Ugh I just absooutley love this story! Updat soon please.
Louis so perfect and seemingly worldly, but why does he need a job at a muggle resturant? And does Ava have any real ambition for like a real job i.e reporter, designer, chef, etc. Or was she just planing on marriang Ian and never working? And why hasn't she began working two jobs or three? Report Review
Dying to read the next chapter. YES DYING.
And knowing that its 99.something done. And having CIE's.
REALLY LOOKING FORWARD TO CHAPTER 7 :D Report Review
AH! I love it. MORE PLEASE! I love LOUIS AND NEED MORE CHAPTERS! I hope Ava gets over Ian soon. She's one quarter there :)
Love your writing. NEVER STOP.
~LoVe_Sirius Report Review
This is definitely my favorite chapter of any fanfic ever wow amazing 10/10 would recommend. Hurry with the next chapter please! Report Review
thank you for writing! It is so fun to read at last! Report Review
Well, I just accidentally posted my review for this chapter on your first one. So I feel quite similar to Ava right now, FML. XD
I love it, though. Your writing is showing a true talent. :) Report Review
It appears to me they're both a little messed up, or am I just imagining it?
Great story, as I've said before. I enjoy it profoundly. :) Report Review
i have an exam tomorrow and im falling in love with a fictional character. god bless me.
needless to say your writing skills have worked their magic
Em Report Review
ah so this chapter I feel a little more amicable towards Ian. I still don't really like him, but I can appreciate him a lot more after seeing him like that.
But when it comes to Louis ♥ ♥ ♥
I hate it when she sees Louis as Ian and it really makes me hurt for Louis more than anything :( So I'm definitely glad that she's starting to see him for who he really is and all of the differences.
I loved the chapter! I'm really glad it's kind of officially finished with Ian because that was messing with her head too much among all her other problems and I feel like Louis is the shining light at the end of the tunnel and he could be really good for her (so long as she doesn't end up hurting him!)
Also I'm disappointed in Matt, like woah is that what he really thinks of her?? I mean I know he was drunk but is that what he's always thought of her and never said or? Woah.
Anyway brill chapter and I can't wait to see what happens next! ♥ (especially since Ava's now taken to sleeping in Louis' bed) Report Review
First of, How I Met Your Mother reference, ajhqafasg.
Ahem, now to the more sane part of the review.
I continue to adore your writing, 'cause it's clear that you have talent and then some. Besides that, I like how the story is developing, it's like a little mystery unfolding over time (i.e. the mention of Ian, who is a past love of Ava's, I assume, Louis stating that he's not a relationship guy-did something happen to make him afraid to be one, or...). And I enjoy a good mystery, especially if it has other elements thrown in it, like romance, humour, etc.
In short, I love it and can't wait to read it all. :) Report Review
Great writing! Great story! Great characters! ... So far. :P No, I'm joking, this is amazing and I can tell it will be magnificent throughout. :) 10/10 Report Review
I haven't left you a review for this story before but since I'm now trying to review every chapter I read I thought it was about time. I'm really enjoying this story and it's really interesting to see how you develop the plot with each chapter.
Ava is...seriously messed up. Her life is in a horrible place right now and she obviously needs someone there to help her sort it out. I feel sorry for Louis, but someone needs to be there to help her through. Louis is probably one of my favourite characters in this story, and I'm looking forward to know a lot more about him. When you think about it, there aren't actually that many characters who have come into this story, which is actually quite a nice change to authors who find it necessary to put every single character in the first chapter. Matt's another character I really like at the moment.
I'm not really sure how to feel about Ava. Of course, since everything is narrated from her POV, I feel sorry for her, but at the same time, since she's the one who broke up with Ian I can't help feeling that she should be trying to get over him rather than moping about it and trying to find a substitute. I guess that's why I feel sorry for Louis more than her - he deserves more than being a substitute for a guy that he's never met but that Ava's in love with.
Ian is another character I'm not really sure how to feel about yet. I don't dislike him after seeing him stand up to his parents over Ava in this chapter (I hate his mother though) but I feel like I don't know enough about his character yet to form an opinion on him.
Since I speak French, one of the things I'm really enjoying is the way that Louis is telling Ava his feelings without her being able to understand. I sometimes (particularly when I'm annoyed) say things in another language when I know that whoever I'm talking to can't understand, so it's quite realistic, but romantic as well.
You did make one mistake with the French here, though, and I hope you don't mind me pointing it out. Instead of "je suis vraiment peur" it should be "j'ai vraiment peur" (you have fear in French rather than are scared, although I'm sure you don't want a lesson on it!).
Anyway, I'm really enjoying this story and I hope the updates keep coming!
Sian :) Report Review
Wow, the drama. Intense. I like it. I especially like that she gradually learns to see Louis as his own person. Seems like walking out of Ian's life this last (?) time really was a step towards closure and moving on. I like Ian... and I think Ava's not right to make the choice for him. If he wants to have her in his life, and go against his parents, she should let him make that decision. Though I do understand her too -and that it's really hard on her, to be the one tearing him from his world, so to speak.
I'm curious about Ava's family. Also, about Louis. I anticipate their opening up to each other. Report Review
Ian's mum is so - blargh! (keeping them reviews 12+), but i'm sure you understand how i feel about her ;)
I quite liked how Ian was portrayed! It wasn't the typical rich boy. I really loved how he was standing up for Ava. I legit went: AW!
More than anything, it was the Ava-Louis moments that made me love the chapter! I'm glad she finally understood that Ian and Louis are two different people! It means that she's (sorta) getting over him! :D I like how Louis keeps expressing his feelings - although in French! At least at no point can she say "you never told me you felt like that" or something along those lines!
