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This almost makes me feel sorry for Peter, almost. You've made him sound regretful and the way his thoughts are just scatered makes me think of him as a little boy who needs a hug!
You've wrote him beatuifully and it's a nice length to keep the reader interested in his scatty brain! I never really thought of Peter being sorry for what he did, but reading this it does seem plausable that he had to feel sorry for killing off people he had know and became friends with for the better part of his childhood.
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Peter is one of the characters that I think people automatically hate, but I think you really do have to look into his character and realise that he wasn't a brave person and he was scared to be killed by Voldemort. Yes, what he did was wrong, but he had his reasons. He had to sacrifice so much because of it, so I guess he does have some bravery in him.
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It is wonderful Amy. This conveyed everything it needed quite nicely in a small package, come to think of it it's somewhat like Peter, big thing in a little package, hm.
I quite enjoyed that, very succinct obviously but still a wonderful read. I like how Peter's mind is shooting over all these thoughts so quickly, franticly (or maybe that's just how I read it) but it still doesn't feel rushed.
I like the idea that there was also something tying him to all the Death Eaters, that if one of them were to wander too close to his hidey hole that he would draw them in and force them to restore his body. But now I'm really interested to see someone do a fic about Voldemorts time as a drifting soul fragment... *day dreams about it* oh sorry, got distracted.
I love the setting, Peter rushing through a dark and dangerous forest, echoing the fear inside of himself, and likely projecting it outwards. A very good entry my dear. Definitely a top two contender. Now to choose. No idea how but I have to choose one. Great stuff Amy.
TyrannicFeenixAuthor's Response: Hey Chris! Thank you so much for the review!
Thoughts tend to be frantic in general especially in an adrenaline driven situation like Peter was in, so it coming across like that was planned. I'm glad I did that well!
Oh goodness, now you've got me planning that out! Bad Amy, too many ideas you already need to write!
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Very good story! Short, but interesting.Author's Response: Thank you for the review!! Report Review
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