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Review #1, by FreshPickledToad16 We Need to Talk

1st May 2016:
I have loved the last few chapters! I have never read such a realistic, complex, satisfying account of Hermione's reunion with her family. This is perfect. And on a personal note, Sydney is one of my favorite places on the planet. It was so fun to imagine them exploring the Rocks, taking a ferry, and looking at the amazing view from the Park Hyatt. I'm so glad I stumbled upon your writing! Love it!

Author's Response: Apologies for taking so long to respond to your review, for which, thanks. It has been quite some time since I visited this site.

And Sydney is my home town so I had a lot of fun writing about our heroes experience of it.

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Review #2, by siriusmadfan Let's Do a Deal

1st April 2016:
I thought u might had some political experience after reading this chapter. It's astounding! So different and so mature when compared to some other fan fictions. I thought this maturity level in plot, and in the characters (especially Ron) is overwhelming. But it's age appropriate. I still see them as underage kids. Great one. Thanks for ur effort and time.

Author's Response: Apologies for taking so long to respond to your reviews, for which, thanks. It has been quite some time since I visited this site.

I have had no direct experience of politics except, tangentially, where it intersects with the business world but I am a history buff and an avid reader so I guess that helps.

Thanks for the generous reviews.

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Review #3, by siriusmadfan Dinner Party

1st April 2016:
Hi, I loved this chapter. The amount of thought you've put for world building for wizards around the globe is great. I enjoyed it immensely. This chapter(and previous one) came close to the excitement I had when I read HP for first time. It was so much enjoyed. Thank u so much for putting ur time and effort. Very much appreciated. But I felt contradictive about skipping some subjects in school at Aussie. If u don't learn to transform pencil, u can't do it for bigger objects. It's mandatory for most careers. (Still, it's ur story. So take no offence) So, overall 9 rating

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Review #4, by CambAngst Heroes

29th August 2015:
I'm back again! I wanted to get one more chapter in before bedtime.

GryCReMo (Review #45)

I think you're pacing this story brilliantly. I love the fact that you're taking your time and allowing things to unfold in a very organic, unforced way.

Poor Ron. He's going to have a lot of hard days ahead. It's wonderful that he'll have Hermione by his side to help him through it.

Ginny's letter was well written. You hit on all of the notes that I would have expected from her: frustration, relief, affection, sadness and just a bit of that temper of hers. I think Harry has a very interesting conversation in his near future.

The conversation between the trio was vital to where it seems you're taking the story. In all of the best post-war stories, Harry's trademark humility and unselfishness shine through. Also, his desire not to be the sole center of attention. You did a good job capturing all three of them being supportive of one another and generally making the most of the few precious moments they'll be granted before things go completely crazy.

Again, beautiful writing. I didn't see a single typo.

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Review #5, by CambAngst We're Alive!

29th August 2015:
Hi, there! I've had this story on my "plan to read" list for quite a while. It seemed like a good time, since I'm in the middle of a reviewing event. Please pardon me while I do a quick bit of scorekeeping:

GryCReMo (Review #44)

I thought you did a really great job with this first chapter. You hit a really good balance with the emotions of all of the characters. The mood was somber and respectful, but it's obvious that the huge emotional toll hasn't fully set in yet. They're all shell-shocked and exhausted and they will need a lot of time to process what's happened and grieve. But for right now, they just need food and sleep.

Kingsley and McGonagall were pretty obvious choices for the "authority figures" in this chapter, but I thought Bill was a unique and interesting choice to round things out. He is one of the elder members of the Weasley clan and I imagine that Arthur and Molly are indisposed between their own grief and trying to help the younger siblings. He also brings a little more perspective, since he was at Shell Cottage with the trio as they planned their final assault on Voldemort's horcruxes.

I loved the thinly-veiled fury that was emanating from McGonagall when she talked about Hogwarts under Snape and the Carrows. In general, it was good to see real emotion in her words and actions. I can't imagine that she was immune to the consequences of everything that happened, although a lot of people write her that way.

The explanation of the horcruxes seemed about right. There was no way that Harry, Ron and Hermione had the energy or the time to go into all the details, but they got the key information across to Kingsley.

Overall, you write very well. Everything flowed very smoothly and this was an easy read. You did a really good job with the dialog. Each character spoke with a voice that was appropriate to their age and their mood.

I saw one small typo:

It hadnít stop either Ron or Hermione from carrying on with their mission though. -- hadn't stopped

Great job! I'm looking forward to reading more.

Author's Response: Hi,
Thanks for the detailed review. As a writer you will know how much a meaty and considered review is appreciated.

You have my reasons for using Bill instead of Arthur down to a tee.

Thanks again,


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Review #6, by Maggie We Need to Talk

14th November 2014:
I loved this chapter, however, all of the chapters are quite lovely.

Author's Response: Thanks for the generous review and apologies for taking so long to respond.

