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Review #1, by Owlpost68 Dobby's Grave

6th April 2013:
That was a really intriguing ending! This could really be a great story with a few little tweaks. For example there are quite a few sentences that are awkwardly worded, their pretty easy to find either a Beta would help or to just go over it yourself. Also there was a mistake with a word "But it was much worst." Worst should be Worse.

I also think there could be a better introduction to what her name is, I personally didn't think it fit right where it was, but that could be me.

I really thought you did a great job with introducing what a mystery this story is, and the flow was really good too.
Good luck with the rest of it, this definitely has the potential for awesomeness :)
Owlpost68 (from review swap convo. sry I took so long).

Author's Response: Ah, thank you for the critique. This is a little old to be absolutely honest, and your review will be brilliant to take a look at while I'm trying to rewrite it properly. I do have some... bad typos, don't I? I seem to do that a lot.

Thank you for the brilliant review. I'll have your share of the swap as soon as I can, thank you.


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Review #2, by Celtic_Dreamer7 Dobby's Grave

3rd March 2013:
This is awesome! By far, one of the most intriguing and interesting beginnings I have read on the archive. I can't believe only one chapter is up. I do wish there were more. The detailed descriptions of Hermione's memory, the italicized readings from the book - completely remarkable. I do love how you leave the main character and the Hufflepuff student a mystery and not introduce them at the very beginning. It really draws the reader in, trying to distinguish who the characters truly are. I do hope you have plans to continue this, at least maybe a short novella. I would love to continue reading how she could save the world. Great job!

~Celtic~

Author's Response: This review was such an amazing thing to see that morning. This beginning was more easy to write than most, and I'm incredibly delighted to hear that you liked it.

I honestly, really don't know what to say.

Thank you for this brilliant review that has me smiling just reading it.


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Review #3, by Ring_Felton97 Dobby's Grave

20th September 2012:
Oooh! I love this Wisty! It's so dramatic and well written! Write moreee please! I can't wait to read the next chapter. :)

-Sheryl < 3

Author's Response: THANK YOU SO MUCH SHERYL . It really means a lot you saying that. I will indeed update :D -Wistful

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Review #4, by Ydnas Odell Dobby's Grave

18th September 2012:
Wow. I've got to favorite this one. What a cliffhanger. You write well.

Author's Response: omg, thank you so much for favoriting. Definitely don't deserve it.

Cliffhangers


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