totally, absolutely, amazingly AWESOME!

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Loved it! Short but fun and thoroughly engaging. I've always loved Nevill and he will forever remain one of my favorite characters. And i think you portrayed him well here. So thank you.
I really appreciated your story...
Ok, now back to homework :(
Thanks again,

:)

Author's Response: You are more than welcome, and that you for the review! :)
Good luck with the homework!

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The thing that strikes me with this story is the parallels between Rose and Neville, and Rose and Scorpius and their parents. With Rose and Neville, you explore the similarities in their stories, how they weren't visibly brave during their early years at school, and how people may wonder why they were in Gryffindor. I think that was quite a clever link to form, but it really lends itself to the plot, so well done. :)
The end of the first section really mirrored that scene between Draco and Hermione in PoA, where she hits him. Neville's reaction, though he knows he ought not to be taking sides, made me smile. Obviously Neville and Draco still don't get along and Neville takes some satisfaction from Rose's actions, especially since Scorpius and Draco are probably alike.

To be picky, there were a few typos that I noticed, although they didn't massively distract from the story. A beta could easily fix those, though they were minor. On the whole, great job :)

-Scott

Author's Response: I went through this one-shot with a fine-tooth comb, and the revised version is now in the queue, so no more typo's :)

I'm glad you think I got a parallel between Rose and Neville, as that was really what I was aiming for, without making them basically the same person, so thank you very much for that!

Scorpius and Draco (in my mind anyway) are both very similar and completely different, so yes, Neville did get satisfaction from seeing Rose punch him, but then he also felt very happy when they got their happily-ever-after!

Thank you for the review :D

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Wow, what a lovely story! I admit, the lack of punctuation at the end of dialogue did annoy me (a lot - but that's my inner editor coming out) and there is a change of tense in the very first paragraph, but they barely detracted from the story. Having Neville - someone whose story we know oh so well - counselling a student (and even though it's Rose, it could really have been anyone) about whether they belong in their House is really lovely to see. No one understands how that feels more than Neville does, and it's great that he can help Rose to see that the Hat doesn't only see what we are at eleven, but what we have the potential to become. Beautifully done!

Author's Response: Yes, the punctuation is dire neeed to a good comb through! And I will get round to fixing it, I promise! I'm sorry it annoyed you so much!

I always thought Neville would be that professor that everyone and anyone could talk to, and the one that all the students went to with their problems.

Thank you so much for the lovely review! :D
I will definitely go back and get rid of those errors!

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Hey, there! I hope you don't mind a random review falling out of the sky and into your lap, but the title of your story caught my eye.

I thought you did a fantastic job with Neville in this. It wasn't a particularly easy juggling act, balancing his responsibilities as a teacher, his compassion for a student and his special attachment to Ron, Hermione and their family. But nothing felt forced or contrived about it. He could have been giving the same advice to any student, yet there was that extra layer of meaning he was able to bring to the conversation because he knows her family so well.

Your characterization of Rose was definitely a little unconventional, but I liked it. Most Next Gen stories don't highlight a vulnerable side to her. You avoided that fairly cliched archetype of brilliant, snarky, self-assured Rose Weasley and created somebody unique.

So I noticed two minor typos while I was reading:

... and that kind of stuck with me Rose Every time Malfoy and his cronies started at me... - You're missing a period at the end of the first sentence here.

“Thanks Professor” ripped back the tapestry and marched out of the passageway. - I think you meant to say, "She ripped back the tapestry..."

Otherwise, I thought your writing was good. Everything flowed pretty well and it was an easy read. I'd be totally remiss if I didn't point out my favorite part:

Bunny-hopping my way back to Gryffindor Tower, a bushy-haired, buck-toothed, bossy know-it-all springing up to undo the curse, a tall, lanky, befreckled, ginger youth telling me to start standing up for myself, and a short, skinny, bespeckled boy, with the messiest hair I’d ever seen, telling me that the Sorting Hat hadn’t been wrong, that I really did belong.

Nicely done!

Author's Response: Believe me, random reviews are always welcome here :D

I am so glad you think I got Neville's characterization right in this, as with canon characters, sometimes getting their personality right can be difficult! And I do believe that Neville would have given the exact same advice to any other student (but yes, the bond between her parents and him did help a little!)

And thank you so much! Saying that I did something different with Rose has really made my day ! :)

Yes, the typo's are an issue. . . . .I promise I will go back and sort those out at some stage!

That paragraph is one of my favorites too! Always makes me smile :)

Thank you for the review!

