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Review #1, by HeyMrsPotter Dragon Tamer

28th June 2013:
Hello, here for our review swap :)

I chose this one because it had fewest reviews and it was a sorry about a minor character which I LOVE!

I really like how well you've captured Susan's feelings after the war. I've read a lot of fics that have acted as though everything is hunky dory and it's just not realistic. This is wonderful though, it makes perfect sense that Susan would want to escape and what better to distract her than dragons?!

Your descriptions are really nice, I particularly loved those of the Ironbelly, the part about its eerie blood red eyes was excellent.

You convey her urgency to help really well, I like how erratic her thoughts are and how you describe each idea she thinks of. Her eventual solution was brilliant and excellently executed.

This was a lovely little one-shot! Thanks for the swap :)

Author's Response: Hi! Wow, it's been forever since I've had feedback on this story, thank you so much!

This was actually a challenge for last year's house cup, and we didn't have much time to write at all! So it was an experiment in speed-writing, which might have contributed to the all-over-the-place feel of it :). I was definitely making it up as I went. I'm so glad you enjoyed it, though, and thank you so much for your comments on the content and description. Description is something I have to work really hard on, so I'm especially glad you liked how this one turned out :)

Thanks again for the lovely review! It was great hearing from you!

--Maggie


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Review #2, by maskedmuggle Dragon Tamer

19th July 2012:
Hey! Ahh I loved this! This was so fantastic! I really loved the direction you took with this! It's so interesting to read a story with Susan as the main character, as she's such a minor character she rarely even appears in many stories. I loved her characterisation - her worries and needing to get away after the war. I also loved how she had a dragonologist brother and it was lovely to see a good relationship between the two even though I'd usually expect distance because of the years apart (in age and in seeing each other).

Plotwise, I especially enjoyed the end, but the dream at the start was great too. I thought the random dragons appearing were slightly random and didn't make too much sense, unlike Voldemort & co killing her family (which makes total and normal sense to be a nightmare for her). Even though you mentioned the dragon breeds that way, I think it would have flowed better to mention them somehow when she was in Romania. Apart from that though - I loved how you managed to incorporate all the prompts! I was especially impressed with how you included the dragon's blood, details of the wand and the dark detectors!

I loved the scene at the end with the going-crazy Ukrainian Ironbelly. It was such a great idea to have Bradley on the back and Susan coming to save the day with a simple transfiguration idea. All in all, a really well-written story that I enjoyed reading! :)

- Charlotte

Author's Response: Hi Charlotte! Aww, it's so sweet of you to come review this story! Thanks so much for taking the time to give this great review :)

I knew absolutely nothing about Susan when we picked her as champion, which is a fun thing, I think, because it allows a lot of freedom for characterization. I'm glad you liked her here! I like seeing characters defy expectations and push past their insecurites/worries, so I thought I'd focus a bit on that with this story. And Bradley was fun to write, even though he didn't get much time--I just think he'd be a fun person to meet in real life :)

I see what you're saying about the dragons. I sort of wanted to create a chaotic atmosphere with the dream, and dragons seemed like an easy way to do that. But I definitely could have gone that other way, and mentioned Susan seeing them in person in Romania. Sometime it's hard to know what will flow the best *shrugs* But I'm glad you liked the other prompts! I tried to get them in seamlessly, and it's great to know I pulled it off for the most part.

That end scene was really fun to write, and I'm glad you enjoyed reading it! Again, thanks so much for a great review...I was so pleasantly suprised to see it! You made my day! :)

--Maggie



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