A good start, felt a little rushed at times and maybe a few too many characters all going on at the same time and the odd typo. Report Review
Great story! I really enjoyed this chapter!
WildCatAuthor's Response: Thanks! :D Report Review
Loved the deatail in this the thoughts and feelings used the expression.Cant wait till next one greatAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm going to upload chapter 2 right now! :D Report Review
When's the rest coming??Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing. Chapter two should be up within the next few weeks. (: Report Review
please write more i really liked it. all the carictors are amazing. i like the way that james looks more like his granda not his dad, if u know what i meen.Author's Response: Thank you!
And, yes, to me, James looks and acts more like his grandfather in DH2, so that's how he is portrayed here! Haha. (:
This looks like it will be good! I haven't read your other story, but I'm looking forward to this one. The ages don't seem quite right though. According to JKR, Victoire was a 7th year during the epilogue of DH, and Teddy is two years older than her. At that time, Rose was in her first year. So if Rosie is going into her 5th year now, than Vic would have graduated 4 years ago, not the previous year. That was bothering me, but other than that, the story looks like it will be really good! By the way, is it a muggle cruise or a magical one?Author's Response: Thank you for the age clarification. I knew I would get them all messed up, but in order to fit with the plot, I had to tweak them a bit. (;
This cruise is a Muggle Cruise.
And, thank you for the review, it means a lot! Report Review
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