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Review #1, by Freda_and_Georgina Honeydukes

11th July 2014:
Oooh, Rose got waaay more than she bargained for. It's like when you see a piece of trash in the road and go to pick it up. First you see it's money, then you see it's a good amount of money. From okay-to good-to great. Though, Mr. Duke's decision to give the store to her seems a little bit rushed. But then again I haven't read the first chapter (oops, is that a problem?) so I might be typing for no reason. Anyways, nice story so far. Keep it up!
--Georgina
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Review #2, by Fanatic Harry Potter Fan The Golden Key

24th November 2012:
The description of Hogsmeade is great and so is the small scene in Zonko's. The shoe tying is also a nice touch. But then the story fizzles. Rose suggests going to the Three Broomsticks, and getting a butterbeer, which seems like it should be said by Sonia or even Shivani. Maybe when Shivani/Sonia ties her shoe she can see something out of the corner of her eye. That would make a much more interesting discussion at the Three Broomsticks than one sentence about a boy. Check your spelling and grammar before posting next time. You've got a nice ability to write, I would just like to see more attention to detail and a better plot.

Author's Response: there will be a-lot more chapters so the plot hasn't come yet. I hope you like the rest of the chapters!

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