I love your writing. You make her seem so crazy, and put some serious thought into her personality. Although, I'm not quite happy with how she treats Lorei... no matter(: It's still amazing and I hope you continue writing this! I'll be following if you do(:Author's Response: :O.wow
hmmm maybe ill improve on that, she does have issues poor girl though XD
I will be updating...soon I hope XD
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I love the start of your story (: It makes me want more! I'm sure this is going to be amazing and I can't wait!
What you should watch though, are your paragraphs - right now they seem a bit random and I can't quite understand them at some points.
Furthermore, in the middle of your chapter you started many sentences with I, maybe check that and alter the sentence structure? That would be lovely!
-SallyAuthor's Response: Thanks so much Salleh and as for the advice I will take up on that :) Report Review
Love it! Its soo amazing and hilarious! Jinx and JoJo ;) crack me up. Amazing writing and please keep doing it!
Literally going to be dying until you post another chapter, IsaAuthor's Response: Well now that I've seen this my motivation to carry on this story has been stirred up again...THANK YOU SO MUCH *hugs* Report Review
Hi, I like this story, especially the first chapter, but this chapter had me a bit confused as to what was happening, it didn't seem to flow as well as the first chapter. Just letting you know. Otherwise this is a cool story and please update soon so I can read the nxt chapter. I like the concept of this and I can't wait to see what happens since she was had that potion :) Report Review
Hello, I know my Soulmate potion was temporarily canceled due to accidentally having more then one challenge. BUT as soon as my other one is over, I'll re-instate Soulmate potion. So make sure to link to the thread when I do. :) I'll give you proper review at that time! Kudos on your first chapter! Report Review
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