I loved Paradox and I love this so far :) Yeah it's difficult to get into the mind of someone with whom you can't really share experience with, but you have done a pretty awesome job :) I like that this is a prequel, it gives you so much more insight to the story of Paradox as a whole, and I like getting to know Vivian as wellAuthor's Response: Hello,
Awh, thank you! I love it when people read several of my stories. Writing boys is suprisingly hard but I'm glad you think I've done a good job :) It is kind of a prequel but the the next chapter starts roughly where Paradox starts but we will definitly get to know Vivian more as well.
Thank you so much for reading and reviewing,
GirlOnTheSidelines x Report Review
I've kinda fallen (WAY) behind in reading/reviewing but I'm here now! This was yet another fantastic chapter by you!
One of the many things I love about this series (would you call it that?) is that we get a glimpse of each character through another's eyes and this story gives me yet another way to see Viv, one of my favourite's of yours. :D
Anyway, I'm going to cut this review here, seeing as I should probably be at least -slightly- productive today (yeah right.)
Can't wait for the next!
LizAuthor's Response: Hello!
That's fine, I've been falling a bit behind lately too due to exams and stuff but I should be getting back on track soon.
Thank you! I guess you could call it a series. I love writing all my characters from different perspectives and Viv is definitly one of the more interesting ones to write so I'm glad you like her.
Thanks for the lovely review (hope your day was productive :P),
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I told you that I would be here quickly and so, here I am!
This was a very good first chapter for this story and I'm glad that you've started working on it again, I've been really curious on where you were going to go with it! I think I might just love your Scorpius. He seems like a nice guy and he tries really hard, even when he's lying to stay calm when Roxanne is in the picture. I thought the play on his emotions and his hormones was nice too, I don't think I could have done that so well. Writing boys is hard! I don't even write for boys very often aside from Albus and George (And you know how awful he is to write for) so brava!
There were some grammar things but not very many and they didn't distract from the pace of the story, which was really good. I like how you've described Vivian through Scorpy's eyes too, she seems like someone my Astoria would actually get along with. Hm. Considering that my Astoria is older than she is, its sort of sad that they can't go to school together isn't it? Hahaha.
Anyway, I liked the Slytherin dynamics you set up on the Quidditch team and that girl needs to cool her panties! Oh, my Merlin! Is there anyone she hasn't been with and bad Scorpy, falling into her trap! *Smacks on the bottom*
I have a feeling that you might continue on with that little sub-plot but I have no idea. Now! Roxanne through Scorpy's eyes is really fascinating to read, especially when you think of how she was considering him in Paradox. The lust is strong too and his need is almost uncontrollable and I certainly loved that ending! Scorpy can whisper in my ear anytime he likes. Heheheh.
It seemed, eerily like what his father would do in one of my stories...I love Malfoy men. ;)
Anyway, I really like this so far so update soon my dear and I'll be looking forward to more from Vivian too and when are you getting Daughter of Fire up there again? :D
I'm trying to get the next chapter of A Force of Wills done and then its Audrey and Percy again. But I might their chapter done sooner, since I know what I want to do with it. Hahaha.
Oh, and Benjamin says hello and that he'll be under your bed tonight. Enjoy. >:D
GabbieAuthor's Response: Hello!
You must hate me, I've been hopeless lately, I'm so sorry, I've been crammed with exams and stuff but they're all over now so I have some catching up to do.
I promise more will come eventually, I haven't just deserted you. Or my Scorpius. Don't worry, I love him too. He's suprisingly fun to write, even if it might not be a completely accurate portrayal of a teenaged boy. Writing boys is definitly hard! I just hope I do him justice!
Oh Vivian, I like getting another perspective on her and Scorpius is perfect because he is the only one who really knows her. She would definitly get along with your Astoria, they're like sisters!
Ah, the Quidditch team... They are a peculiar bunch aren't they. I'm not sure if I will go into that subplot much more but is just felt right to give the Quidditch team some depth. But yes, Scorpius is a bad boy for falling into her trap. But he can't be flawless, can he?
I'm glad you like this view of Roxanne, it's a bit differnent to how she might come across in Paradox. Silly little boy is letting his lust control him... But I agree, he can whisper in my ear too.
Oh Malfoy men. They are another species altogether, aren't they?
I'm working on Second Choice quite a bit at the moment as some important things happen in it that need to be sorted before I can reveal them in my other stories. Hopefully I can update the next chapter of Twist of Fate soon as that's almost finished and isn't really linked to Second Choice but after that, it will have to wait a bit longer I'm afraid. Daughter of Fire will be continued shortly, I want to edit the rest of the chapters first though as I'm tweaking parts of the storyline.
