Heyy thankyou so much I've been
looking for a good Neville/Hannah story for
AGES I always imagined they'd end up
together but I wish you'd carried it on into their
married life ;)Author's Response: I love Hannah and Neville, too. They're super cute. I just wanted something quick, but I might extend it into a longer story and add on. Someone else mentioned it, too, so if I have time, why not? Thanks for your review :) Report Review
Ah, I love Hannah/Neville! I think you did a good job giving us an overview of their relationship throughout the series. I especially liked that you gave Hannah and Neville plenty of time to develop feelings for one another.
Something I would have liked to have seen is more scene moments--things with dialogue and stuff--instead of having Hannah tell us what happened. Seven years is a long time to cover, and the fact that you got it all into a one shot is incredible. I do think though, that by including scenes and spacing the story out into chapters (maybe a chapter a year?) you could give us just as much info and help make your story even better!
Good job!Author's Response: Thanks so much. And I completely agree with you. I had it read over by a beta to get some tips and am going to fix it up a bit. I may not make it into anything longer than a one-shot (at least not soon) but I definitely think it needs to be refined more. Report Review
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