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Review #1, by Hats For House Elves Charlie

13th May 2014:
Its a well written sing fic but a few things that leapt out. You don't need to tell us when something is out of order. Either write it into the story or use dates as a heading. Readers will work it out. I'm not a great fan of the song fic people try too hard to get a plot directly out of the lyrics but the song choice here is brilliant. The flow still needs a little work. Since you are writing scenes out of order and in a few hundred words those few hundred words need to give a lot of context too. The idea is beautifully tragic and it could be a brilliant story with a few tweaks.

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