Looking forward to catching up on your stories shortly. Thank you so much for the review,
P.S. I look forward to my encounter with beautiful Benjamin ;P Report Review
Haha. After reading Paradox, I just had to scroll through your author page. And lookie here; the story from Malfoy's view.
I love his voice. He's just so hilarious, especially when he's thinking that she's annoying and then finding her passionate and attractive at the same time. Love the conflicting emotions, especially since he's supposed to be hating her guts.
But, I can't wait to see how you tie it all together. How he goes to kissing her for the first time, and getting beat up because of it. I'd love to read that from his pov.
Anyway. Can't wait for an update.
~LeighAuthor's Response: Hello again!
Nice to see you again! Awh thank you, I just could not resist. It was too sad to just stop writing about them and I was curious about what was going through Scorpius' head during Paradox.
Oh the inner workings of the teenage boy. I'm afraid I am lacking much knowledge on that point but I hope I make a reasonable Scorpius. He's an oddball anyway.
Well it is all coming up soon(ish) but this story isn't my main priority at the moment. I do hope to update soon though, as I love his inner workings.
Thanks for coming to read this, I hope you enjoy what is to come!
GirlOnTheSidelines x Report Review
YES. YOU DID IT. YOU WROTE A SCORPIUS FIC! YES.
Anyway. Back to..er..yeah. I loved it, to say the least. Hearing Scorpius's POV about the whole thing is really exciting, knowing that the hatred between those two isn't single-sided. It also shows that their hatred is unjustified, seemingly merely a case of not knowing the other properly. I mean Scorpius clearly thinks that Roxy loves the attention her uncle gets her. *Frowns* BAD SCORPIUS.
And his confusion. Oh dear. I can't wait to see what goes on in his head later on down the road.
P.S. YOU GOT A FORUM ACCOUNT. YAY. YOU SHOULD PM ME OR SOMETHING ON THERE. PLUS I ADDED YOU AS A FRIEND. Caps rage there. :pAuthor's Response: HELL YEAH I DID!
Hello again, I'm glad you loved it... and it's only a prologue. I just couldn't leave these two alone, I missed them :L Oh their hatred is entirely unjustifed, as Scorp will soon find out. Isn't he an idiot... but then again, so is Roxanne, so they're kind of even.
His head is a complete mess, he just doesn't understand! Bless him.
P.S. I TOTAL DID! AT YOUR SUGGESTION! I WAS SO FLATTERED YOU ADDED ME AS A FRIEND :L and don't worry about the caps, they're awesome :P Report Review
Well, well, well! Look who has decided to give me something else to read? Thank you so much! Not that you wrote this solely for my pleasure but its so good to see something else from you that I swear you did it just for me! Or maybe I'm just an arrogant toe-rag...Hahahaha.
Anyway, it was a pleasant surprise hearing things from Scorpy's POV. I was always curious to know how his feelings for Roxanne developed and can I just gloat on the fact that he is hilarious and completely likeable? His sense of humor is great and that last bit when he squealed and changed it into a manly grunt was so hilarious that I almost burst out laughing. How horrifying for him though, to think that he fancies that Roxanne Weasley...with her gorgeous looks and such. Hahahaha. Loved all the contradictions in his thoughts as well, it was a great read! Tormented! :D
There were just a few grammar things, I think you missed a quotation or something from Vivian in the beginning but other than that it was a really great to see her again as well (Until you update for her again, hint hint).
Can't wait for more! And don't feel bad for starting another story when you have so much work to do, I do it all the time! :D
P.S.: My laptop, hopefully shall be fixed this coming week and I'll be quick with the updates! :D
GabbieAuthor's Response: Ah, hello again,
Tehe, you're welcome. I think this was mainly because I just missed Scorp and Roxie so much, so it was predominantly for my pleasure but I'm so happy you liked it. Haha yes you are! :P
I was curious too, I always had a rough idea but this way I can really figure him out. Yay, you like him! He is really different to Roxanne so I wasn't sure if you would but I think he balances her out and they are just... well, perfect. For each other. Oh, I laughed while writting that, don't worry - he's just a boy going through puberty, he can't help it :L
His thoughts here are in a complete muddle bless him, he just cannot accept the fact that Roxanne is gorgeous and he hates her, it just doesn't make sense.
Yeah, I spotted that and will go and change it sometime :L this means we get to see Scorp's thought on the whole Vivian and Potterheads situation (haha I sound like Zabini). She's coming back soon but things are kind of at a low point for her, with her mum and all so it's not exactly a happy chapter, funerals are never happy.
I just can't help myself! They just keep pouring out from me! I even have a few stories for the next NEXT generation lined up! (I actually love them, they are like my own babies :L) Isn't that shocking! Can't wait for your stories!
GirlOnTheSidelines x Report Review
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