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Review #1, by adluvshp Dreaming of Dragons

27th July 2012:
Here for Pass the parcel.

Aw this was a nice story. I liked your portrayal of Cho, it certainly seemed a little different from the Cho we see in the books, but it still wasn't too OOC. I think you wrote her anxiety quite well, and the emotions came across nicely. Your narrative flowed well, especially with the dream(s), and it made a good read overall. The ending made me give a sad smile though, I like how you made it a happy ending of sorts, but as you said in your author's note, we all know that Cho's fears come true and he dies. The best thing of this story was the way you wove in the prompts. The dream part (about dragon blood uses) was kind of funny (but clever) and the flourishing in the face of adversity was a clear message too.

One thing kind of got me though, the way Madam Pomfrey snapped at the two girls when they visited her wasn't very much like her. In my opinion, even if its 4 AM, she would still be concerned and kind. But that's just me perhaps =)

Apart from that, this made a nice read. Good work!

9/10

Cheers!
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Review #2, by maskedmuggle Dreaming of Dragons

13th July 2012:
Hey!

Like I said before, I liked this! It was cool how you interweaved her worries about the Tournament with her dreams and it was more original and interesting actually having Cho become like a competitor. All the prompts were included really well. I liked how Cho felt so real and realistic, especially how she tried to stay strong even though she was kinda in denial.. Also with Marietta - she felt slightly annoying when she was complaining, but it was nice to also show the friendship side of her.

I'm a sucker for happy endings so the appearance of Cedric at the end was sweet too - I think the last couple of lines sound better than what you had before! All in all, a nicely written fic :)

- MM

Author's Response: Hey! Thanks for reviewing(:

I'm glad you thought Cho and Marietta felt real, because that's always one of my main goals when I write. Marietta was sort of annoying, which is how I've always imagined her and how OOTP shows her, but I also wanted to give her a nicer side.

I'm glad you liked it!

LLL(:


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Review #3, by DracoFerret11 Dreaming of Dragons

13th July 2012:
Hey there! This is DarkRose from the forums. Great job with this entry! I think you did Ravenclaw proud. I wouldn't have thought to write the prompts in this way. I definitely felt quite bad for Cho throughout this, especially at the end. You mentioned it in the Author's Note, but it was just so depressingly prophetic. :[ I wish Cedric hadn't died! I know it was necessary for the series, but still...and after reading so many Cho stories for this challenge, I feel so bad for her! Man...Jo Rowling just makes me cry. Anyhow! Well done with the prompts and this story. Great job!

--Emily

Author's Response: Aww, thanks! One of my main goals while writing this was actually to try and write the prompts originally, so I'm glad I managed that(: I know what you mean about Cho and Cedric, writing this made me feel so bad for both of them:(

Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it(:

LLL(:


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Review #4, by Alopex Dreaming of Dragons

12th July 2012:
Hm, this is interesting, reading a story that takes place BEFORE the Triwizard Tournament's first task occurs! (If I haven't confused the timeline, which is possible.) I think this is the first of Ravenclaw's stories I've read that takes place so early chronologically, aside from one involving time travel, which doesn't quite count.

I thought you worked the prompts in pretty well. The way you worked in the uses of dragon's blood was different too, having someone talk about it in their sleep. I liked that you had Marietta be an important or "big" character in this story too. She's not often featured, so that was different. Good job. :)

Author's Response: Wow, really? I hadn't actually noticed that. Interesting(:

Thanks! One of my main goals while writing this was to work the prompts in originally, since there were so many entries and I didn't want mine to be almost identical to someone else's:P Personally, I really enjoyed writing Marietta simply because she's portrayed as the bad guy in OTP, so I had fun getting to explore her character:D

Thanks for reviewing!

LLL(:


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Review #5, by charlottetrips Dreaming of Dragons

11th July 2012:
Yup, what you put in your authorís note is totally how I feel at the end of this story. We all know what happens in the end so her Ravenclaw intuition is totally buzzing right now. Your dialogue and interaction was pretty good here and brought the story to life. I still donít like Marietta though :P

xChar

Author's Response: Yesss! Score on dialogue! I've always been a little worried about my dialogue, so I'm glad you thought it was good(: Haha, I honestly don't like her either:P

Thanks for reviewing!

LLL(:


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Review #6, by WitnesstoitAll Dreaming of Dragons

11th July 2012:
Hey!

This is nice entry piece!! It was lovely to see a moment that happened before Cedric's death, and YES it was sad to see her coming to accept his role in the tournament knowing how it ends up ending.

Good job!

Author's Response: Thanks so much for reviewing! I'm glad you liked it(:

LLL(:


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