardcore shipping. Overall, awesome story. PLEASE WRITE MORE!

Author's Response: Hi there!! First of all, wow, thank you so much for getting through all of my story!

Secondly, I've been rewriting it for NaNo this year and so far I've only updated through chapter 1 so that's why it seems very busy and disconnected. I'm doing my best to finish writing NaNo and then I will get the rest of the new and very much improved chapters up once my beta gets through them!

Blaise's characterization will be changed dramatically once I post more of the rewrites. I've definitely slowed down what I used to have as far as romance and stuff goes, but I am trying to flesh out a few more of the minor characters for plot purposes. Please feel free to come back once I've got the other updated chapters posted, because you'll be in for a wild ride! :)

~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #15, by Mischief_managed18 Sobering Thoughts

11th August 2014:
THEY KISSED! Oh my goodness I'm so freaking excited. Even if it stopped pretty quickly. Stupid Ron. :p

There were a couple little grammar things:

When Hermione dropped her wand, I grabbed her waist with my good one and pulled her to the ground with me. (He grabbed her waist with his good what? :p)

The conversation ended and resumed walking down the tunnel with their wands alight. (Who/ what resumed walking?)

Anyways, another fantastic chapter and I'm so on edge I don't even want to stop so I'm off to the next chapter! :p


Author's Response: Yeah the kissing might be going bye-bye but IDK yet for sure. I think I might just have them staring into each others' eyes all soully and stuff instead to build up more to chapter 20's big moment.

Ah thank you, that must've happened with some spliced editing I did but didn't catch! Draco grabbed her waist with his good arm, and "they" resumed walking down the tunnel. :)

Didn't you say you wouldn't mind beta-ing this for me once I get rewrites going? 'Cause if you did that would be *AMAZING!* :)

GO GO GO! Only 3 chapters left!
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #16, by Mischief_managed18 Getting Back Isn't So Easy

11th August 2014:
That ending though... One of the best cliff-hangers I've ever read, good job on that one! :D Goodness, my dear I love you so much.

Again, I love the awkward shyness between Hermione and Draco, it's just so absolutely perfect!

Ron still bugs me... but he's always been one of my least favorite characters and that has nothing to do with you. Though, he did seem a bit off during the section in his POV. It seemed to intelligent(?) for Ron.

That aside, it was fantastic and I can't wait to read the next chapter!


Author's Response: Haha thank you, I am quite proud of that cliff-hanger. *ruffles imaginary feathers*

Now that I just read through Ron's section, I will agree it is awkwardly OOC for him; I'll go back and change that soon...once I get around to editing the rest of it :P

You're almost there!! YOu can do it!! :D
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #17, by Mischief_managed18 Chapter Fourteen

11th August 2014:
Why hello again, dear! :D As usual, fantastic chapter and I thoroughly enjoyed it. I love Draco and Hermione's little moments. I love that Hermione is still in denial about falling for Draco despite all the evidence. Ugh. I mean, come on there's no denying it with the amortentia smell. *sigh* They'll both realize it eventually and it shall be GLORIOUS! GLORIOUS, I TELL YOU!

That aside, there were a couple little things that seemed off. Like grammar things, and when he said he woke up to the smell of delicious food, had he thought, "I awoke to the delicious smell of food" or something along those lines, it would have made more sense, because having not tasted it, it wouldn't make sense for him to know it's delicious. And when Draco is talking to Ron, it seems to out of the blue for him to just suddenly start going off instead of it starting with Ron giving him a look or something. And the Ginny/ Luna part felt very forced and unnecessary. That aside, fantastic chapter as usual! :)


Author's Response: Yeah this chapter needs some work. I remember writing this very late at night and then immediately publishing it without much editing so this needs to be redone.

*gasp!* Not grammar mistakes nooo! *immediately scrutinizes every single word in chapter* Ah, thanks for catching that mistake! I would agree that whole scene is too OOC even for the nature of the story. I'll have to rework that soon.

The whole Ginny/Luna thing was a horrible, horrible idea. I just wanted to have a scene where Harry was reflecting on recent events but I couldn't think of anything better than that.

I hope you like the next few chapters, they're much better :P
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #18, by Dragon Dancer Diagon Alley: Part 1

26th July 2014:
Oh my gosh I love it!!! Haha! And caught by the paparazzi! The students at Hogwarts are gunna have fun with that one!
I like what you did with Draco's patronus, and I can't help but wonder if your gunna make his animagus the dragon as well. I'm so glad someone has decided to go with a dragon theme, cause really his name literally is Dragon in latin.

Now I have a question as one auther to another.
How do you get texts italicized? I've pre written my chapter and then copy and pasted, but bold or italics wont stay.

I really do love your story and can't wait to read more. Especially that bit about a love prophecy, mentioned in the tunnel when they found that ring. ;)

-Dragon Dancer

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I just felt like I needed to add some lighthearted elements to the story because of how dark I've been writing it lately (oopsie). It's really going to heat things up for them and put the pressure on!

