I've been trying to read as many of the task entries as I can, and this is the first Ravnclaw one I've made it to, so I was really curious to see what you woud do with Cho.
I vaguely remember hearing something about Cho being married to a Muggle, and I liked how you used that here. It was also very original to use Cho's grandaughter as the protaganist, and it was easyto picture Cho as a wise and protctve grandparent.
The story flowed very well, and it provided suspence for the confrontation with the dragon, as well as giving us good insights into their haracters and family life.
This was a very unique take on the challenge and made excellent use of the prompts!Author's Response: Hi, sorry for being so horrible at responding!
I'm glad that you liked the flow and that there was suspense. I was definitely trying to make it somewhat different as we were all using the same prompts! Report Review
Hello, Char - this was a really different and interesting take on the house cup task. I thought the idea of using Cho's relative as the protagonist very clever, and very original. You wove in the prompts really well, and I think you did a great job of delivering an interesting one-shot. Well done!Author's Response: Thank you! I'm happy you found it different :) Report Review
Hey there! This is DarkRose from the forums. Great job with this story! I would never have thought to do something Next-Gen when I knew I needed to include Cho. Well done! I think this is quite original. Loved your OCs and their adventure. It was definitely action-packed! I liked how you tied everything together with the flashbacks and the present-day. And I loved the implication of a relationship between Cho's granddaughter and Draco's grandson. Awesome! Yay Malfoy family! (My Draco-love got a little excited there. ;] ) So! I think you really handled the prompts well and you wrote a very nice story. Great job! 'Claws for the Cup! Yay!
--EmilyAuthor's Response: Yay for originality (which honestly was a bit hard as we were all working with the same prompts). I had to put some Malfoy love in there because I love putting in some redemption in my pieces :)
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I feel like I keep saying, "Wow, what a unique take on the prompt!" Earlier today when I was reading, I was noticing all the similar elements many of the stories share (and since everyone was working with the same prompts, that's to be expected), but now I'm noticing the differences. Anyway, I think this is the first Ravenclaw story I've read that doesn't have Cho as the main, "active" character. Obviously, she is an important presence, but she's not the narrator. I really like that approach, moving so far into the future and incorporating little details from the past (like the rock).
The way you incorporated the flashbacks was nice as well. I'm usually a huge critic/skeptic of flashbacks, but these fit nicely. You also incorporated the various prompts well also. Nice job!Author's Response: Hee, I noticed that too in reading through the Claw stories. We're so different in how we approach the same prompts though obviously there are similarities.
I'm glad that the flashbacks worked for you. For some reason when I read the Task One prompts I was instantly like "Grandmother Cho!" - I guess I just have a fondness for old Asian ladies - being Asian myself :) Report Review
Ahh I really loved this! The plot is so, so original and unique, and the writing itself is brilliant! I loved how it was focused on Cho, but also on her grandchild! Every other fic I have read so far is focused solely on a young-ish Cho, so I love how she's a grandmother here, and Eun Sun - a really interesting character. I really liked the backstory of Cho, and her characterisation as well - both felt really plausible and realistic. I liked Orion too - a strange pairing but one that works - and he seems like such a nice boy!
So I love that one of the uses of dragon's blood is as a powerful healing serum. And I really love that they went dragon hunting. I loved how they used a sleeping draught but the Black woke up when they were extracting the blood, hehe. Everything plot-wise just fitted in so well together!
The writing itself is fantastic - the story was really well told and so interesting to read. The parentheses were used well - I loved it when it was used to show Cho's words to Eun Sun. I'm less sure of the really large, third and fourth bits - in one way it spoils it slightly - it's no longer Cho's advice echoing to Eun Sun, but it is still a really nicely done reflection of what happened. All in all, I really enjoyed this! A really clever well-written story with a great use of the prompts! :)
- MMAuthor's Response: Hey! Thanks so much for this extremely lovely review! I'm so happy you picked up on all the different bits of Eun Sun and her life wtih Cho. I'm glad it all fit together. I get what you mean on the parentheses flashbacks...maybe I'll fix that up later :) Report Review
Wow--this is very original; I loved the way you incorporated dragons and Cho together. Also--I love the naming of the Malfoys ;)Author's Response: Thank you! On the naming, I HAD to find more star constellations to go after Scorpius :) Report Review
I'm trying to finish reading and reviewing all of the amazing Claw entries before voting, and so here I am!!! I thought this was a very different take on the story prompts provided. It continues to amaze me how unique all of the stories are despite generally being about dragons and Cho. I liked seeing her through the eyes of her granddaughter!! And giggled at the idea of her having a pet blast ended skewt. :) Very nicely done.
-MelissaAuthor's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)
The blast ended skrewt was my fave :) Report Review
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