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Heya! I must say I loved the feeling this story gave me. It was very light-hearted and yet insightful. I was very interested in the part when Neville explained to Rose the difference between courage and bravery. I thought the explanation he gave her made a lot of sense and it was very deep. They're usually used as synonyms but reading the way you put it is actually amazing. I'll have to remember that one :D

Also, I appreciated how you made a parallel between Neville's story and Rose's. How he helped her come through with his own example. That's very inspiring in life, meeting and sharing experiences with someone that can truly understand how you feel because they've lived the same thing.

The only advice I can give you is to take more time to explore the characters. The interaction between Neville and Rose felt a bit rushed and not developed enough to make the impact it made on Rose. I read somewhere that this story is one that you've wrote when you were still new to the universe of ff and I totally understand how that is, but maybe when you have time you could edit it to correct the spelling mistakes. It would greatly enrich the story ;)

Author's Response: Awh! I'm glad this review gave you a good feeling inside, because I love it when novels, or one-shots do that (and to be told that I evoked some sort of reaction with one of my pieces is really great!)

Ah yes. . . .the dastardly grammar mistakes. This was one of my earlier pieces, and shamefully, I am yet to iron out all the kinks (I will get round to it! I promise!)

And you're right, it seemed like a short amount of time for such a powerful reaction, but I felt that because Rose knew Neville outside of school, maybe that would balance things out, though I will definitely go back over it! Thank you for pointing that out!

Thank you for the lovely review :D

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I do like that Rose punched Scorpius, they're both like their parents!
But then to have her going out with Scorpius later on was cute, he was clearly being mean because he liked her. I do like that each time she talked to Neville she stormed out of the tapestry yelling "OI! MALFOY!" That was funny
It was so nice and sweet to have Neville telling Rose how he wasn't brave either at the beginning, and how he was trying to get her to cheer up and see how brave she really was.
I do like that it was the same situation for Neville and Rose each time, poor Neville trying to get a sandwich and Rose managing to stop that happening.
Neville is a great teacher :D This was such a cute one shot! I really enjoyed this and I really hope that Neville eventually got his sandwich.

Author's Response: Rose and Scorpius are rather like their parents, aren't they :)

I always imagined Neville as that 'cool teacher', the one that all the students go to when they have a proble, so I'm glad this came across in this!

I hope Neville got his sandwich too!

Thank you for the lovely review!

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Helloo! :D

First of all, can I just say that your story title couldn't have been any better! I'm saying this for two reasons; one, I think it suits the story in general and two, it's helping with me...err...Common Room activities. ;)

I like the idea of Rose doubting the idea of her being a Gryffindor just because Scorpius told her so. (That was very mean of him, by the way. How would he feel if someone told him that he shouldn't be in Slytherin? Pretty bad, I hope.) And then three years later she's, once again, doubting her bravery but for an entirely new and happier (?) reason this time.

I love the last line where Neville takes pride in himself because he thinks that he helped to make their relationship happen. In my opinion, he probably did too.

Overall, this was a nice read, but I did spot a bunch of grammar errors along the way and, I have to be honest, they did annoyed be just a bit. So I really recommend you going over this or a beta and try to fix it up as much as you can. I think doing that will help bring the quality the story up more! Otherwise, I really liked it! Fantastic job!

A very happy Slytherin,
~Izzy

Author's Response: Oh! Glad I could help!

Yes, Rose was rather hurt when Scorpius told her that she didn't belong (it was rather mean of him, wasn't it?) The second reason is much happier, but still, a problem!

Neville was rather proud of himself, and I was rather proud of him!

The grammar errors, I really need to fix those! I'm sorry they annoyed you, I am going to edit it!

An even happier Hufflepuff,
Sarahjane

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Hello!

Well this was a cute little one-shot!

The first section was really sweet, Neville admitting that he wasn't always brave and that it was the trio that helped him find his courage.

I loved this line 'Bunny-hopping my way back to Gryffindor Tower, a bushy-haired, buck-toothed, bossy know-it-all springing up to undo the curse, a tall, lanky, befreckled, ginger youth telling me to start standing up for myself, and a short, skinny, bespeckled boy, with the messiest hair I’d ever seen, telling me that the Sorting Hat hadn’t been wrong, that I really did belong. If you had told me then, that they would turn out to be the saviours of the Wizarding World, I don’t think I would have believed you.' I think there would have been a few people who thought that!

I couldn't help but laugh at the fact that Neville couldn't stop Rose punching Malfoy, even if he was a teacher! It made me smile!

Then three years later we're back. I just love Neville in this - how he helps Rose understand how she's feeling.

