So cute! I absolutely ove it :)Author's Response: Yay! That makes me so happy ! :,) Report Review
I really like the idea of the story and the pairing. God, I love the pairing. I always thought Draco would end up with Pansy.
Now, I'm not going to bash your story, I'm only giving you some constructive criticism.
You have lots and lots and lots of text, but because it's all cramped together, people tend to look past it and get bored after a while. If divide it in paragraphs, it'll seem much lighter and it's easier to read.
Because of the bunches text, you tend to make some grammar mistakes. If you divide the text into paragraphs, as I said, it's much easier to spot those mistakes and correct them.
I really liked the beginning, the notes they sent back and forth. It was flirty and cute and fluffy and I just liked it. What I also liked is the fact that Draco has these doubts about being a death eater. He seems so real, though you have to consider he's still a Slytherin. Slytherins tend to be egocentric.
Overall, nice job and keep it up. =)Author's Response: Thank you thank you thank you! Im glad you like it. Its my very first time making these, i really have no experience at all, so your opinion is very important to me :) Report Review
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