Amazing. Awesome. I loved this so much! I could not help but cry as I read this. I think you pegged Minerva McGonagall perfectly is this one. The rage of emotions that you managed to portray in this short piece was not only incredibly done, but very believable. Her eulogy to them both was brilliantly worded and was so very emotionally moving. The line "..."thank you for the world that you died to help create," gave me chills. Very well done on this! A pleasure to read!!Author's Response: Thank you very much for your kind review and your praise. I am very proud of this story and I'm delighted you enjoyed it so much Report Review
Ooh! This is an inteeresting one-shot! I've always wondered what happened after James and Lily's death in Godric's Hollow and to see it through Minerva's eyes just made it all the more interesting.
You did a really great job characterising her. She was sad but she still maintained that air of sternness around her, never letting her guard down. Whens she started talking about she wanted to avenge the Potter's death and how angry she was at Sirius I wanted to jump into the story and just tell her the truth. It was all Peter, not Sirius! Gah, too bad they only discover the truth twelve years from then.
One thing that bothered me was how Minerva made it sound like James and Lily were saints. I know that one of the reasons why she didn't mention any of their faults is because it was their funeral, but anyway that was just a thought of mine. Don't mind it too much.
I really liked this one-shot! ♥ Great job!
93rd review out of 100Author's Response: Thanks Izzy for your kind review, I'm glad you liked the story. One of the hardest things about writing it was the writing the harsh things about Sirius but not to have included it would have been wrong.
I see what you say about me making James and Lily seem like saints but as you said it was their funeral, and I've never been to a funeral where people have mentioned faults.
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Hello, here from the big event challenge! :)
This was a nice touch on the aftermath of what happened that night, a really nice read.
Loved how it was from Minerva's P.O.V, a really nice twist and I could see her wanting to avenge there deaths and I think it was great she was annoyed about them being on page 17, it really made it more believable!
Great job and the results will be in a blog soon, good luck! :)Author's Response: Thanks for the review and for the challenge too! It's great to be inspired and I am really proud of this story. I look forward to the results Report Review
Aand, here come the tears. You put McGonnagal and Lupin and everyone at Lily and James' funeral and BAM, I'm a mess. GAGHSUGrkhifuhdf.
I really liked it, very well written- I've always seen Minerva as being fond of the pair, and you captured her character. Excellent work!Author's Response: Thank you so much for your review, very kind of you! Report Review
Well darn it now I'm crying. Why did you have to go and write such a touching story?
I, myself, have actually always been angry with the fact that people never truly remembered or appreciated the fact that Lily and James died that night. It's always all about Harry and Voldemort, when really, it was Lily Potter that caused the destruction of Voldemort. It was love.
It was heartbreaking to know how everyone mourned Peter's "death" and hated Sirius. It just made me feel even more sorry for Sirius that he couldn't be all the funeral of the two people he loved best in the world.
Really a touching story. I loved how it was McGonagall that spoke at their funeral and her devotion to Lily and James was evident. It really gives foundation to why she treated Harry almost like a son while he was at Hogwarts. It adds strength to the great relationship Harry and Minerva have.
I think writing this review has made me tear up even more. Great one-shot!
classicblackAuthor's Response: Thank you so much for your very kind words. It was quite hard to write the bits about Sirius, one draft had this taking place before it was 'known' that he had sold out the Potters, but that would not be canon and to be honest a bit of a cop out.
I had the idea for this ever since I read the passage of the graveyard in HPDH but its only now I have got round to writing this and I'm so pleased you liked it! Report Review
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