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Review #1, by MileyMalfoy Through My Sister's Eyes

12th July 2014:
I have chills right now. Having lost family members I can totally understand Ravi's being sad and crying a lot, and the way you capture little Padma wanting to help her sister and make sure she smiles is just so precious. I love that even at six she seems to understand something so important, and that she's able to help her sister. I also love that she had that relationship with her Aunt that she could be told stories by her and that she would remember them and try to act on the advice even in this kind of situation. I really liked how you characterised the girls, how there were differences between Parvati and Padma even though they are so alike, and I love that you brought an older sister into the mix.

Great job!
~ Meg
House Cup 2014 Review

Author's Response: Hello Meg!
Thank you for another lovely review! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! I wrote it such a long time ago that not many people read it, so I'm thrilled that you decided to give it a look. I like to imagine that as teenagers Padma is a lot quieter and more reflective than Parvati, and that was a big influence on how I wrote her as a kid. She's thoughtful and caring even at such a young age, and I think this kind of sad event was a good time to showcase that. I'm glad you enjoyed her character and her relationships with her family! Thank you again for the review!
Cassie :)

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Review #2, by Iellwen Through My Sister's Eyes

10th July 2014:
Hey Cassie! :)
Reviewing in the name of Love! And The House Cup 2014 ^^

I just couldn't resist a sister theme :D

This was a really adorable one-shot and I love the way you brought forth the simplicity and naivety of a young child facing the departure of the dead.
I love Padma's take on not being selfish, on being happy for her Aunt who can see Nana again. That was a really warm and positive thought.

I couldn't pinpoint Padma's age until she asked her older sister Ravi if she remembered - Ravi was 13 and the twins were 4, now Ravi is 15 so the twins are 6. Wonderfully subtle way to give the reader information!! :D

It's very surprising to me that Padma asked questions and made sure Ravi remembered before continuing telling her story, because it shows just how gentle she is, caring for others and knowing empathy (that's rare in a child, in my opinion^^).
"Smile no matter what because happiness can work miracles" is a wonderful motto and a wonderful thing to tell a child... Or someone grieving after making them smile.

I really love that Padma worried so much that her eldest sister was different, that she wasn't smiling anymore, and that it wasn't good. ♥

This was a very warm and loving one-shot, even if a close relative of them passed away, it takes a courageous and gentle soul to worry about others.
I really liked reading this :)


Author's Response: Hello!
I'm so glad you enjoyed this story! I loved writing it, because I think there are so many moments in life that seem really sad or negative, and kids are able to have such a positive outlook on them anyway. I wanted to show the hopefull side that can be found even in a dark situation like this.
I always thought of the Patil twins, Padma would be the quieter one. Probably because JKR always has Parvati giggling with Lavender, and we don't see Padma very often in the books. I wanted to expand this, and make her a quieter child, too, and I think she would be more of the observer, looking out for what other people need.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing this for me!
Cassie :)

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Review #3, by Santa Through My Sister's Eyes

27th December 2012:
Hello, I've come to review some of your oneshots as well :D

And wow, wow, wow! This is just wonderful. I'm going to say it's a pretty amazing story for such a short concise piece of writing. You've captured the voice of the child perfectly. Your attention to detail, the sentences, the simplicity and grace of the language...this is just fantastic writing. And I love the understated tone of this piece; it's not melodramatic at all, and there are things that the adult reader would understand that the child Padma obviously does not...and you've done really well to write these in. Whatever is unsaid in this piece is so beautiful - it really shows a child's attitude to unknowable things like death and life and change.

And the story Padma chose to tell Ravi! That was a brilliant ending. I'm really impressed and touched by this piece. I do hope you write more oneshots; you're really really good at them and I'm so glad that I chose to read this story! Fantastic!

Author's Response: I'm really pleasantly surprised that this was the first one-shot of mine you reviewed! It's my only really heavy one-shot, and it was a challenge for me to write!
I'm so glad you think this is detailed and the voice is childlike. I worked really hard on keeping that voice while also having enough emotion in there. So that fact that you picked up on the understated sadness is wonderful!!! And how Padma doesn't understand everything that's happened but can still help her sister. That was really important for me to achieve in this story! Thank you for the brilliant review!
Cassie :)

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Review #4, by Gabriella Hunter Through My Sister's Eyes

19th September 2012:

I should have read this right when you told me but I didn't have the time and I'm sorry! But this was actually a good surprise because I wasn't quite sure where this was going at first. I think that putting this to another child named Padma was a nice touch and it allowed me to get a better sense of the time and place. Of course, her innocence was refreshing to read as well, especially about her Auntie passing away. It was a good thing I think because alot of kids sort of have that thought that, even though someone is gone, they're with someone they love. The distinction between Padma and Ravi was great as well, I was able to see that they really cared for one another and the ending was too sweet! This had some obvious sad parts of course but I have to say that it left me smiling at the end and that last line made me feel all warm and fuzzy! So excellent job! I didn't catch any grammar things and I really loved the pacing so no worries! :D
I have to actually work on my challenge for this so wish me luck! :D For some reason, Ms. Ginny is giving me some trouble! D': I'll figure her out soon enough!
p.s.: Abandon's second chapter should be up really soon, the queue is actually pretty short this time so look out for that!
Much love,

Author's Response: Hi Gabbie! It's great to see you as review number 1 on this story!
I'm so glad that you enjoyed this, and liked that I chose Padma to write for! I'm going through a phase where I'm really loving her character and am writing her a lot (she's Darcy's mum in ASOS, so she shows up there and in The Boy with the Blue Hair :D).
I think kids have a really interesting perspective on life, and it's really fascinating, so with things like death, they have such a simple and clear understanding, that even if they don't really know what's happening, they have a really enlightening way of looking at it!
I really enjoyed giving Padma and Parvati another sister that they could look up to.
The ending was really fun for me to write! I knew as soon as I wrote her Auntie's advice for her that I wanted to end with it, too.
I'm so, so glad you enjoyed this! It was a challenge for me to write, but I'm really pleased with how it turned out! Thank you so much for the amazing review!
Cassie :)

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