Hi there! I'm here from the forums with your review :) Also, sorry for the delay. It turned out I had more homework than I originally thought.
Normally I wouldn't read such a Draco-centric fic but I really enjoyed this! You described his epiphany (I guess that's what you would call it?) so well. How he slowly realized he could try and change his values a little and do what was right.
I especially loved how you stayed true to a lot of his core personality traits. For example, you get the sense that he will still always save his own neck first. ("Between Father, Mother, and I, it was an unspoken consensus that by this point of the War, the only importance was our safety.")
You also get a feeling that he's still arrogant and a little proud but he realizes killing people isn't the answer and that he owes Harry a debt since he saved his life.
Good job, I really enjoyed this piece! :)
- FaithAuthor's Response: I'm glad that you liked it!
Yeah, I normally wouldn't write a Draco-centered fic either, but this was the best opportunity, if that made any sense. Anyways, I'm glad that you can see Draco is still himself because that is the one thing that irks me: when Draco in Next Generation of Post-Hogwarts acts completely OOC xD
Thank you so much for this review! (: Report Review
I could see Draco thinking this way.
Good work.Author's Response: thank you so much! (: Report Review
I loved this. Loved. This. Story.
I really liked how you brought in the idea of his values and how he reevaluates them. I like the idea of him making a promise to himself to change. It reminded me of the quote 'Be the change you want to be in the world' which is acclaimed to Gandhi. I can see how this built up over the years and I really like that you reference previous events.
This reminded me of the song 'Man in the Mirror' and the scene where Draco is in the bathroom...looking...in the mirror... anyways!
I really loved the look into his mind and how you did everything! I think that this is the perfect ending for this particular idea because values are not something that you can fix over night but something that you can decide to adjust.
Great insight. Great story. Brilliantly written! Loved it!Author's Response: im so glad that you liked this!
that quote by Gandhi certainly fits Draco because he has to become the change.
hm i've never heard of that song but I'll have to check it out!
I think so too! The reason why I sympathized with Draco so much after HBP is because I feel like he gradually goes through this change and certainly not over night because in HBP we can see that he still isn't a great person. but then by the time that the war is over, we know that Draco has become a far better person.
thanks so much! i'm so glad you like it! :D
A very good fic, I really enjoyed it and a great perspective on Draco. This is kind of always how I thought his mind was working, though I'd always wondered why it had taken him so long to come around to the correct mindset, but you manage to portray it very well.
There were a few errors I noticed that I thought I'd point out for you:
"I hadn't mean for it to come to this" (meant)
"standing there in the sidelines" (think this should be on instead of in but that is just my opinion)
"sitting in my classes and I'd listen to her" (listened)
"if I could find a way to make fix it." maybe take out the make
Otherwise, all great work. I really loved it.
TyrannicFeenixAuthor's Response: oohhh thanks so much for pointing out the mistakes!
and I'm so glad that you liked it! I always thought that an insight to Draco's mind would be interesting. Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! (: Report Review
I swear we are sharing a brain cell!
This is exactly what I pictured Draco thinking during this scene. His internal strugle between what he had been taught and what he knew in his heart was right... perfect. It actually lines up nearly perfectly with my own new Draco oneshot Final Bloom!
There were a few tense errors, but nothing a quick beta or reread won't take care of.
Keep up the great work!!
~Moon~Author's Response: it looks like great minds think alike! Loll
and thanks for pointing out the mistakes!
im going back to correct them now hehe
thanks so much! thanks for reading and reviewing! Report Review
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