Haha, I love that he feels like he helped them get together bless him. You definitely captured Neville at his best - although I kept laughing at how he wanted a sandwich!

There a few small spelling and grammar mistakes but apart from that, this is great!

Lauren :)

Author's Response: Hello :)

Yes, there are (many) grammar mistakes in this, as I wrote this when I was relatively new to the world of ff, before I realised one must either put a '.' or a ',' at the end of someone speaking, so I will get round to fixing it! Promise!

Yes, the Trio were a rather motley crew weren't they? I really don't think Neville was the only one to doubt them in the early years (after OOTP, I'd say everyone knew they meant business)

In my mind, Neville was just that really cool teacher who all the students related to. You know the one, the teacher that makes subjects interesting and you learn loads without even realising. . . .

And I just had to let Rose punch Scorpius, just had to!

Thank you for the review :D

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Hi there!

Well, this made for a nice little read. I liked how you portrayed Neville and showed him as such a nice and helpful teacher, which is what I'd expect of him. I loved how he remembered the trio urging him to stand up and be brave back in his days, and passing on those wise words to Rose.

Rose being tormented by Scorpius about the "true gryffindor" issue was believable and quite funny indeed, and I loved how she went in and punched him after Neville explained to her, she is truly her mother's daughter, haha. And then three years later when she is terrified because Scorpius asked her out, that totally was so cute it made go "aww". And Neville ships ScoRose wow, hahaha.

I enjoyed the whole plot a lot, and I think you did a great job, especially considering this was your first one-shot. I also enjoyed the concept of the difference between Bravery and Courage, it was very well-thought and I liked how Neville was the one to explain it as he is truly a character who has grown in this aspect throughout the series. So great job on that.

The only thing lacking in your story for which I have to give you CC is the grammar. There were several places where you have spelling typos (for example, you misspelled 'fought' somewhere), and you have a lot of missing and misplaced commas and periods (especially in dialogues). Your sentence phrasing is also off in a couple of places. I'd suggest getting a beta to read through this for you and fix all those technical errors as they can disrupt the flow of the story.

But apart from that, this was a very nice one-shot and I enjoyed it a lot. Good plot, good characterisation and well-thought concepts =)

8/10

Cheers!
AD
(AditiDraco95)
Slytherin Review Battle warrior ;)

Author's Response:
Yes, there are (many) grammar mistakes in this, as I wrote this when I was relatively new to the world of ff, before I realised one must either put a '.' or a ',' at the end of someone speaking, so I will get round to fixing it! Promise!

I just had to let Rose punch Scorpius, just had to! He deserved it anyway. . .in my mind at least

Oh! I'm really glad you said this, because I was worried poeple would be like 'Bravery and Courage are the same thing' and again, in my mind they are slightly different, so I'm glad you got that!

And whatever you Slytherins and Gryffindors are up to, I'm really enjoying these reviews ;)

May you live long and prosper young soldier!

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Congratulations on your first one shot. They can be challenging. I found it to be an interesting read, something I never would have thought to write - Nevile as a teacher. I did see some minor grammatical and technical errors I would like to point out - nothing major.

"You fount in the Battle" fought is misspelled.

“I didn’t necessarily ‘become brave’ Rose, I didn’t wake up one morning and decide ‘Oh, today I’m going to be brave’, it happened over time. - This whole sentence is a run-on and would have flowed better if it had been broken into a few smaller sentences.

I noticed a few missing periods at the end of a few sentences. I would love to read a bit more details about what was going on around them.

Again, nothing that took away from the story itself, just a few notes to keep in mind for your next writing journey.

Congrats again on your first one-shot. I hope there are more in your future.

~Celtic~

Author's Response:
Yes, there are (many) grammar mistakes in this, as I wrote this when I was relatively new to the world of ff, before I realised one must either put a '.' or a ',' at the end of someone speaking, so I will get round to fixing it! Promise! And thank you for pointing out the mashed together sentence, will fix that too!

Description is really not my strong suit, so I will most definitely go back and add some in (thank you for pointing this out by the way!)

Thank you for the review :D

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Hullo! I'm here from the review swap. :) Can I please just say that I love your banner? So gorgeous and simplistic!

Hahaha. I laughed out loud at your first chapter. I absolutely love Neville and I think you've captured him well; he definitely goes through one of the biggest transformations as the books go on and results in this kind of wry yet kindhearted person. He genuinely wants to help Rose feel better, all the while thinking about his beloved turkey sandwich. You're doing a great job with his characterisation, I can already tell from that one paragraph!

