ROLF IS NOT ALLOWED TO BE ENGAGED TO ANOTHER WOMAN.
I really liked this chapter and this sounds a bit mean but I prefer Lorcan over Lysander already. o.o
Anyway, I love the characterisation of Rolf, he's just enough weird to balance out Luna. :p
And oh Lorcan, we share the same aversion to getting up in the morning. :p
I really liked this chapter, good work! :D
10/10! :DAuthor's Response: Lol, but the reality is, he is quite engaged to that sickening woman.
And don't worry about picking favorites. Lorcan is personally my favorite as well! Of course, Lysander still needs to grow as a character, and he didn't appear for much in the last chapter. It was all really his mother. Ah, well!
And yesh, Rolf. I characterized him as someone I'd personally think as an ideal father. It's weird, I know, but it felt more comfortable writing Rold that way. And yes, he does balance out Luna doesn't he? Both within the concepts of quirkiness, sanity, and everything else.
I'm glad you liked the chapter dear. :D Report Review
Hi there! I'm finally here! *celebrates*.
Anyway onto the story!
I absolutely LOVE Parent Trap so when I saw that you had written it in the summary I knew I had to read this first! (Although it was a toss-up between your Avengers cross-over and this because Avengers=yum.)
Anywho, this was really good! I loved it and at first I was thinking that Luna wasn't very dreamy in this but then you explained it and it all made sense. :) I liked how you portrayed Ginny and Luna's friendship, it was really sweet. :)
But the only crit I have is that the dialogue seemed very formal and not like mother/son language. Or when Ginny and Luna were talking - it was really formal. What helps is if you read your story out loud and if you feel like it sounds too formal, just change a little bit. :)
Also you spelt "Legilimency" like "Ligilimency". It was close though! (I just Googled it though - it's not like I knew how to spell it either! :p)
Anyway, I absolutely loved this! If you update soon, I'll be so happy! :D
Plus, I totally agree on your idea of Harry being a bit crazy, it makes a lot of sense! I know so many writers (including myself) make him happy and dandy but I think you're correct in thinking he was traumatised because of the war. :)
So, I loved this piece and I can't wait until Lorcan and Lysander meet! :D
Great job! 9/10! :DAuthor's Response: ERMEGHERD! YOU REVIEWED! :D *pelvic thrust* I logged in for the first time in two days, and I felt so in joy to see your lovely review sitting on top of my blank 'unanswered review' list. You don't know how happy your review has made me. It totaly brightened my day, which in fact is rather dreary seeing how it's cold and gray outside as of the moment.
And yesh! The Parent Trap! I love that movie myself, back when Lindsey Lohan was still a good girl and such. I don't get celebrities at all sometimes. They start off sweet and innocent and turn out into a bad egg. It's such a shame really. I liked the younger Lindsey.
And about Luna, I'm glad my little explanation turned out alright and justified her OOC-ness. Honestly, I'm paranoid when it comes to characters becoming OOC, so to see how I justified it alright makes me relax.
And as for the dialogue, I just re-read my story, and I definately see where you're coming from. Especially the dialogues with Lysander, seeing how he's what...eleven? Now thinking about it, I never spoke that formal as an eleven year old. I'll definately keep your suggestion in mind for the next chapter.
And for the 'Harry is crazy part', I was scared readers might set me in flames for that. I don't know why, it was just a debatable thing that I strongly believed in, and so I thought, oh well.
And hopefully I will update once I get the motivation to return to it. I had the second chapter written down, but it's been put on hold for a while. It was a spur of the moment sort of deal, and I guess I needed it relieved from my system. But I'll definately put another chapter up for you,, because you seem to like it, and I don't want to dissapoint. :)
Thankies so SO much!
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