I wandered back to this website after many years, and found your new (to me) story. Another great Lavender tale, good job!
One suggestion: Maybe you could put hints of Lavender's bigger role before the end?Author's Response: Thanks! I'm basically just like you although I do check in a bit more frequentluy (maybe once month). I still sign into the forum maybe a few times a year. But new social media like Facebook grabbed my internet time (and online chess & scrabble, but I'm a better writter than a chess player ( I gotta stop playing Ron's gambit as black (Scandanvian defense) and I'm at last sick of it)
As for this tale, its is fairly new (less than a year) the first tale added in about 3 years I think. I suddenly developed the need to write it after wasting time one cold winter day reading old forum posts. I like the idea you presented and it makes sense that some foreshadowing is needed, but I don't have any clue as to how I could 'hint' though, but maybe a brainstorm will strike one day (I haven't read it in full in a while) and I'll decide to waste time revising it.
You mentioned the other Lavender tale which is the "Pipsqueak Warrior" and that is not on hiatus. I actually write a bit on it each month (its my opus) and I have completely rewritten the thing (mainly the first chapter) but haven't posted it. I've learned not to post until perfection.I ran into timeline problems because so much was written as a flashback and to get the right consistent tone for dark second person writing especially in sections written so many years apart is difficult. But about a month ago in rare idle time - On a Amtrak train ride to Albany, NY which I figured was a good time to edit old fanfiction as long as I didn't read it out loud, LOL! - I found a way around the the timeline blunder I'd made and so all I have to do is find time to fix it up and write it, plus two or three chapters that if I ever get to should flow fast (at least for first drafts. But this story will be finished and posted here in complete fashion one day! Thanks for your review, Pink! Report Review
Great story! Loved it!Author's Response: Thank You!
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