how does this not have more reviews? Gosh, I was crying by the end, that was just so beautiful and tragic and moving. This story is so real, so honest about what people must have gone through after the war. I just loved it.
Beautifully written, well done :)Author's Response: Awwe :')
Thank you so much for taking the time to review!
I really appreciate it and I'm glad you liked the story :D
~Gill Report Review
I really liked the way you wrote this :) The POV was really interesting!
I also really liked your plot. I feel like a lot of people ignore this part of the aftermath of the War and I hate that. It's something that happens to a lot of people after and I'm really glad you touched on that in this story. The way you wrote it seemed very realistic to me :)
I liked the way you portrayed Katie. I haven't read many stories about her (I usually read Next Gen) but the way you portrayed her and added in parts of HBP made her seem very cannon to me.
Oliver was so sweet! I'm glad he was able to help her see that life wasn't so bad and that it was okay to move forward. :)
I know this was only a one-shot and that it needed to move by fast but one thing I think if you ever edited this would be to maybe drag it out a bit. People don't move on from things they're that afraid of that fast, so maybe if you could add in something like "It took a few weeks but Oliver started getting through to Katie. He showed up at her door one day and Katie finally allowed him to lead her out of her house." I think it'd be a bit more believable if you did something like that :)
Really really good, I'm glad I read this!
-AmandaAuthor's Response: Hey back!
I just realized that I never replied to this awesome review! I'm so sorry :(
Thank you a million times for all the feedback, it's really helpful and made my day!
I always look at next gen stories and wonder how everyone turned out so well. I mean, they must have all been through unbearable trauma in the battle, so when i saw the Phobia challenge I knew I needed to write some aftermath.
I'm really glad that you liked it and that it turned out so well.
You're totally right about people not getting over things that quickly, so thank you for the feedback and I will certainly take it into account if I edit this anytime soon.
Thank you again and again for reading and reviewing.
You're the best.
~Gill Report Review
I agree with you. I think the war had to affect some people a little harder than others. I have a story where Hermione took it pretty hard. I like this story a lot and I'm so glad it had a good ending and she was able to heal. I think the first part when you are showing Katie's problems she is dealing with was hard to read. Be careful with present and past tense.
I liked your story line!
Megthechef43 aka MegAuthor's Response: Thanks for the feedback Meg! I'll definitely give that spot another look :D Report Review
This was so heartbreakingly beautiful. It made me want to cry because you described a shell of the girl we used to know so well.
Now that I think about it.. I've never thought about how things would have affected her. But everything you talked about, her fear of heights, her fear of pictures because she can't imagine being trapped in some of the most terrible moments of her life... It's all so well thought out and just achingly beautiful.
The way Oliver sort of broke her... How he wasn't gentle and didn't try and pretend she looked okay when she was dying from the inside, was my absolute favorite part. I loved when he said that George was doing well, like he was challenging her almost. If he (George) can survivor after losing half of his heart, Katie can survive. That was such an amazing sentiment. Then when it's a picture that starts saving her, I nearly stated crying.
Thank you for writing this. It's gorgeous.Author's Response: Oh my goodness! This review took me so off guard! Thank you so much:D. When I first wrote this story I was actually really unhappy with it, so I pretty much rewrote it. I think I like this version a lot better so thank you for the confirmation!
I found it really tough to get into Katie's skin, because i've never gone through something like that, so I'm glad you found it moving all the same.
Thank you so much again for taking the time to write this beautiful review. It made my day.
~Gill Report Review
I love this fanfic so much! Nice work, hope you update soon! :)Author's Response: Thank you! It's actually a one shot, so that's it, but thanks so much for reviewing :D Report Review
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