Hmm, the premise of this story is pretty interesting and the summary makes me wonder what the cause is going to be.

Couple of mistakes in the first couple of lines. You've referred to "Potter's" and "Weasley's" when it should be "Potters" and "Weasleys". The apostrophe is for when you are talking about something belonging to them, like "that's Potter's book", not for when it's plural.

*grins at "a pain-filled trance"* I like that phrase.

Also love the part about "it's not that they're bad cooks..." and then he says that they are actually. *laughs*

*grins at Molly fussing over the cake in the oven*

You also have "just bare with it", when it should be "just bear with it".

Aw, poor Albus. He's going to be picked on forever because of that.

Author's Response: Haha oops! My bad, I usually don't make that mistake with the apostrophes :S Thanks or pointing it out! And the 'bear with it' thing! I'll edit that as soon as possible :)

I love the fact that you find my story funny, that's made my day quite a bit better (I've had quite a bad day today) so thank you so much :D My aim was to make people laugh with this story so yay! So happy you like it!

Yeah... bless his little cotton socks. :)

Thank you so much again for the lovely review, it's really helped!

~Siriusly

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I laughed so hard at this, it's a good humor topic. Farts, who doesn't LOL at them?
I found your characters so loveable, and oddly like my family too!
Mollys' cake made me laugh so much!
You're an absalute star for getting it in early! Super, brilliant, halarious story!
:)
~Nic (For the Embarassing Moment challenge)

Author's Response: Aww thank you so much! :') Hahaha, that cake part wasn't even planned, I just thought it up half way through writing that scene :P
I'm so glad you enjoyed it and found it funny though. Your review really had made my night :) Thank you very much! :D

~Siriusly

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AH HA HA HA! That was so cute! Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)

~Siriusly

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Hello, here from the big event challenge! :)
This was a really nice one shot, I love the next gen kids and it was funny too which is always good!
Loved how you had the next- gen characters perfecltly, they were really nice to read and it was a nice touch about Molly and her cake, it made it that extra little bit more believable.
Great job and the results will be in a blog soon, good luck! :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much :') I wasn't expecting such a nice review. I'm so glad you liked it :)

~Siriusly

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I just loved this story. It's so cute. Poor Albus.
Harry and Ron should not be allowed in the kitchen. lol
Great job.

Author's Response: Yay first review! Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it. And no they really shouldn't! :P

~Siriusly

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