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Review #1, by magnolia_magic The high priestess card

20th January 2013:
Hi Shaza! Thanks so much for swapping with me :)

Honestly, this caught my eye simply because of the title. I like anything with a mystical, sort of mysterious feel, and I thought this would do the trick. And I'm so glad I picked it, because it was so sweet! I especially loved the connection Luna has with her mother's memory. I love the idea that she still guides her daughter even though she's passed away.

I can definitely see Luna's mother being the type of person who reads tarot cards and uses their guidance in life. I'm glad it worked for Luna, too. I really like the way you've shown her fondness for her friends and her desire to do something special for them. That seems just like the Luna we know and love from the books :)

The ending seemed a little abrupt to me, almost like you cut off in the middle of a moment instead of seeing it through to the end. Does that make sense? I would have liked to see this story expanded a little, maybe a little more about her emotions and thoughts as she sees her finished paintings? Or even circling back to a final thought about her mother. I think a little more detail at the end would help this feel more complete. The lead-up to the ending was so enjoyable I just wanted to see more! That's always a good thing :)

I really enjoyed this! Thanks again for the swap, and I hope to read more of your work soon!

--Maggie

Author's Response: Hey there!
Yeah, I just thought Luna would still look to her mum for influence even though she wasn't there.
I'm glad you think I've got Luna right, I'd never written her before and I wasn't too sure I could get her write, so thank you!
I'll go back thorugh and see if I can edit the ending a bit, thanks for pointing that out!
Thank you for the review! :)


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Review #2, by CassiePotter The high priestess card

3rd September 2012:
I loved this! You write Luna really well, and I love the way she thinks, and how when she has a problem her first thought is her mum. Also, it was really cool that we got an explanation on why Luna decided to paint her friends' portraits on her ceiling! I didn't notice any grammar mistakes, either. This was a really wonderful one-shot! 10/10
Cassie :)

Author's Response: Hye, thanks for reviewing! :)
I'm glad you liked it and that you thought I wrote Luna well, thank you! :D
Thanks again for reviewing! :)


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Review #3, by caoty The high priestess card

18th August 2012:
Hey there, I'm (finally) here with the review. Sorry for the lateness, I'm a total procrastinator.

First of all, the concept is lovely. It's a poignant moment in DH when Harry sees the painting in Luna's room, but strangely often overlooked in fic. And with a character like Luna, she's so weird that of course she'd be likely to trust something like the tarot.
I also liked artsy!Luna, because... aw, hell, you've picked my favohrite character out of the DA. :D

I only have a couple of nitpicks: Luna's dialogue is a little bit OOC compared to canon IIRC, and the time skip could have been done a little more elegantly - it just kind of broke the flow of the story for me.

Still, though, keep up the good work, and I'll see you around. :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing! :)
I'm glad you liked the concept and thanks for the cc.
I'll go back and see what I can do when I edit it!
Thanks again for revewing! :)


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Review #4, by SilentConfession The high priestess card

18th August 2012:
Hi, just wanted to stop over and thank you SO much for all your help with the HC and especially the podcast reviews! You were such a star and when i saw this had no review, I had to come and give it some love.

This was so interesting! I haven't read very many Luna stories and this was such a nice take on a moment of her life. I can definitely imagine how having friends might impact her. She went from someone who really had no one to hang out with or care for her to having a slew of people. I haven't ever really thought of how that might affect her but it really gives a human voice to Luna and how she wasn't just up in the clouds without really caring if people liked her or didn't. It

The tarot card reading was an interesting take and i think it was pretty legit too. Although i've never thought of someone who relies on Divination, the may be a fault of my characterization of her and i think it matches her quirks really well.

I did feel like this piece was a bit too short of the *A couple days later* thing. there are better ways to show time passing than that for one thing, but mostly because this is such a short drabble it doesn't really fit in with the rest of the story. It brings me out of Luna's world and there isn't enough story left for me to get back in and so the impact that this might have had was lost for me.

I also felt like it lacked Luna's actual voice, although you had some great characterization bits here and a lot of it i can could see Luna in (like the tarot cars and the painting), i felt like the tone of it was a little off. We know Luna is a little up in the clouds and a bit strange (in a good way though, i love her to pieces! :D) and since she is that way and her personality is so distinct when i read her, i expect to hear her in the stories i read with her. I hope this makes sense with what i'm trying to say, it just seemed too earthy for me, too normal. You have a great writing voice and the narrative was very good and straightforward. You write well but i suppose i was waiting to get a bit more into Luna's mind and emotions.

Honestly though, i thought this was a great piece and a really neat look at that moment in Luna's life. I'm really glad i read this because it was an good take. I could really see Luna sitting there in front of the cards, just waiting for one to really speak to her. Great job! I hope this was helpful and I enjoyed reading this! :P

Author's Response: Hey, thanks for reviewing! :)
I'm glad you enjoyed it and thanks for the CC.
It was very helpful and when i go to edit it i'll keep in mind what you said, so thanks for that.
Thanks again for reviewing!


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