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Review #1, by ginerva_molly_weasley one/one.

16th July 2013:
This is sweet. I know how much people can miss growing up (I grew up too quickly myself) and it just sneaks up on you yourself. Its sad though when she's in her 7th year as she realises now she has to grow up and go into the big wide world herself and I think your description that flows through the entire piece really shows that well.

I also love the way that you have included different aspects around her that have changed and how much she hasn't enjoyed change in the past such as when they leave shell cottage as she loves her little safety bubble.

Its a lovely piece!

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Review #2, by caomoyl one/one.

15th July 2013:
Hey! I love the similarities that you showed in Dominique's behaviour at the different points in her life that she had to leave behind. Hogwarts is such a magical place (no pun intended) to a lot of people and so leaving it behind must have been hard. I have always felt like those raised in wizarding families will have felt less of an attachment because, to them, it was just a normal school. But then you do get those who still get attached -like Dominique- and I think you wrote it in a very believable way.

Her thoughts towards the future are something that I think goes through everyone's minds when they are finishing school. That feeling of dread that she had wasn't what most people have, though. She was more worried about having to leave all of that behind, rather than having to actually do those things. I really liked that!

Great job!

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Review #3, by ginnypotter242 one/one.

15th July 2013:
This was sweet. I liked how Dominique remembered Shell Cottage and leaving that place too. Her sadness at leaving was well written, and I loved tying that in with her leaving her childhood behind.

One thing I would suggest is to add to this. I'd like to see more emotions, or memories, or something. Her noticing a particular person while she's staring out the window, or spotting a certain tree or something and remembering something from a past year. It would add dimension to the story.

However, her sadness does seem very real in this story, and I can tell she is upset at leaving her home that she's lived in and learned in for the past seven years behind. Your last sentence is beautiful and very touching. It really ties the story together. Great job.

~Sara

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Review #4, by caoty one/one.

5th April 2013:
Hey!

So this was really interesting to read because I'm in the same position as Dominique right now - I'm leaving high school in a few weeks. I think a lot of people are, actually, especially as you've made Dominique so relatable, which isn't easy to do - that feeling of nostalgia mixed with a weird kind of dread is a difficult one to capture in words, and you've done it wonderfully.

I did notice a couple of typos, so you might want to look over that. Otherwise, well done! :)

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Review #5, by Luna Dominique Potter one/one.

15th August 2012:
This story is a perfect depiction of not wanting to grow up. Lots of times I feel exactly like Dom does -- it's like you read my mind and put it into words! Very well done! :)

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Review #6, by RavenclawWayToBe one/one.

12th August 2012:
Even though this was short, i think it was amazing. I feel almost the same as that often, like life is just going too fast and you have to let things go, even when you don't want to. I think the emotion was perfect, how could you leave somewhere that basically defined your life?! I think you wrote this story beautifully, it flowed extremely well and it was graceful (how that describes a story, I will never know) I think that this was wonderful and perfect.

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