I love his reaction to Rose punching Scorpius in the face! So funny. I love her finishing his sentence for him three years later, and how things repeated themselves--except he wasn't cold when he sat on the floor XD

I also liked the repeat of how this time she was kissing him instead. Very cute ending indeed!

Author's Response: Thank you :) I really did try to capture Neville to the best of my ability! I read and reread his wikia page so many times, I almost have it off my heart!! :P Thank you so much for such a nice review :) Hee :) Fuzzyness :) And also, you told me to tell you when Chapter 3 of SBIH is posted, so consider yourself told :D Thank you again for all your help with that! :)

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Oh, this was lovely. I loved the way you portrayed Neville and the way he pushes his teacher role away for a moment to become the almost-parent.

Rose is great too, and the way you repeat the same scene in different circumstances is really good.

I also like your description of Neville's job, with students wrestling plants and him in the middle of the hub trying to keep everyone alive!

Only thing I'd have to say is your punctuation that seems slightly off to me sometimes, but that wasn't a problem and this story was a nice one to read :)

I'm also going to return your advice and suggest getting a banner for this, to attract people more?

Oh and congratulations for being Runner Up on the challenge, of course!

:)

Author's Response: I actually already have a banner :) So your advice was followed, even before it was given :D Thank you so much :) It was actually my first challenge entry, so it was exciting to write :) Thank you for reviewing :D

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This is your oneshot!! i've read this countless times b4 and it was one of my favourites but I never got the chance to review :D
I love this story so much and Neville was perfect. You write your charecters so well :D. I also liked how at the end of each part she goes "OI MALFOY!" and then Neville says "I know i'm a teacher" It was brilliant.
10/10 and more if i could

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing :) I LOVE NEVILLE :) I thought the 'OI MALFOY' was very Ron-esque, and since she is his daughter, I just had to :) Thanks again!!

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This is the first fic I've read on this site that I've felt compelled to comment on... I just LOVE your Neville. What a wonderful story.

Author's Response: Thank you :)
Awh! Your first fic :D I'm really glad you liked it :)

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Great!!! Great story really! I didn't like much that Rosie is so weepy but then I'd go mad if I were in those situations xD Really good job =D I love Neville even more now ;)

Author's Response: I know, Rose was a little bit weepy, but I tried to make her her own person, instead of just basing her off her mom and dad :) Neville is just a babe :) I love Neville :D

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That was awesome i think that you should write
another story and Check out my story
Unexpected Bossoming Love

Author's Response: Ok! I'll go check that out and thank you for reading :)

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Here from the Strange Meeting challenge!

Well, this was sweet! It was really lovely to get a little glimpse of Neville as a teacher. I can imagine him being quite good at the pastoral side of it as well as being passionate about Herbology (although I can’t actually imagine him shouting at students - but if he was going to, it would be to protect his plants!). He’s really understanding and caring, yet still a slightly tired teacher - AND he’s very much Neville. I particularly enjoyed his memories of school, particularly of Harry, Ron and Hermione.

I thought the idea of repeating a moment in two different parts of Rose and Neville’s lives is a great one, really clever and simple. The way that what’s upsetting her changes significantly is a really nice touch- and I really love that it’s Scorpius both times!

The first moment is really well chosen, as Neville definitely doubted that he was a true Gryffindor when he was at school. The second moment was just adorable; particularly when you consider the bullying Neville suffered at the hands of Scorpius’s dad! Neville’s wisdom about courage and bravery was really well written... in fact, it made me feel quite emotional as it reminded me of something my dad told me one when he returned from deployment.

There are one or two misplaced or missing commas, but they didn’t detract from the story as a whole.

Overall, you’ve done a great job of taking the two characters you were given and writing them in a believable situation. I really enjoyed this - and my favourite line might just be ‘OI! MALFOY!’... she is so Ron’s daughter. Adorable.

Athene xoxo

Author's Response: Thank you so much!!! :) I'll go and fix some of those grammatical errors asap! :) Ahhh! I feel all fluffy inside now :)

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Loved it. Very cute and sweet :)

Author's Response: Thank you :) I'm very much so a fluff writer :) THANK YOU FOR READING :)

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YAY NEVILLE SHIPPED ROSE/SCORPIUS!
I giggled throughout this whole story. It was really well done! :D
I saw on your author's page you were a Hufflepuff! YAY FOR HUFFLEPUFF'S! :D
This was really good, good luck in the challenge! :D

Author's Response: I know!!! Gooo Neville :) Thank you so m,uch for such a nice review :) *hugs* HUFFLEPUFFS ROCK MY SOCKS :) heeheehee :)

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