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Review #1, by starsoph8 Scheming

12th August 2013:
LOVE YOUR STORY OMG!

Author's Response: Thank you so much :') this just made my day!

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Review #2, by sam Hurt but not broken

3rd February 2013:
This Is a great story!
Please continue it soon! I
can't wait for the next
chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks! Sorry I have been really busy and haven't done anything but I'm getting on to it!

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Review #3, by awesomeness! Boys will be boys

30th January 2013:
GIVE US MORE!




pls?!?! *puppy dog face*

Author's Response: Of course! Sorry I have been so inactive will get onto it soon

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Review #4, by SereneChaos Revelations

11th October 2012:
Ah, so it is after DH! I like how you put that information in there without having to say it outright. I do think that Luna's character sounds a little...off. I almost expect her to be a little more dreamy the way she is in the books, and since you mentioned the passing of her father in the first chapter, I might like to see how that affects her now. I think you do a good job writing Dean though (especially when he's talking to Seamus!).

One little thing to look out for is the punctuation that goes in your quotes. Make sure to include it! :) Otherwise, good job and good luck with the rest of your writing!

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I will take into account all you said and I will develop their characters more as I get into the story. It's nice to know someone appreciates my work, so thanks again!

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Review #5, by SereneChaos new year-new start

11th October 2012:
You know, I've always wanted to read a Dean/Luna (in my head, they're totally Duna, haha) and am so glad to have found my first one! :) I really like the dialogue here--everyone speaks so naturally!

I do think this could be improved a bit by having Dean's sudden interest in Luna not be from her newfound appearances. It serves a dual purpose: giving you a chance to get in deep and explore their personalities more, and to give your readers a chance to really see and believe why Luna and Dean would be such a great couple. I also would like to know where in the HP timeline this takes place--is it after DH?

Otherwise, I noticed you have quite a rich vocabulary, in terms of knowing other ways to say the word 'said'. I think they were all really well placed.

You're off to a good start!

Author's Response: Thanks :) bit late but yeah :D

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