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Review #1, by Akussa The necklace

4th September 2012:
Oh this was just so sad... I love my grandma so much and I'm so close to her as well; I can understand what Tonks would be going through as I fear she will die eventually.

This was well written and just long enough to bring up the emotions. You really managed to make the me feel Tonks' emotions, from her sadness and desperation to her feeling loved so much by both her father and the grandma she lost.

I did notice a couple spelling mistakes that I wish to point out to you, in order to help improve this already good piece :

"...“Tonks, are you even listing to me?”..."; should be 'listening'

"...her voice was really quite..."; 'quiet' not 'quite' (although it is quite close :))

"...She didn't like think of her dad..."; I think you mean 'thinking' of her dad

That's it; it was a well done little piece and congrats on placing third on the challenge!

Author's Response: Hey thanks for reviewing!
I'm glad you liked it and thanks for the spelling mistakes, I'll edit them out! :)
Thanks again for revieiwing!

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Review #2, by Ashling586 The necklace

2nd September 2012:
This was a very nicely written one shot. I thought it had a lot of heart involved and I liked the part that her father told her before leaving for Hogwarts. Part of me wishes there was more interaction between Tonks and Charlie but over all this was a very nicely written one-shot. I didn't find any grammar problems, though I wish that you had broken up that one large paragraph at the end into two paragraphs just to make it a little easier to read, but that is just my opinion. You have made it very hard for me to come up with a winner. Great job and thank you for entering my challenge.

Author's Response: Hey, thank forr reviewing and I'm glad you liked it! :)
When I'll edit it I'll bear in mind what you've said so thanks for that.
Thanks again for reviewing and good luck choosing a winner!

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