I found you Secret Santa!
Wow, I'm a huge Marauder fan and I was so thrilled when I saw how many Marauder era stories you have! :) I finally settled for this one because of the "Shake it out" challenge. I have no idea what the challenge was but the song by Florence and the Machine is my favorite.
Back to story. This was beautifully written. I think you really captured the essence of James and his emotions in the face of death. Having lost my father to a long illness, I can relate to the way in which the passing always takes you by surprise and you are never ready for it. Also, the way in which you had everything wrap up in the end with that last line... You made me tear up!
So this was my thank you review for all the lovely Christmas reviews and I will come back for more of your stories!
RalAuthor's Response: yay you found me!
I've never heard that song! I'm going to have to check it out! lol
thank you SO much! (:I'm glad that you think I characterized James well because he's my favorite character along with Sirius so I hope I did him justice.
Awww! I'm glad that you liked your Christmas reviews!
Thanks so much! (:
(btw, I still don't know who MY secret santa was O.o) Report Review
Hey. It's SamMalfoy93 here.
I wondered about the death of James' parents quite a bit (gosh, that sounded morbid... :P) and how James would have taken it. I think you've done really well with this idea. It's something that happens everyday, but can make such a huge impact on a person's life. I found it very believable as to how James grew up; to make his parents proud now.
I thought this was a really great idea for this challenge. Thank you for entering and I'm sorry it's taken me so long to review. Results should be up soon. :)
Sam.Author's Response: hello! haha don't worry! you're not the first one to think about how harry's grandparents died haha
im glad that you found this to be believable because one thing that bugs me is when Marauders-era material arent that canon lol
thank you so much! hehe don't worry about it! life can get in the way.
thanks for R+R! :D Report Review
This was well written and I liked having a look into the mind of James while he dealt with one of the toughest moments of his life. It is nice to see him and Sirius in a different way where they aren't causing insane amounts of trouble. I like that you added that he had a cousin named Jennifer. It kind of gives you common ground with things he has in common with Harry later on.
Keep up the great writing! And good luck in the challenge!! =)
-SR17Author's Response: im so glad that you found it well written (:
hehe James and Sirius are my favorite characters so i thought they deserved more than just a scene where they cause an enormous amount of chaos.
thanks so much for R+R! (:
and yes, i definitely hope i do well in the challenge! Report Review
That was so beautiful. Tears ran down my face as I read it, and I'm not joking. That was amazing.Author's Response: awww thanks so much for reading+reviewing! (: im so glad that you liked it! Report Review
Hey! Here for pass the parcel; sorry it took me so long!
This was really sad. I liked how you sort of made this James's reality check, because he was so caught up in himself before that. Also, giving James family was a nice touch, because you don't ever see that in fanfics, and can you imagine how boring it would be to live as an only child with no cousins? Jennifer just made James seem more realistic somehow.
Aww, James trying to be strong at the end! Move over, Lily! Haha, the way you wrote him was just so lovable and brilliant. Great job on that!
Overall, splendid one-shot! Glad I got to read it(:
LLL(:Author's Response: haha thats alright! thanks for your review!
im glad that you liked how i wrote james! he's one of my favorite characters and i feel like theres so much to him that people don't see on the outside.
thanks for your read+review! (:
This was very well written. I think you definitely captured the emotions of grieving very well. Also I liked that you had James have that 'change of heart' where he decided to be brave and strong. I definitely think that that is something James Potter would do, and I think that this could easily evolve into a short story, combining his new outlook on life (so to speak) with how he got Lily. I think that would be really well done if you wrote it! Anyways, your work is wonderful, I could definitely understand what James was feeling and I think you had a great way of writing his emotions!Author's Response: thank you so much (: your review made me so happy hehe
yeah, i didn't think that james maturing was something that happened over night so there had to be a reason why he slowly got more mature and everything.
actually, i have a load of one-shots about the marauders and this one-shot was originally supposed to be longer but then i had the inspiration to write a full-lengthed Marauders fanfic sothese one-shots are a preview/snapshot of. i just didnt want to put that in the title or summary anywhere just yet in case i change my mind.
im so glad that you like it! thanks for reading and reviewing! you made my day better! (: Report Review
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