I love this story. Can't wait for chapter 2!Author's Response: Thanks. I was almost done with chapter two, but then it was lost. I'll get it up soon. Report Review
Hey! You left me a bunch of reviews, so I thought I'd return the favor. :)
I am a sucker for a good ol' sirius/oc, but this is so short! It started out with a definite first chapter vibe, but then you jumped in. I think that slowing it down a little and explaining the motives behind your characters actions would greatly improve this story. :) I do like how gutsy you made your character. I've kind have gotten sick of the Sirius/OC's full of fainting ninny-like girls. :) Anyway, great effort. I'd love to see more just to witness how you grow as a writer!
LuckyAuthor's Response: Don't worry. I have a surprise lined up for the readers. Nobody will expect it. Report Review
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