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Review #1, by you know who I am Chapter 1

20th March 2013:
You are amazing. Honestly. You need to start seeing how much of a fantastic author you are. You need to start seeing that you have the power to touch a really sensitive core when you write. This is stunning! :3

Author's Response: Awww thank you so much~ I know this is a bad reply but you know how I responded to you xD

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Review #2, by megthechef43 Chapter 1

4th March 2013:

I like your one-shot. I like being able to see into the minds of other characters. Fenrir is usually hated and thought to be evil but I like that you have shown and different side of him and that he regrets biting Remus when he was a child. I think Teddy's protrayal was great. It would have been easier to write him as bitter and resentful towards Fenrir but I think it shows a new, forward way of thinking from Teddy.

Good Job!!

Megthechef43 aka Meg

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Review #3, by gingersnape Chapter 1

3rd March 2013:
HOW have I not reviewed this? Gah, your portrayal of Fenrir is fantastic and I love how you captured his mix of regret and anger. You really carried the sense that he felt he had no choice in where his life was going and it really made me think about how he is portrayed as a character. I found the interaction between Fenrir and Teddy as Remus to be really interesting. I had to reread it a few times since I wasn't sure what was happening the whole time, but once that sunk in, I was struck by how moving this was!

I think my favorite line was probably "He gave way more than a damn, he gave the entire world." because GAH it's so much and so beautiful! I feel like this really captured his inner conflict about who he was but didn't make him a sappy remorseful werewolf, but rather just a person who wasn't sure about anything and I've never seen that done before and you are so fantastic. It's amazing.


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Review #4, by alicia and anne Chapter 1

30th December 2012:
Ooo I got chills just from the first few lines, you wrote that really well :D
I actually love when you write Teddy and Fenrir stories, seriously love them. You've made it work so well on so many occasions, but that's probably because you're like the only person in the whole world who can write Greyback so magnificiently, maybe JK Rowling will let you keep him forever so you can just write his whole story.
You make me feel sorry for someone I've hated for all of the books, and that's what makes you so talented at writing him, you've made me feel sorry and start rooting for a guy that I hated :D
Awww I nearly cried when Teddy changed to look like his dad and Fenrir said sorry to him :-( It really didn't help that I was listening to a sad song at the time, you really need to stop making me want to cry :-( (Only joking you must continue forever to write beautiful stories)
Awww Fenrir's smiling, seriously Mike I can't hold back this tears for much longer! hehe
I think this one is one of my favourites.
Love your Secretly crying secret Santa :D

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Review #5, by starryskies55 Chapter 1

18th September 2012:


The imagery here was amazing, and the emotion just seeped through it all, making me all sad and stuffs ;(

I love that Fenny regretted his decisions, and that Teddy could forgive him showed a real strength of character, which was super powerful and really touching. The ending was my favourite, with them both drunk outside the pub, although the ideas and imagery about his smiles and his laughing at the start was absolutely fantastic :)

Some quick CC - you've changed tense a few times when I don't think you meant to, and you've also got a few typos. (I would totally not mention this if you hadn't been so ruthless with Hattie)

- Supreme Shop of Awesome, out.

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Review #6, by ScorpiusRose17 Chapter 1

28th August 2012:
I really enjoyed reading this and how you portrayed Fenrir. It was well written and really throws him into the spotlight of a not so shining moment in his life. I was happy to see in the end that he had made his peace with the awful things that he had done. Keep up the awesome writing!

Good luck in the challenge!! =)


Author's Response: Hey! I was excited to see that you enjoyed this and thought it was well written and stuff! I'm glad you enjoyed it! :D

Thanks! :D


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Review #7, by kalkay Chapter 1

13th August 2012:
I loved what you did with this piece and how you managed to 'break' a smile and fix it. The idea that he only smiled to instill fear was great and I think that it's perfect that Teddy was the one to fix it. I really enjoyed this! Wonderful entry! Thanks Mike!

Author's Response: Aha! This was quick. Hehe thanks Kaykay! I'm glad you liked it and I shall patiently wait for your challenge to end and results and thingies. :


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