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Review #1, by Illuminate lavendula et viola tricolor

26th August 2013:
Hi! Review Tag!

This is a really nice oneshot! You wrote it so poetically and smoothly. It really lives up to the name of the story- it's just to simple and easy to read. You also illustrate a lot of Lavender's character and life.

I think the style of your writing really gives a lot of oomph to the lonely and sad story you're telling. I also really want to know what happened to Pansy.

Great job!

Author's Response: I'm really glad you liked it! Lavender's characterization and the style of the one-shot were both things that I was worried about, so I'm glad you had such positive feedback on those. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing!

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Review #2, by blackballet lavendula et viola tricolor

4th August 2013:
This is really interesting! I think that you captured what Lavender would be like after going through the war. It was a good idea to bring in the Weasley wedding, as well. I wish I had gotten to see more of Pansy, is all! Great work.

Author's Response: Even though Lavender died in the Battle of Hogwarts, it's really fun imagining what would happen to her after the war. Pansy was supposed to be a rather elusive character, but I'll try to add more of her. Thank you for the review!

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Review #3, by patronus_charm lavendula et viola tricolor

16th July 2013:
I thought that this one-shot was absolutely wonderful! ♥ I really am a massive fan of work now!

The French just added a touch of exoticness for such a quirky pairing like these two, and I really loved it. Iím surprised by how many times Lavender is in a slash pairing but it somehow makes sense in my head. The genius of Pansy/Lavender was truly wonderful and itís so refreshing to see someone take risks in their writing.

It was just so complex with Hermione marrying Ron, then all of reasons why she shouldnít date Pansy but she somehow was. there seemed to be an almost sense of revulsion from Pansy about what was happening between them and that added an even greater sense of realism in this story which I adored.

The structure of this was really great and added to the almost disjointed effect of the overall story. The last line was really sad and me weep a little for Lavender with her acceptance of this lonely life. Another beautiful story from you!

-Kiana

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Review #4, by CharlieDay lavendula et viola tricolor

7th July 2013:
Hello! I'm here for the review battle!

I don't really know where to start with this review, because this story was fantastic, and I mean /fantastic/. Your writing style is incredibly beautiful and delicate, and you manage to use all sorts of fantastic literary devices without being in the least pretentious. You keep it so simple, but it's so elegant ugh. I'm gushing, aren't I? Well I have good reason because, as I said, this is truly incredible.

Your use of simplicity as a theme is fascinating and is a beautiful contrast against Lavender's classically quite busy portrayal. I also really like the way you split it up into the five parts, which were almost like five moods in Lavender's life.

I think that one of the biggest things I have to mention, however, is the strength of your imagery. You use it deftly and effectively, giving the reader an almost dreamlike view into Lavender's world.

It was also, actually, a really uplifting one-shot! Like that line about satisfaction, I think it just gave the whole thing this sense of hope, and again it really contrasted against the younger Lavender we saw in the books, who seemed hugely invested in her relationship. So I guess what I'm trying (and failing absolutely) to say is you gave her a wonderful maturity and showed how far she had come without loosing any of the subtlety of your piece. Fantastic!

Pansy/Lavender is a pretty unusual pairing, but I again think you handled it exceptionally. You made us care for the Lavender and Pansy as a couple, and sad about their break-up in an exceptionally short space, and did all this still keeping with your beautiful style.

Basically, what I'm trying to say is that your writing is PERFECT and I'm so jealous haha. I am definitely going to go back and read some of your other stuff, because this is great.

Charlie
xx

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you liked it; thank you for this amazing review!

I was really worried that the story/writing style might be perceived as somewhat pretentious, but I'm glad to hear you don't think so. When the idea first popped into my head, it was originally going to be more angsty and stuff, but then I took pity on poor Lavender and this came of it.

In the books, Lavender is seen as more superficial, shallow, and silly, but I wanted to explore the side of her that wasn't all these things, and how if she hadn't died in the Battle of Hogwarts, she might have turned out to be.

Pansy/Lavender was at first just because they both had flower names (a lot of characters in HP do, I think). It was interesting while writing to see how they're both very similar and very different at the same time and how relationships sometimes just don't work out.

Haha, it's far from perfect, but thank you so much for this perfect review, Charlie! :D


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Review #5, by inkwell lavendula et viola tricolor

16th September 2012:
Simplicity is perfection.

This is a wonderful one-shot! I can't think of a single thing that I don't love about it! Its simplicity, the flower imagery, the vivid images you paint with your words, the metaphors, the fact that it's about Lavender...!

Post-war Lavender is a little obsession of mine (I went as far as to write a short story on her) and I must say that you conveyed the change in her beautifully. She has gone a long way and has done a lot of growing up and now she is a sensible, thoughtful young woman.
Lavender/Pansy is probably the strangest pairing I've ever seen on this site, but you made it seem very natural without having to say much about it.

I really liked the way that you ended it, with the relationship ending without Lavender finding out why Pansy never showed up, but being content in herself and her life all the same. I loved it, because really, that's how life is.

There's a delicacy about your writing that gives the story a feeling of lightness and sophistication and makes it an absolute pleasure to read. If this isn't what you normally write, I strongly suggest that you explore this "path", because this is just too good!

Author's Response: Wow, thank you so much for this wonderful review.

I can't say I liked Lavender too much in the books, and I've never payed too much attention to her after the books, but this plot bunny just bounded into my head one day, and I thought it would be interesting to try it. Character development was a huge part of this story, and I'm really glad you think that I managed to convey it through Lavender.

Lavender/Pansy is very strange and I don't think I've ever seen it before on this site, and I wanted to make it unique but at the same time not make too much of a big deal of it, if that makes sense? I was worried about the ending a bit, because I didn't want people to be too disappointed that they didn't stay together.

I'm so glad you liked this story and the style of writing, thank you so much for reading this story and leaving an absolutely amazing review! :D


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Review #6, by Serendipitous_love lavendula et viola tricolor

29th August 2012:
Blimey. Where do I start? I loved it. I didn't have much of a clue as to what it was about to begin with and even now I am a little bit baffled. Still, it was so brilliantly organised, written and explained that I love it.

My major question is, what happened with Pansy? That's a good question to leave someone with from your piece. But, for all we know she was sick, troubled or just moved on. I don't know!

This shows their development in such a strange, brilliant way. Character development is important to writing and here you've managed it, shown it, so well. Well done!

Little happened, we're vague, but it's the perfect style for this piece. Yes, I would love more. I would happily read a novel on them- let me know if you do!- but I guess it is good to leave me thinking. I love the use of flowers and the bleeding. Very symbolic and can easily be interpreted and visualised.

All I can say is well done! Hope this review explains myself but basically, I love it! Well done!

Author's Response: I'm so glad that you liked it! I was rather nervous about this one, since it's kind of different than something I've done before.

I've decided to leave the question about Pansy unanswered and up to the reader's discretion about what happened with her, because even Lavender herself never really did find out why she stopped coming to the garden.

Character development was really important in this one, as I wanted to show how Lavender changes throughout the story, and I'm really glad you think that I've shown it well!

Ooh, a novel on them sounds pretty interesting. I think I might be able to turn this into a short story in the future, but I also rather like it as a one-shot, because I meant it as a short, simple piece, so I don't know about making it longer, but I might try it in the future.

Thank you so much for reading and leaving such a wonderful review; I'm so glad you liked the story! :D


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