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Review #7, by Maggie Reunion

12th November 2014:
Absolutely lovely chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks very much

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Review #8, by Professor Monty Epilogue

13th October 2014:
Really well writteen! There are so many things hinted at in the "Nineteen years later" part of DH that have been wonderfully fleshed out.
Most of it was too nebulous to grasp, but the author managed to hit most of them.
It always bugged me how unreformed Rowling's politics and societal structure was. This move towards democracy and equality was a very satisfying read
More of the same please!

Author's Response: Thanks for the wonderful review and apologies for taking so long to respond.

The political and larger legal-social world of Harry Potter often came across to me as very nineteenth century, though very little of it is actually fleshed out. That, of course, is great for a writer as it gave me the opportunity to invent my own political structure for the wizarding world.

Our heroes were never going to leave things be, they are going to try and fix their world, especially Hermione who effectively started a political movement at age 14. This gave me the opportunity for a major subplot in a story that is essentially about their recovery after the war.

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Review #9, by Jfield Epilogue

4th October 2014:
I want to thank you for your story. I have missed Harry and friends and your story was a great filler for that hole in my heart. I was praying that jk would continue the series and your story i thouroughly enjoyed your excellent writing style your knowledge and familiarity with the characters as well as the values of justice and fairness. Your sharing of the struggle and its reality in our world today. Thank you you are a gifted writer and your writing was a gift for me. Cant wait to read more thank you

Author's Response: Thank you for your generous review. I very much enjoyed writing this story and I am glad that you enjoyed reading it.

The values of justice and fairness as well as love drive the lead characters in JKR's novels and it was important to me that that be reflected in their post war actions.

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Review #10, by Epilogue

29th September 2014:
I very much want to read more. This was a continuation of a story that gives us so much wisdom for life. Thank you you are gifted

Author's Response: Thanks for your generous review. Glad you enjoyed the story

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Review #11, by CambAngst Epilogue

12th August 2014:
Hi, there.

I discovered your story just by searching for Completed Novels in the Post-Hogwarts era with Harry and Ginny as the main pairing. If I were to offer one tiny critique, it's that I came to think of Ron and Hermione as being more of the main pairing, although Harry and Ginny clearly play a role.

Beyond that, I thought this story was brilliantly done. You did a remarkable job of capturing every aspect of these characters as I remember them from the books and then maturing them in a completely realistic and natural fashion. I think you have an amazing grasp of their strengths and weaknesses, their thought processes, their mannerisms... basically everything that makes Harry, Ginny, Ron and Hermione tick. Even the minor characters (George, Neville, Luna, Molly, Arthur, Kingsley, etc.) came to life in a vivid and wonderful way.

Your original characters also showed amazing depth and detail. Oliver Grantham, in particular, was a gem. You plainly put a huge amount of thought into him and it shows.

Your plot felt like a natural continuation of the world as I remember it at the end of Deathly Hallows proper. I could feel the fragility and grief of the magical world at the conclusion of the terrible war, but also the political intrigue and social intransigence that characterized the Ministry and other magical institutions throughout the last four books. It was a situation tailor-made for someone like Hermione to spread her wings and start to lead, but also for reluctant leaders like Harry and Neville to rediscover their commitment and purpose.

You did an all-around fabulous job with this! Congratulations on a very impressive accomplishment!

Author's Response: Thank you for your detailed and generous review. It is especially valued coming from someone who has written many stories in the Harry Potter world.

I appreciate your remarks on characterisation and yes I did give a lot of thought to Grantham's character including creating a detailed backstory for him. I wanted to portray an antagonist who wasn't a cardboard cut-out villain. I was also trying to convey that people can have very different views to you on matters that are very important but that doesn't necessarily make them evil. To many people today have difficulty with that notion.

To me this story is both a Harry/Ginny story and a Ron/Hermione one, but unfortunately I am unable to list it as both. I would agree that the story gives more weight to the Ron/Hermione relationship, principally because at this stage of their lives (immediately after the war) it has far more depth. I switch the classification around from time to time so that people into either relationship have a chance to discover the story. It is probably time to reclassify it again.

Thanks for the review. Having discovered your stories I am now looking forward to reading them.

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Review #12, by underanaurorasky Debrief

31st May 2014:

I love the rawness of every character and yet the honest relationships. You've proved that nothing needs to be sexual about the relationships but just honest and caring all told through the simplicity of your words.

*new author, and first chapter of first story now published! It's called Being French, please read and review and critiques welcome!*


Author's Response: Thanks for the generous review and apologies for taking so long to respond.

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Review #13, by underanaurorasky Heroes

31st May 2014:
I've shed a few tears. Of joy and sadness. You write BEAUTIFULLY.

Some writers just write for the enjoyment of others. The best writers write for enjoyment, and it's that which spills into the story, causing other's enjoyment.

Truly impressed.

