Happy Birthday fellow Gryffie! Well, a day early ;).
I was really anxious to see what the unforeseen even would be that the title suggested, and oh my gosh it didn't disappoint!
I loved that you gave us such an awesome look into Al's and Scoprius's friendship. The relaxing summer days after exams, just hanging out and talking about girls, and the fact that they still spent time together over summer were really awesome ways to show how close they are as friends. That made what he saw and wasn't told about even more serious, because he'd expect his best friend and brother to be honest with him I'm sure.
This is a small detail, but I really loved how at Al's birthday when you were talking about all the speeches, Hermione's was a more serious one. That really was an excellent bit of personality to make her so canon. And Al not being able to imagine his aunt as an adolescent is SO cute! Probably because we saw Hermione as only that, so it's easy for us. I really loved that, as well.
I also liked that you showed us a bit of James and Al's relationship early on to help us understand that they're close. Again, it goes even farther to help us see how hard this probably as for Al to accept at first.
I loved that you didn't have him freaking out at the end of it. He didn't seem happy that he hadn't been told, but he didn't seem angry at them either. It really went along with the calm sort of character you built for him through this.
Awesome story, m'dear! And again, a very happy birthday ♥Author's Response: Thank you for a lovely review! That was a really nice bibirthday present! :-)
I'm glad you like the story. I wrote it for a challenge, and this is not a pairing I'm awfully used to (being an Albus/Scorpius shipper myself...) But it was fun to write.
I'm also happy that I managed to surprise you. I wasn't sure when I wrote it how to write clues to the ending without giving it away.
Thanks! :-) Report Review
Hi there! Siriusly89 with a review as requested :) To be honest, I've never really read slash, but this was really good! Sometimes, it felt a teeny bit plotless, but it all made sense at the end! My one recommendation is to jazz up the middle of the story just a tiny bit! Maybe Scorpius could bring Minnie over??? Just a suggestion :)Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! I think you made a good suggestion about having Minnie over in the middle of the story. It might help to keep up the pace. Thanks! :-) Report Review
Wow, James is a total prick. They kept the relationship secret and didn't even give Albus the chance to figure things out. The betrayal of going behind his back and Scorpius kinda using the excuse of staying with his "best friend" Albus for the summer, when he's actually there for James, is enough to anger and alienate most people for a time. Albus needs to man up and express his disappointment in how he was treated and let Scorpius and James know that it's not okay.Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! Yeah, I guess Albus has a right to feel a bit disappointed and confused. Report Review
Never seen that before.
Interesting.Author's Response: Thank you for reading and reviewing! :-) Report Review
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