I really like the premise of this story and the parts that take place in the future are really well written and intriguing, but there are some basic grammar errors in the rest. For example, you keep forgetting the commas at the end of a sentence when people are talking. It should be "Blah blah blah," said blank. It's just a little thing, but it gets in the way of the rest of the story, which is fantastic.

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Loved it as usual! Im so jealous of your writing skills! 10/10

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Love it!! want. To. Keep. Reading. No. More. Chapters. :( 10/10

Author's Response: really really sorry!
will have a new chapter up soon, promise:D!

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I'm really enjoying this story :) I can't wait until Lily falls for him. I like the way you portray James, he seems like a real person. And also I really want to know who attacked him but I guess I'll have to wait and see!

Author's Response: i'm glad:)
thank you that's really nice of you, it's always great to hear that you've written a character well!:)
don't worry you will find out! i promise!
thank you so so much for reviewing!:D

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Well this chapter definitely has me interested :) I am concerned though that the guy at the beginning of the chapter was James though. But I also have a feeling it wasn't? And also your genre for the story is fluff and romance so I guess it couldn't be??? I don't know but you got me hooked haha :)

Author's Response: yay! i'm glad of that!
ooh you'll have to wait and see, i can only promise you one thing it won't be one of those fics where they get together, break up, get together, break up, etc... but their relationship will be interesting:-)
that's good, thank you so so much for reviewing and i hope you'll like the next chapter!

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great start on this fic! I wonder how things will go for James and Lily here while they are on holidays! can't wait to read more!^_^

10/10

Harry and Ginny

Author's Response: WOOO HI:D thanks for reviewing my new story!
i also wanted to say don't worry about this one taking priority over my other, i have to have 3 chapters up by the end of this month and then after that my other one will still be main priority:D
thank you, thank you, hopefully next chapter will be in the queue tomorrow:D
thanks for reviewing!


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