*new author, and first chapter of first story now published! It's called Being French, please read and review and critiques welcome!*


Author's Response: Thanks for the generous review.

The Harder Struggle is the first piece of fiction I ever wrote, though I have subsequently revised it. It was in writing this story that I discovered the joy of writing and I'm glad that it shows.

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Review #14, by underanaurorasky We're Alive!

31st May 2014:
I think I melted at the Hermione/Ron part.
But I'm intrigued at the combination of McGonagall, Kingsley and Bill- they gel nicely in the weirdest way.

Out of curiosity- why these three?

*new author, and first chapter of first story now published! It's called Being French, please read and review and critiques welcome!*


Author's Response: Why these three? They represent the government, Hogwarts and the Weasleys. I used Bill rather than Arthur because Arthur would be busy supporting his wife and family at his time and because Bill has better knowledge of the trio's recent activity which is important to the scene.

Thanks for the review.

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Review #15, by Banna Surfer I Am What I Am

29th May 2014:
Once, just once, I'd like to see someone write this scene where Harry admits that Ron made no move to leave until Harry told him to go.

Author's Response: Harry does admit it in this story (Ch 4 Cover Story) so you have your wish. Of course it's more complicated than that.

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Review #16, by K-Lynn Potter Return to the Burrow

26th May 2014:
This chapter made me cry. That means I am emotionally invested in ur story. There a Charlie u spelt wrong but other then that great writing.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review. Which part made you cry?

I will fix up the spelling, though it may take some time to show up on the site.

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Review #17, by Abbey Something So Important

19th April 2014:
Loved it! It was so moving and I really felt the characters emotions!

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. I'm glad you could identify with the characters and feel their emotions. Of course, JKR deserves the credit for creating such marvellous characters and the world they inhabit.

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Review #18, by Abbey Three Conversations

18th April 2014:
This is AMAZING! Keep on writing! This author is the best fan
fiction writer I've seen in a long time! Keep up the

Author's Response: Thanks for your more than generous praise. I do hope you enjoy the rest of the story as much as you have so far.

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Review #19, by thestral517 Epilogue

13th April 2014:
Thoughly enjoyed the story. Keep writing.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments. I am glad you enjoyed the story

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Review #20, by skate9001 Epilogue

7th April 2014:
Absolutely amazing. I was addicted until the end.

Author's Response: Thanks. Glad you enjoyed it.

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Review #21, by merlins beard Epilogue

30th March 2014:
i have enjoyed to read this very well written story. it is funny, exciting and had me captured - everything a harry potter story needs. Thank you for this enjoyable story.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review and your generous comments, they are very much appreciated.

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Review #22, by Joni Resistance

23rd March 2014:
Love your story! Believe you're the first and only author to connect Ron's experience with the locket to Ginny and the diary. Great connection.

Where's Snape though? His role and sacrifice are sorely missed.

You're talented. Thanks and I look forward to more!

Author's Response: Glad you like the story. I'm not sure I'm the first writer to connect Ginny's experience with the diary with Ron and the locket, but many do ignore it, they even have Ginny giving Ron a hard time over leaving.

I'm sorry about Snape. I couldn't cover everything in my story - its already over 135000 words. I ignored Kreacher too for much the same reason, they weren't essential to what I was trying to do.

Thanks for the review.

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Review #23, by harry_ginny4ev Epilogue

18th March 2014:
Your story was great, but I feel that you could have elaborated a bit more. Thanks so much for giving me this story to read.

Author's Response: Hi,

Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked the story. What aspect of the story did you think needed elaboration?

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Review #24, by Odie Epilogue

13th March 2014:
A GREAT STORY! I am not much into politics, but you made this version of 'after Voldemort' very interesting. Thank you. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

Author's Response: Thanks, Odie, I'm glad you liked the story. Not everyone was into the politics, and some hated it, and that's fine. I guess I'm a bit of a political junkie and I wanted to look at an aspect of JK Rowling's world that is not often explored.

I am sure our young heroes would be as keen to win the peace as they were to win the war and that makes some involvement in politics, even if only tangentially, neccessary. I can especially see Hermione getting involved. After all she started a political organisation(SPEW) when she was only 14, even if it was naive and didn't get very far.

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Review #25, by Odie Why we Fight.

10th March 2014:
What a great story you are weaving. A few chapters ago when the group was in Hagrid's hut, I laughed out loud when you used the phrase: "better out than in". It brought comic relief to a very strong emotional time. Your story is not just a Harry/Ginny story. It is the whole story...of everyone involved. I have enjoyed it so far, and look forward to finishing it.

Author's Response: Thanks, Odie. You are right, its not just about Harry and Ginny or Ron and Hermione either, though it does concentrate on this core group. I am trying to paint a larger picture of the wizarding world as it emerges from the war and the challenges it faces.

Thanks for reading and for your review and I hope you enjoy the rest of it as well.

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