Wow. This is kind of fantastic. The way you use different lengths of sentences, the unique adjectives ... do you just want to write every one of my stories from now on? Seriously, you're ridiculously talented. The only thing I didn't like was the first dialogue was a little bit awkward, but it got better as it kept going. I don't really know the story, so the awkwardness might be something that's right for the characters so I can't really say anything about that, but that's it! Everything else is so amazingly perfect and real and crisp in my mind, and considering I've never read the books ever, I instantly felt like I knew the characters. Finally, two words.
KEEP. WRITING. dammit. D:

Author's Response: MMkay thnx doos ill go fix tht awkward sentnce omg i feel so guilty now u gave me contructive critisizumc and i gave u fhusahufdiaphfduaohfdicantevenfdhnusoahpdnuas bahahah but thnx im writing more I TOLD U DIALOGUE IS NOT MY THING i cannot write dialogue for my life so ill stick to like memories and like observation shiz fhduahdu hah thnx love

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Please write more this is a
Good start

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Good Job I like the details
UPDATE FASTER I want to see more dramione action

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This is such a detailed chapter!! I also like your
other story behind my mask... Do continue that
!!! Please update this soon, it's a great start
and I'm looking fOrwards to more of this story

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Okay, I haven't read this yet and I'm not sure if I'm allowed to post two reviews on the same chapter but if I can, Ill review it after I read it otherwise you'll get feedback through mail but I'm sure it'll be brilliant ;)
THANK YOU SO SO MUCH, YOU. Im so so so touched and oamdwiumiuewrfn I lurve you :)
Ill be reading it for sure but I have to go finish packing for my trip right now :/
Thank you again and you're amazing xx
TEN ON TEN WITHOUT READING HA.

Author's Response: Haha ur not allowed to post two on the same chapter!haha kk!
Thanks
and No problemo
o have fun on ur trip
Hahha

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