6 Reviews Found

Review #1, by likeness_of_a_seabird One

28th January 2015:
Hufflepuff Hot Seat Review, round three!

I loved the beginning; the way it jumps straight into the action works really well for a story of this type. However, the reader isnít left clueless for long when both the narrator and the person leading her away are introduced. Since this is about dragons, itís reasonable to assume that ĎCharlieí is Charlie Weasley. And although I wasnít around for the House Cup this was written for, I was pretty certain ĎSusaní was Susan Bones.

I also liked how Susan wanted to study dragons but was scared by the Hebridean Black when she approached the creatures for the first time. I think it makes Susan more likeable as a main character because I believe anyone would be scared to face an adult dragon for the first time at a close range. I loved how she recalled a piece of advice Hagrid gave her. We donít really see Hagrid interacting with other students beside the trio, so itís nice to hear that there were students he liked beside the trio.

It was so great when Susan managed to conquer her fear! As she was taking the blood sample, it was as if she had worked with dragons her whole life. Too bad the dragon stepped on her wand, though.

Great story!

- Emmi

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Review #2, by Freda_and_Georgina One

8th January 2015:
You did an excellent job of whipping those prompts into a story. I had no idea what you had to use and didn't find them out of place.

Very nice and sweet story.
--Georgina

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Review #3, by MrsJaydeMalfoy One

16th December 2014:
Wow, this certainly brings back memories (of that House Cup, I mean)!

I love the way you incorporated the dragon, without making Susan a Dragon Keeper. A lot of people (myself included), decided to make her a Dragon Keeper, so it was nice and refreshing to see something different here!

I loved the mentions of Hagrid and his encouragement, and the appearances from Charlie and the other Dragon Keepers.

I think my favorite part was where you described the process of someone's friends convincing them to try a new flavor of ice cream... that was sooo realistic and easy to relate to, and described so well... amazing!

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Review #4, by LadyL8 One

17th January 2014:
Hi Again, Tawi!

This was your story for The House Cup? It must've been my first HC then, cause I remember reading it. And I loved it then, and I love it now.

I think Susan's an interesting character, because your see very little of her in HP books. And that makes her almost an OC, because you have a lot of freedom when writing her.

But I loved your Susan. I loved that the story was about facing your fears, which in this case was dragons. I remember reading those prompt the first time, and thinking that it would be impossible to get many of them into the same story. But I guess you just proved me wrong, You got a lot of them into your story. And I didn't immediately recognize any of them as prompts, because they fit so well into your story. So well done.

I also loved your characterization. I think that she's very unconfident in the beginning, and that's also how I imagine her to be. But then she ends up facing her fears, and I also think that's very believable. And I loved Charlie's and Hagrid's help, especially the latter's advice,

Good work. Loved it!

- Lotte

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Review #5, by maskedmuggle One

20th July 2012:
Hey! Aw this was a really sweet story and I loved seeing Susan shine here. She's such a minor character I've never read a story about her until the house cup, so it's great to see what everyone's been doing with her. I really liked her characterisation here - she was a bit unconfident in herself, but I absolutely adored Hagrid's advice to her and Charlie's help.

The plot itself is lovely - a nice idea to have Susan collect blood and face the dragon. I was surprised to see her wand get broken so that was a nice twist to the story I definitely wasn't expecting! Nicely written story - the prompts were used so well too - they fit in really well :)

- Charlotte

Author's Response: Thank you so much Charlotte! Really made me happy to see a review! :) Have a nice day!

Thanks again!


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Review #6, by Sakurasou One

18th July 2012:
I love Susan in this. I think you characterised her really well and particularly I like her courage and her strength in facing the Herbridean Black! It was nice that you added a little bit of Hagrid to the story, its nice to see him as a friend to other students than just the trio :D

Your description is superb, especially the beginning where you describe her fear and the closeness of the dragon.

You really made me feel for Susan, I was totally cheering her on at the end when she finally faced her fear and approached the dragon.

Great oneshot, I really liked it :D

Author's Response: Oh my! I didn't think I'd ever get a review on this! Thank you so much Sakura, really nice of you :)

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