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Review #1, by Niclovegood Alone

17th December 2012:
(Sorry i have taken so long teehee)

Wow, you have jam packed this with feelings, and I have to say you pull it off wonderfully, I feel so bad for Draco, I wanna jump through the screen to him
:( Very intense!! :D


I think in some of the flash-backs, if you really wanted to, you could drag it out a bit, but I think it's a perfect length...

Keep writing, you really have the talent for details. :D

Author's Response: Thank you so much! And I don't mind how long it took :) I'm so glad you felt that much about Draco (that being my intention for the story).
And thanks so much for the kind review :)

~Siriusly


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Review #2, by D2Diamond Alone

7th October 2012:
Very intense. Good job.

Author's Response: Thank you so much :)

~Siriusly


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Review #3, by Akussa Alone

4th September 2012:
Well for your very first fanfic, I have to say that it's pretty good! The idea in itself is original and well rendered. I like the flow of it, you really mastered it no matter if you went from present to flash-back.

Your characterisation of Draco was alright although he felt a bit out of character at times but it's very small and didn't bother me all that much.

The one thing that bothered me a little more was the grammar and spelling mistakes. I would definitly suggest going through this story again and looking only at the grammar and spelling or you could always ask for a beta in the forum; someone that would look over your story and correct the errors.

It's an interesting story and I enjoyed it. Correcting those errors would greatly improve the story (although it's already good). Oh and congrats on your second place in the challenge and keep up the good work. This place is wonderful to improve as a writter :)

Author's Response: Thank you :D I'm so happy you liked it! I wasn't sure how people would react to this Draco so I'm glad you thought he wasn't too out of character :)

Ahhh I'm so sorry about the mistakes! I was in a rush to get it up and I did it all at once, finally finishing at 4.30am haha. I will definitely be editing it soon to make it more readable :)

And thank you, congrats to you too! And thank you again for the review, really appreciate it :)

~Siriusly


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Review #4, by Ashling586 Alone

2nd September 2012:
For your very first Fan-fiction I must say that you did a very good job and I enjoyed the story very much. I think you did a very good job portraying the emotion of this piece. I think the present day scenes were a bit better than the flash back scenes in terms of grammar, but over all is was really nice. There was one area I wanted to point out.
"Just as I was about to get settled into the Daily Prophet though I heard a tapping..." - you really do not need the though in that sentence.
Over all you did a great job and you should be proud of yourself.

Author's Response: Ah thank you so much :D I wasn't expecting much from this story to be honest, so your review brought a big smile to my face :D
Yeah I've realised when reading through it properly that my grammar needs a bit of work on, but thank you for pointing that 'though' out, if you hadn't then I wouldn't have noticed!
Again thank you (must have said that way too much by now haha) for this lovely review :)
~Siriusly


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