I really loved how you started it! I can not wait for the next chapter!! And I can not wait for James and Emma! I really like this story so far.Author's Response: Thank you so much!! I actually think I have another chapter of this ready to post, so thanks for reminding me. Report Review
How sweet! I liked the way you started--telling us George's doubts about marrying Angelina really helped cement him as a real character. I think you did a really good job telling us plausible information--such as a wave of relatives trying to get close to the Weasleys we know, haha.
For critique, I think I would have liked to have seen how George proposed. With the way you started the story, I was sort of expecting to see it in the chapter and was surprised that it wasn't shown. Since this is a short story collection, I think it would have been nice to get the short scene of how George proposed and then have you continue on with the introductory things you mentioned later in the chapter, as opposed to you telling us that it happened.
That said, I think you're off to a wonderful start! Good luck with the rest! :)Author's Response: Thanks for the suggestion! I'll go back and see if I can fit the proposal in. Report Review
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