Ah, yes! Thanks for mentioning Draco's patronus! The whole dragon theme with him is partially because of his name (obviously) but also as a tie-in to my (truly horrible) short story that focuses on him in his early years (The Tale of Draco Malfoy; don't read it, I beg of you!) that I wrote in 2013 that really needs some major editing! But otherwise, yes, I do love dragons so of course I'm going to continue the theme. :)

With the formatting thing, I write in Word, so I use the clipboard with the little "W" in the bottom right corner to copy and paste my text in. Usually everything stays formatted correctly with that. However, if you don't use word then I suggest doing the usual and then going back through and italicizing/bolding manually with the toolbar available. That should work for you! :)

Ah the love prophecy, yes! Who will it be? We shall never know ;) Hah jk I think we all know who it is (come on it IS a Dramione after all) but I'm not going to make it that easy! Be on the lookout for some major edits though of the first ~10 chapters though as I improve the quality of my writing from late 2012! I will be changing some character arcs (namely Blaise and Draco and a little of Hermione) from earlier on to make it more believable.

I'll try and post the next chapter within a month! It's getting pretty exciting to write as well, but unfortunately not everything is happy-go-lucky with Draco and Hermione. Thank you so much for your lovely review, I hope to see you around again soon! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #19, by Silenceislouderthanwords14 Diagon Alley: Part 1

22nd July 2014:
Yay! I was so excited to see a new chapter,and you did not disappoint! Draco is so adorable, this is one of my favorite chapters so far! I can't wait for the next one!

Author's Response: Aw thank you, that means a lot!! Draco was so much fun to write for this chapter because I wanted to show off his immature, fun-loving side a little bit while still remaining how he normally is.

The next chapter is in progress along with rewrites of the first 10 chapters! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #20, by Grace Diagon Alley: Part 1

22nd July 2014:
Gah it's so good I can't wait for the next chapter!!!

Author's Response: Thank you so much!! The next chapter is currently in progress, along with rewrites of the first 10 chapters! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #21, by maital Diagon Alley: Part 1

20th July 2014:
so good dont be long till u continue the story

Author's Response: Thank you! It'll hopefully be relatively soon! I'm going to start major edits soon on the first half of the story though so it might change drastically until the next time you read it! Thanks for the review! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #22, by Dragon Dancer Chapter Twelve

19th July 2014:
Wait! Hold your Horses!! I'm confused. Do you have Professor Dumbledore as a ghost? Cause if not I've clearly missed something.
I'll plan on reviewing again.

-Dragon Dancer

Author's Response: I guess I need to clarify this better in the chapter; Dumbledore is not a ghost, nor does his portrait initiate these things. Around the time Voldemort came back, he made plans for a few years in case of an untimely death (which occurred in HBP) to choose the Head Boy & Head Girl. Choosing Hermione and Draco as Heads was one of those instructions.

Sorry about the confusion! I'll try and get around to fixing it soon! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #23, by Dragon Dancer Chapter Six

19th July 2014:
Hahaha!!! This is great!! Usually I go for the more adventure stuff, but all this drama is so funny, I love it!! I just knew Blaise liked her, I knew it!! Now, I'm slightly confused on why Ginny broke it off. Just because he never mentioned Cho? Anyway to the next chapter!!! I'll plan on reviewing again soon.

Author's Response: Ginny broke it off with Harry because she found out about his recreational activities with several women (and the almost one with the woman in the cafe scene) so she's mad because that's an important thing to tell her in order for them to have a strong, trusting relationship.

With the Blaise x Hermione dynamic, I think I'm just going to write it out of the story as a possible love thing in my rewrites because I don't like how I've done it and it seems like too much to throw in with everything else. They'll still become friends and such, but just won't have to deal with Blaise's awkward feelings. :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #24, by Dragon Dancer Chapter One

19th July 2014:
Nice. I just starting reading your lovely story, and I must say, its quit unique! Never have I read a Dromione, where Draco starts off already trying to get Hermione to like him. ( At least yours is the first time I've read that has that happening) I can't wait to catch up on the rest of the chapters. I'll plan on reviewing again.

Author's Response: Aw, thank you!! It means so much that you think my story is unique in that way! Honestly though, I'm going to be elbow deep in some major rewrites of chapters 1-10 soon so a lot may change! ;)

Thanks for the review! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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Review #25, by Mischief_managed18 Chapter Thirteen

17th July 2014:
Oooh! A prophecy, huh?! Now I'm super intrigued. I have a feeling it'll be the pair of them, I mean this is a Dramione after all. :p but I loved this chapter! I love the whole concept of this hidden tunnel and everything that goes along with it. You're brilliant, my dear!! :D

One comment, you've used it a couple time but people do things "subconsciously" not "unconsciously". Unconscious would mean they're doing something while passed out or without functioning mentally. Subconscious is them doing it without realizing it but still fully aware of their surroundings.


Author's Response: A prophecy which I'm yet to fully determine. heh. Thank you! I knew I wanted to use a hidden passageway, but I didn't want to be cliche and have them use one of the seven known ones on the Marauder's Map, so why not create one that's been there for hundreds of years but very unused because it's only for dire circumstances? Obviously, the Marauders wouldn't have found it because they were never in "dire" circumstances. Not gonna lie, it took me a long time to figure out what I wanted to do with this chapter!

Oops, thanks for catching that mistake! I tend to use the wrong prefix on a lot of my words like that xD I'll go back and change that wherever I see it! Thank you!! :)
~MadiMalfoy x

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