Oh my wow, Maz! I came to check out this story 'cause I saw you wanted it to be recorded (I was a little slow at the grabbing ;)). This is really beautiful! It had me smiling the whole way through, and it felt no where near as long as it was! I was very surprised I was at the end when I got there! I was so happy seeing them as a little happy family, and how adorable little Harry was, and laughing out loud at the thought of him being a carrot. I loved how James had to keep his mouth shut about the fairies, and how his decorations were a little too over the top. You added every detail and every lovely thing that I just couldn't stop reading! Then, when it went to James playing with Harry and the puffs of smoke, I about cried because of what I know from the books. Tears literally formed in my eyes! It ended so quickly, but so perfectly. Because, well, their lives at that moment changed so quickly. I thought it was going to end in "Lily, take Harry and run!" but it still ended right where it needed to.
This was a lovely fic! I really love how you interpreted them as a family, and it makes me even sadder knowing they didn't survive. I'll have to see if you have any other stories! If so, I do hope you have more Lily/James ones! ;) Report Review
Your first story? :O
My jaw just dropped to the ground.
It's very funny and awesome, I loved all of it!
It's gripping, I could not take my eyes off the screen, and I was eating up every word you wrote, until the classic delivery of the last line, which is brilliantly formatted to have that huge impact on the reader.
I love the way you based some bits around real life, as in the first time Harry waved, and James wanting to be the first oe to see it, and the way Lily loves taking pictures. It makes it even sadder the way they die.
I was certainly not expecting that ending - you had me the whole way along until the shocking cliffhanger.
You got the challenge, and turned it in to something completely original and creative. Amazing story, I loveeddd it!! :DAuthor's Response: This was a very cute review and I loved every second of reading it! I wanted to make the story more funny and family-y but then ya know...crush all the dreams of the reader in one line...;) oh voldy, why do you have to be such a buzz kill? Lily's habit is stolen from me, I love taking pictures but unfortunately when I do my thumb is always over the lens or its blurry.
You are so lovely! I'm glad you liked this story so much :) you are welcome back any time to review if I write some more :D Report Review
That was a really good story!
I love all the little details you put in there; really gave this scene a nice feel. Like I could see what the place looked like, all decorated and all!
And that last sentence... really nicely done. We all know what's going to happen so there was no need to go further into the story; you made the right choice in stopping there.
The one little thing that I will point out (and it's really just so I can give you constructive criticism) is that Harry's accomplishement, waving, isn't really age appropriate. Harry would be 15 months old at that moment and babies usually begin waving around 7 months old... A more appropriate behavior would be for him to stack 3 or 4 blocks onto each other or undress himself; those are things that a baby begins doing around 15-16 months of age.
Congrats on getting the story of the month by the way, it is well worth it!!Author's Response: Thank you so much! It's really odd and genuinely amazing when people take the time to review you. I did worry about where to stop, thinking I should stop before they're even in the living room or cut forward to when they are dead but eventually decided to stop there -- it's great that you liked it! Shout out to starryskies55 for originally giving me the idea and mentoring me through my first fic :')
Ah the baby waving, I honestly didn't know the specific age when they would start. My mum gave kea very vague answer and I probably shouldn't have taken her word for it. Thank you for telling me, reviews are like extra knowledge!
Oh wow. Thank you! I was really suprised, honestly. I didn't think anyone would read it :) Report Review
It was so nice and sweet! All the way until the last sentence, when I am guessing Voldemort came in. Then It must of gone horribly wrong...Author's Response: Aww, thank you! Yes, I was hoping that people would realise that it was their death day. I didn't want to go all the way through their death, as J.K has already recounted it for us through the eyes of Voldermort. I wanted it to end with them happy and oblivious and not yet dealing with the pain :) Report Review
That was absolutely adorable! I loved it!Author's Response: Gah! I'm really happy you enjoyed this! It's been really satisfying and downright wonderful to find that people really like this oneshot. I hope to write more in the future, I guess all I need right now are ideas;)
Thank you for reviewing!
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I REALLY like this a lot. It's so sweet, but just knowing what happens at the end is heartbreaking. Baby Harry is so cute, it's insane.Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked it, and I was going for exactly that effect. I'm really glad that the ending of the story didn't go amiss. Baby Harry was difficult to write but I have been baby sitting a lot and generally based his character off that. I actually had to have a bath when I got back from babysitting -- I had that much drool on me;)
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Really Good. Sequel! Please!Author's Response: Aw, thank you! Did you know that you are my first review ever? Haha, this is the first ever story I've posted :) I don't think there will be a sequel as the bang at the end is meant to indicate that voldermort has come to kill them. Sad but true.
Thank you for reviewing,
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