Sorry for the ramble-y review. I'm going to stop now! Update soon! :D Report Review
amazing chapter, babe. I was a bit teary at some points, because you can see how messed up ava really is and how much louis wants to help her. my heart broke a little bit when matt told him she was nothing but trouble, to be honest. I was eating my prawn toast and mentally yelling YOU'RE HER BEST FRIEND, YOU MEAN, MEAN BOY. but, it seems to me like she finally has closure with ian, and ending things with him. like, it was unfinished before, but she's ended it now and so can really start to move on.
*with louis, cough.
adore louis, as per. he's adorable and his lurveee for ava is beyond cute and they better get married because he deserves it though ava needs to sort her shizz out first. love her and all, but wowza. btw, moving in with lou permanently? GOOD IDEA. try it. dare ya. make my shipper heart.
yeah, it's 4:50 in the morning. can you tell? nighttt
ellie :) xx Report Review
She's moving on!!!
..and she's sleeping in Louis's bed!
Keep writing :D
lOonyAuthor's Response: Yep! Sort of!
...and yeah, she is for now ;)
I am :D
Thanks for the review ♥ Report Review
I'm always excited when i see a new chapter! I love this story! The only disturbing thing to me, is that Ava rarely uses magic... For example she got herself a cub why not apparate?
Hope you update soon
Greetings from Greece
-MariaAuthor's Response: Awww, thank you! I'm so glad :) I really love writing this story. You're right - she doesn't usually use magic, mostly because she's kind of embedded herself in the Muggle world. In this case, however, she took a cab because she doesn't have her wand with her. It's in her flat, which she can't go back to. So yeah. Thanks for the review! :D Report Review
So uh I somewhat understand French and I KIND OF JUST DIED A LITTLE INSIDE WHEN I READ THE PARTS WHERE LOUIS SPOKE FRENCH, LIKE UGH MY HEART BROKE FOR HIM, NO BIG DEAL. ASDKFJASDFF this chapter was A+. Please update again soon!! This fanfic is one of my absolute favourites!!!Author's Response: Haha, I am very glad you understood my awful attempts at French. AND I'M SORRY FOR MAKING YOUR HEART BREAK, BUT IT'S NECESSARY FOR THE STORY. ADFKLJFKSLDJ why thank you! Next chapter is in the queue :) Report Review
This story is so good, I love it!! I'm just loving it and this is going to be a really short sucky review because I'm really tired and about to go to sleep but basically I love Ava and Matt and Louis (I hate Ian though haha) and I love your plot! I also thought back in chapter two or wherever that the drunk part was really good and it seemed like a pretty good way to get the drunkenness across (very accurate too haha) And I loved your little P&P reference with Mr Drancy ;) I'm super behind in reading your other stories (not quite sure why I thought it would be a good idea to start another one instead of catching up...) but I will eventually catch up on them! aha
Looove this story! ♥Author's Response: Awww, thank yooouuu ♥ It's not a short or sucky review, so no worries, haha. I'm glad you love all the characters (although I'm not glad that you hate Ian) and the plot! Haha thanksss, I didn't really know what I was doing with that drunk bit but I'm glad it worked out well. And yes, congrats on spotting the P&P reference! I personally love that novel and Mr. Darcy, of course, but I just feel as if Ava would not ;) Glad you liked it so much! Thanks for the lovely review :D Report Review
MY FEELS. THEY'RE ALL OVER THE PLACE. AVA. WHAT YOU DOING. I nearly melted when he said 'i can't stop thinking about you Ava' - in french of course. I'm a sucker for romance so you got me there ;)
Sorry for yelling at Ava - i'm a bit hyped up on caffeine at the moment :P
Update soon! :DAuthor's Response: ASKLJGS;D'FJK THE FEELS. AVA. STAHP. I hope you didn't literally melt; that would be rather messy and inconvenient. Of course Louis can say something like that in French because she can't understand him. But in English? Never.
Ahaha, it's okay. I understand :)
Next chapter is going in the queue very, very soon. Thanks for the review! Report Review
I've been 'tracking' your writing! Love,love,love!! You're a fab writer! Hope everything is well at college and all! :)Author's Response: Ahaha, "tracking" my writing? Thank you so much! I'm flattered ;) And yes, college is going very well ^_^ Report Review
This is so wonderfully written. Everything flows marvelously. I can't wait for more!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I've put a lot of time into writing this story, so I'm glad it shows :) Report Review
AWE! "i can't stop thinking about you, Ava. And I don't know what to do about it." That is so adorable that i'm about to cry.
I'm so glad you updated another chapter. This is one of my favourites story. I love how Ava's character is realistic and i love how Louis is so sweet.
I hope another chapter comes real soon :DAuthor's Response: Awww, don't cry! It's not supposed to make you cry! :O
Ahaha, I'm also very glad that I've updated. It's been far too long. I love writing this story so much, so I'm happy that comes across in the characters.
It will! It's nearly done right now!
Thanks for the review! Report Review
YAY I KNOW FRENCH SO I KNEW WHAT YOU WERE SAYING.
can louis and ava just please get together please.
THE TITLE OF THIS CHAPTER. well thats a start of something new.
update soon!Author's Response: YAY I'M GLAD YOU COULD UNDERSTAND MY ATTEMPTS AT FRENCH.
Ahaha, well we'll just have to wait and see, won't we?
YES. SNAPS FOR YOU. Nice observation ;)
Thanks for the review! Report Review
i am in love with louis
please update soonAuthor's Response: He loves you too ;)
Short and sweet. I like it.
Thanks for the review! Report Review
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