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Review #1, by sour_grapes_snape Bleeding Love

30th October 2012:
I thought you did a good job providing a decent back story for Lily in just two chapters. I liked that you gave Lily depth by describing her struggles with love in her life and it gave more reason for her to hold back in loving James.

At times, it could seem a bit choppy - it didn't quite flow right. I'd suggest maybe trying to add in a bit more detail and imagery. Other than that, very good job :)

Also, sorry it took a while for me to get around to reviewing. Thank you for entering my contest!

Author's Response: Thanks for the feedback! I'm glad you liked it! I'll probably go in and edit when my beta decides I'm good enough to take up some of her time :( The critiques are always welcome and I really appreciate you giving them.

And I totally understand that it took you a little bit to get around to this, everyone does something other than fanfic!

Thanks again :D
Sgay_Gryff


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Review #2, by Opalpixiechick Bleeding Love

12th August 2012:
Great job. :) I loved this story. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I loved writing it!

Shay_Gryff :D


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Review #3, by MysticPhoenix Boulevard of Broken Dreams

8th August 2012:
I thought this was a nice take on Lily's struggle with her feelings for James. I really liked the fact that Lily's reasoning was not simply because he had annoyed her for so many years, but instead because she was dealing with abandonment issues. The annoyance was an easy cover up for her fear.

I like how Alice broke down Lily's arguments and continued to go back to the root issue. Though I think at this point using love to describe Lily's feelings is a little too soon. But that is just my opinion.

There were a few errors in wording and sentence structure, but overall the story was good. I enjoyed it!

Author's Response: Thank you!

Yeah, annoyance just isn't enough for seven years of hatred. There needs to be an actual reason for her rejecting James. If it's just annoyance, it's a lot easier to fix then having the fear of being abandoned.

I agree, Alice describing Lily's emotions for James as love isn't quite how I wanted it to go, but it was the only way I liked it. However, it's also toward the end of their seventh year, so 'love' isn't too far off.

Thank you for pointing out the grammar stuff! I'm not exactly Mrs. English Language, but I'll try to fix that.

Again, thank you for the lovely review! Chapter 2 will be up tomarrow or the day afterward!

Shay_Gryff :D


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Review #4, by Opalpixiechick Boulevard of Broken Dreams

6th August 2012:
Great story. I can't wait to see what happens next. :)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review! Chapter 2 will be up shortly!

Shay_Gryff :D


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